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Beautiful Monster Chapter 1

August 4, 2010
By Future_author SILVER, Baltimore, Maryland
Future_author SILVER, Baltimore, Maryland
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Some secrets can hurt, but sometimes they keep you safe, but all secrets are found out sooner or later.

Chapter 1

I sat in my seat. I'm diferent than everyone else. Like always I wasn't paying attention to what the teacher was saying and like always boys were starring at me, a few boys were trying to get my attention. Luckily no one knows my history.

My name is Nikki, Nicole Stone. My sister, Emma and I, were walking on a trail in the forest near our home.

Suddenly, a guy came out from a bush and attacked us. Then I blacked out.

I woke up to a burning throat.

Emma was still on the ground.

"Emma." I whispered.

My throat was starting to get worse.

I saw a deer just at the river next to us.

River? We were on the trail when that guy showed up.

My instincts took over and I attacked the deer.

I drunk it's blood. It tasted good. It's body went limp and I through it to the river.

I walked back to where Emma was.

Emma was standing up now.

"What happened?" She asked.

"I don't know." I said.

"Why does my throat burn?" She asked.

"You need blood." I said quietly.

"Blood? You mean like a vampire." She said.

I nodded.

I was year older than her.

I was 16 she was just about to turn 15 a few days later.

After that day, we never saw our parents and we have had to survive on blood. We were always together as sisters.

I came back to the world. I had dozed off.

The teacher was standing in front of me.

"Ms. Stone, Would you care to answer that last question?" She always does that to bother me.

Emma and I discovered a few powers.

We can read minds of any person we want.

I starred into her eyes until I felt my shield drop.

'She will never guess this one.' She thought. ' Having a lesson on mythical creatures is great. Especially on how they got rid of witches in old times.'

"They got rid of witches by burning them. The burning times." I answered.

She looked angry at her self.

I smiled.

She walked away.

The author's comments:
I've had this in mind for months but never had a name. Then I heard a song, Beautiful Monster by Ne-yo and it fit in perfectly so this story was born thanks to Ne-Yo

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on Nov. 29 2011 at 3:24 pm
Savannalore SILVER, North Branch, South Dakota
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Art is all about mistakes and knowing which ones to keep.

Good writing, but I think it's time to leave the vampire themes behind. Half the stories on this website are about vamps.

on Nov. 29 2011 at 11:25 am
LittleFlutiePie GOLD, Greeneville, Tennessee
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This is really good, but like Blue4 said, it can use some details. Otherwise, very nice, and the flashback sets a good tone. Keep it up :)

AngelS SILVER said...
on Oct. 7 2010 at 3:44 pm
AngelS SILVER, Gresham, Oregon
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"You may kill me, but you may never insult me. Who am I?"... "Captain Jack Sparrow." - Pirates of the Caribbean: At World's End

Check out my story "Angel". Thanks.

on Aug. 24 2010 at 2:11 pm
Blue4indigo PLATINUM, Sturbridge, Connecticut
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Great, you have a way of telling a good story, a wonderful begining needs a great continuation...

My instincts took over and I attacked the deer.

"My instincts took over and I attacked the deer. I drunk it's blood. It tasted good. It's body went limp and I through it to the river" maybe a little more detail here: how did Nicole kill it, what did she feel, did the deer fight back? This is a good place to elaborate. Otherwise awesome! :)

By the way, can you read some of my stories, rate, and critisize? I'd appreciate that.

on Aug. 24 2010 at 11:32 am
THEIMPACT77 BRONZE, Florence, Kentucky
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this is realy good


on Aug. 15 2010 at 1:54 pm
mudpuppy BRONZE, Orangeburg, South Carolina
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Life is like a box of cheese and flower petal sometimes it's soft and sweet, sometimes it just plain stinks. - M.J.

I really like this and the title-perfect! I especially like the end!