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Beauitful Ashes

September 8, 2010
By Roisin GOLD, Peabody, Massachusetts
Roisin GOLD, Peabody, Massachusetts
10 articles 5 photos 28 comments

I breathed in a little bit of the salty air. I looked around, at the faces, some of which I have never seen before today. Some crying, some closing their eyes. These strangers came up to me, and with their deepest sympathy, apologize to me, apologize to me as if I have known them for years. I took one last deep breath and with a few slow nods of the head from a couple people, I turned around and headed for the water. I could feel the warmth in the sand disappearing along with the night, as the sun was vanishing behind the infinite ocean. The palm trees seemed to sway with a little more respect today. I clenched the lilac decorated vase close to me, for inside held my most prized possession. Inside, was the most irreplaceable mechanism to ever walk beside me, hold my hand, and love me. I unscrewed the top of the vase, and tipped it slightly. She was gone. But the life she once lived was full of love and laughter. Although the people gathered today were here, feeling sorry for me, it was in fact I who pitied them, for they had not known her like I did, and nor will they ever get the chance. I watched as the most beautiful ashes I have ever seen, were being carried by the wind and dispersed across the sea. And as I looked up in relief and almost, a sense of freedom. Then, as if she had never left, I could see her warm smile.

The author's comments:
In school, i was given an assignment to write a story about a song the teacher played. The song was a spanish song. Played on a guitar, it was slow, it was very peaceful, but very sad. Then there was a small hint of happiness almost, and i felt i had tro include that. I hope you like my representation of the song (:

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on Dec. 29 2011 at 11:08 pm
miniko PLATINUM, Germantowm, Maryland
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Favorite Quote:
i never said most of the things i said- yogi berra

this is so amazing i can picture everything going on here....

Roisin GOLD said...
on Sep. 16 2010 at 2:09 pm
Roisin GOLD, Peabody, Massachusetts
10 articles 5 photos 28 comments
Thank You so much! I am actually working on writing and making this into a longer story. It is actually a lot harder than i thought. But as soon as i feel satisfied i will definitely publish the rest! Until then, thank you for commenting <3

on Sep. 15 2010 at 5:39 pm
BubblyBurlee BRONZE, Mt. Olive, Illinois
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This is extremely beautiful. You should write more on it(: That would be pretty cool.