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The Subway Part 1

August 25, 2010
By OfficialApprover PLATINUM, Orefield, Pennsylvania
OfficialApprover PLATINUM, Orefield, Pennsylvania
48 articles 0 photos 1754 comments

Favorite Quote:
Grab life by the balls. -Slobberknocker
We cannot change the cards we're dealt just how we play the hand
Experience is what you get when you didn't get what you wanted
It's pretty easy to be smart when you're parroting smart people
-Randy Pausch


A hot blast of air whistled past my face, filling my nose, seeping into my mouth, overwhelming my senses with the taste of smoke and garbage. A scent I still hadn’t gotten used to. But then again, I’d only been down here for about ten minutes.

The subway. Glorious subway. Today would be my first time riding one—which, some of my friends had remarked by text, showed how sadly deprived I was.

I was what you could call a “small town” girl. My small Pennsylvania suburb had no taxis, no subways, and very few buses—I got everywhere by car.

But now I was stuck in New York City for three months, and possibly for good, if everything went well. My dad’s job had him transferred here over the summer, but they’d hinted that if things worked out, the post might be permanent. My parents were thrilled with the new opportunity—and of course the marginally larger pay check didn’t hurt. My sister and I weren’t quite as pleased.

That said, it wasn’t all bad. Beneath all the stink and the filth and the noise, New York City held many wonders. And in my humble opinion, the subway was one of them.

I was buzzing with excitement. I finally got to ride on a subway! I’d always been very curious about them. My family, all of whom had already ridden one, assured me they were nothing special, but that couldn’t put a damper on my spirits.

I was perched on the edge of the platform, leaning over, examining the old, grimy metal tracks below. They were littered with trash, leftover food and supplies, and oil and water combined to form a dirty trail of liquid between the rails.

“Be careful Aya!” my mom called, and I rolled my eyes. I had excellent balance. If I could flip in the air over a four-foot-high four-inch-wide beam, couldn’t I manage not to fall off the platform? My sister Sierra seemed to sense what I was thinking, and she grinned. My dad was nowhere in sight. He wouldn’t arrive until a day or two later; apparently there were some last-minute business interactions to attend to.

I wasn’t paying attention. It happened out of nowhere.

Suddenly I felt something slam into me. Perhaps it was a particularly powerful gust of wind; perhaps it was something else. But whatever it was, it sent me tumbling down to the tracks below.


The author's comments:
I was randomly inspired for this short story while briefly staying in NYC. Enjoy.

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on Oct. 11 2010 at 12:37 pm
OfficialApprover PLATINUM, Orefield, Pennsylvania
48 articles 0 photos 1754 comments

Favorite Quote:
Grab life by the balls. -Slobberknocker
We cannot change the cards we're dealt just how we play the hand
Experience is what you get when you didn't get what you wanted
It's pretty easy to be smart when you're parroting smart people
-Randy Pausch

Thanks! :)

on Oct. 11 2010 at 12:30 pm
_Rose_Red_ BRONZE, Many, Louisiana
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Favorite Quote:
"Sometimes the dreams that come true, are the dreams that you never even knew you had!"

Cool this is great!

on Oct. 10 2010 at 7:02 pm
OfficialApprover PLATINUM, Orefield, Pennsylvania
48 articles 0 photos 1754 comments

Favorite Quote:
Grab life by the balls. -Slobberknocker
We cannot change the cards we're dealt just how we play the hand
Experience is what you get when you didn't get what you wanted
It's pretty easy to be smart when you're parroting smart people
-Randy Pausch

Haha thank you!

on Oct. 10 2010 at 3:50 pm
KeepReading BRONZE, Kansas City, Missouri
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Favorite Quote:
“So the writer who breeds more words than he needs, is making a chore for the reader who reads.”
―Dr. Seuss

omg, i NEED to read the next part!!!

on Sep. 19 2010 at 5:26 pm
OfficialApprover PLATINUM, Orefield, Pennsylvania
48 articles 0 photos 1754 comments

Favorite Quote:
Grab life by the balls. -Slobberknocker
We cannot change the cards we're dealt just how we play the hand
Experience is what you get when you didn't get what you wanted
It's pretty easy to be smart when you're parroting smart people
-Randy Pausch

Teehee:D What gave it away?

 

Only differences: name and experience.


on Sep. 19 2010 at 5:05 pm
Just.A.Dream SILVER, Lake Geneva, Wisconsin
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Part of the J7X team. :)

YOU. :D               

on Sep. 19 2010 at 4:26 pm
OfficialApprover PLATINUM, Orefield, Pennsylvania
48 articles 0 photos 1754 comments

Favorite Quote:
Grab life by the balls. -Slobberknocker
We cannot change the cards we're dealt just how we play the hand
Experience is what you get when you didn't get what you wanted
It's pretty easy to be smart when you're parroting smart people
-Randy Pausch

Thanks:D Guess who Aya is modeled after.

on Sep. 19 2010 at 4:23 pm
Just.A.Dream SILVER, Lake Geneva, Wisconsin
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Part of the J7X team. :)

It sounds really realistic. The main character seems so real and sounds like somebody I could know; you did a great job expressing her personality!

on Sep. 14 2010 at 5:54 am
OfficialApprover PLATINUM, Orefield, Pennsylvania
48 articles 0 photos 1754 comments

Favorite Quote:
Grab life by the balls. -Slobberknocker
We cannot change the cards we're dealt just how we play the hand
Experience is what you get when you didn't get what you wanted
It's pretty easy to be smart when you're parroting smart people
-Randy Pausch

Haha thanks:D Aya is one of my best characters.

on Sep. 13 2010 at 10:35 pm
apocalyptigirl BRONZE, Staunton, Virginia
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Favorite Quote:
"DON'T PANIC." ~from The Hitchhiker's Guide to the Galaxy by Douglas Adams

I took an instant liking to Aya. She's realistic, believable, and a good mix of practical/adventurous. *finds next part*

on Sep. 7 2010 at 7:56 pm
OfficialApprover PLATINUM, Orefield, Pennsylvania
48 articles 0 photos 1754 comments

Favorite Quote:
Grab life by the balls. -Slobberknocker
We cannot change the cards we're dealt just how we play the hand
Experience is what you get when you didn't get what you wanted
It's pretty easy to be smart when you're parroting smart people
-Randy Pausch

Thanks! Sure.

on Sep. 7 2010 at 9:11 am
DiamondsIntheGrass GOLD, Martinsville, New Jersey
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Favorite Quote:
Worry is simply a misuse of the imagination.

wow this is good. pretty darn awesome, and really realistic.  hey, can you take a look at one of my poems? thanks.