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EC+AM=4ever Chapter 5

September 24, 2009
By TeamJacobArchuleta ELITE, Chicago, Illinois
TeamJacobArchuleta ELITE, Chicago, Illinois
183 articles 7 photos 484 comments

Favorite Quote:
He's the one I call in the middle of the night. He's the one who makes everything alright. He loves me with no regret...I just haven't found him yet.


June 6, 2009
10:00 p.m.
Evalynne's House


"Hey," Ash greeted me as I walked outside. Once Ash had flickered his light, I grabbed a jacket and silently snuck out the front door.

"Hey," I whispered back.

"Don't worry, we won't have to whisper once we get to the park." Then he took my hand and we strolled down the sidewalk.

My entire body warmed just from coming in contact with him. I loved the feeling of his larger, stronger hand gripping my smaller, more fragile one. I snuck a glance at him from the corner of my eye.

He was just so hot! Nothing like any of the other boys that went to my school. Compared to them, he was like one of those Abercrombie and Fitch models. Like a beautiful rose in a field of plain, ugly dandelions.

We arrived at the park, sitting next to each other on the swings. "You look beautiful tonight." Ash said to me. I had traded my glasses for contacts, and ran a comb through my hair before I came.

I usually never wore contacts because I hated putting them in my eyes, but tonight was special. I had to look good tonight for Ash. "Thanks," I replied.

"Sorry about my mom. She's not very good company to invite over."

"No, that's ok. My parents and I didn't mind." I assured him.

"She never used to be like this. But ever since..." He trailed off at the end, looking over at me as if he just remembered I was sitting next to him.

"Ever since what?" I asked.

"Ever since, um...the divorce." he replied, sounding a bit unsure of himself.

"Oh, she was pretty angry about it?"

"Yeah, but she wasn't exactly mad about it, just...uspet. It seems like ever since the divorce she's been really empty. You know what I mean?"

"Yeah, I know what you mean." I said.

"I just hate seeing her like this because I know it was all my fault."

"I'm sure it wasn't your fault at all! Lots of people get divorced, you can't help it." I didn't want him to blame himself for his mom's unhapiness. It just wasn't right.

"Right, lots of people divorce." His voice sounded distant like he was lost in thought. He looked away from me for a moment.

"Well we didn't come here to talk about our parents anyways. We came here so that he could be alone together." I reminded him, trying to change the subject.

"Yeah, you're right." He turned back to me and tucked a strand of hair behind my ear. "So no glasses tonight?"

"No, I decided to go with contacts." I replied.

"Well I think you look gorgeous either way."

I blushed, "Aw, that's sweet."

"Yeah, I'm just so happy to finally get the chance to be alone with you. You know, ever since the first day I saw you, I've a bit of a crush on you. I just didn't know if you felt the same about me."

"Well I've actually felt exactly the same as you. I've had a crush on you too." I confessed.

"So if we both like each other, then does this mean we're boyfriend and girlfriend?" he asked.

"I think it does, what about you?"

"I think it does too."

"So we're officially boyfriend and girlfriend?"

"Yep," Then he leaned over and kissed me. It was soft and gentle and sent chills through my body. "Sealed with a kiss,"

A slow smile spread across my face. "It's so beautiful sitting out here at night," I said to myself. "Looking up at all the stars,"

"They're nothing compared to you."

"You're not too bad yourself." I replied playfully. For a moment we just sat there, gazing up at the stars.

Then Ash grabbed my arm, "Follow me," He led me over to a tree and picked up a sharp stone laying next to it.

"What are you doing?" I asked him.

And then he carved something into the tree: EC+AM=4ever

"I've never actually done this before, but I've always wanted to. I've seen it done in so many movies and I just think it's romantic." Ash replied.

"So do I. Now this is like, our special tree." I laughed at how dorky I sounded and Ash did too.

"Yeah, it is." he agreed. And I knew that right then and there, I had fallen in love with Ash. I never wanted that night to end. But as we were talking under our tree, bright headlights came into view.

"Ash, what are you doing out here so late?" Ms. Mongolia demanded, getting out of her car. "I've been driving around, looking for you for fiteen minutes!"

"Sorry, Mom, I was just--"

"You know what, I don't care." she cut him off mid-sentence. "Get in the car, we're going home." She shot one deathly glance at me before turning on her heel and stalking off towards her car.

"I'm so sorry. I didn't think she would even realize I left." Ash apologized.

"It's ok. It isn't your fault." I said. Then he smiled weakly and walked away.

I stood up and began walking back to my own house. A perfect moment with Ash ruined once again, by Ms. Mongolia. I needed to make up a nickname for her like I did for Julianne. The Queen of Mean, that fit her perfectly.



Dear Diary,

Yesterday night was amazing. Ash and I really connected. He even kissed me! It was perfect, absolutely perfect.

Until The Queen of Mean ruined it all! I hate Ms. Mongolia so much! What's her deal anyways? I know she had a rough divorce with her husband, but that gives her no right to be such a witch!

And it definitely doesn't give her any right to completely destroy Ash's life either! I knew there had to be more to it than just the divorce. She had have some other reason to act the way she does. And Kristy and I are going to find out what it is.

No matter what it takes.


I walked into Sadie's, spotted Kristy, and walked over to the table she was sitting at.

"Hey, I have some big news!" I cried.

"Yeah, so do I." Her face was grim.

"Me first!" I declared. "Yesterday night, I kissed Ash! Oh my gosh, Kristy, it was perfect! But then The Queen of Mean showed up and made him come home."

"Who's The Queen of Mean?" she asked.

"Oh, that's what I call Ash's mom now."

"Oh, well I really need to tell you something that I found out during my research."

"Wait, there's more! Ash and I snuck out last night and went to the park. Then we were sitting on the swings, talking and he told me I looked beautiful. It was so sweet!"

"Yeah, speaking of that, where are your glasses?" she asked me.

"From now on, I'm going to wear contacts. Especially for Ash! Oh, and I haven't even gotten to the best part yet! He carved EC+AM=4ever into a tree to represent our relationship! Isn't that so sweet?"

"Yeah, it is, but I need to tell you something." she said, her voice dead serious.

"Wait, let me just tell you what I found out for research first. His mom works at Staples, the company part, and her and his dad got a divorce. She didn't take it very well either."

Kristy opened her mouth to speak, but then a waiter approached our table. "Hello, ladies, what can I get for you today?"

"I'll just have a can of Diet Coke, please." I said.

"Yeah, me too." Kristy added.

"Alright, your drinks will be here in a moment." He fake-smiled and then walked away. And I began thinking about Ash again.

"Oh Kristy, Ash's is perfect, he really is! I never thought I'd meet anybody like him. I feel like he's everything I ever wanted."

She sighed deeply, "There's something you should know about him."

"Here are your drinks," the waiter said, setting our cans of pop down on the table.

"Thank you," I replied. "Now what were you saying?" I asked Kristy.

"There's something you should know about Ash. His parents didn't get a divorce." she told me.

"Well then why don't they live together?"

"Because Mr. Mongolia is dead. Ash killed him."


The author's comments:
This is chapter 5 of the novel I'm working on. And thanks for everyone who's following along with the story, I really hope you like it!

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zoeyvictoria said...
on May. 5 2011 at 10:36 am
zoeyvictoria, Newport News, Virginia
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Favorite Quote:
misbehavior is a key attribute of true genius

love the story kinda freaky with the whole "istillloveyoueventhoughyoujustkilledyourdadandgotsent to jail thing. but love you and your story ! p.s. srry i'm kinda wierd.. do not take it the wrong way..

on Mar. 10 2011 at 11:20 am
book.junkie GOLD, Kingston, Other
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it is true i never tought about it like that

on Mar. 10 2011 at 11:17 am
book.junkie GOLD, Kingston, Other
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i really like this chapter but it's a bit too flat it just landed there dead as i read the last lines. i'm not telling you how to write your beautiful articles but if it comes out to be like some deathly family secret you could make ash lie or something and in the end there's some unhappy ending (really hate unhappy endigs though) like ash has some mental problem and goes to some hospital but still the narrator's love for him still grows. so no matter what..........

EC+AM= 4ever.....


on Jan. 13 2011 at 1:52 pm
xXmusicluvr4lifeXx BRONZE, Milwaukee, Wisconsin
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ok so i'm in love with your work but i have to say that this chapter did move just a little too fast...like how she said that she knew she was in love with him already...besides that it was AHHHMAAZING though :)

on Jan. 2 2011 at 9:54 am
SoftballismylifeBobo5 SILVER, Byron, New York
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Favorite Quote:
those who mind dont matter those who matter dont mind; you will always miss 100% of the shots you dont take; forget the risk take the fall if its what you want its worth it all<3

for some reason i feel like "The queen of mean" abuses Ash. Oh, and how i see him is boy longish flippy hair, blue eyes to die for. realllly handsome :) i love this

on Jul. 19 2010 at 6:30 pm
TeamJacobArchuleta ELITE, Chicago, Illinois
183 articles 7 photos 484 comments

Favorite Quote:
He's the one I call in the middle of the night. He's the one who makes everything alright. He loves me with no regret...I just haven't found him yet.

Haha yeah I tend to get all overexcited about what I'm writing and then it ends up all rushed lol...but I'm glad you like it :)

P. said...
on Jul. 18 2010 at 11:47 pm
i liked how dorky you made them both sound, but yet totally cute. Although, I thought it moved a little too fast. I mean, they go on one half date, and already they are vandalising trees with their love? And how is it possible that after less then two full days of knowing the guy, Evalynne is head over heals? Good work, but just try not to rush things so much!

on Jul. 14 2010 at 6:12 pm
TeamJacobArchuleta ELITE, Chicago, Illinois
183 articles 7 photos 484 comments

Favorite Quote:
He's the one I call in the middle of the night. He's the one who makes everything alright. He loves me with no regret...I just haven't found him yet.

well i'm glad u like it....and ash is 18 & evalynne is 17 :)

on Jul. 14 2010 at 10:18 am
pinkypromise23 PLATINUM, Cranston, Rhode Island
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i know that you believe you understand what you think i said, but im not sure you realize that what you heard is not what i meant.

woahhh! not expecting that! and the whole thing was a little rushed, with the whole telling her he liked her and then kissing...but other then that im compleatly hooked! the story line is amazing and the ending was totally unexpected. im probably going to sit here until i finish the whole book! one question though how old are they? and amazing job!!

on May. 8 2010 at 11:29 pm
TeamJacobArchuleta ELITE, Chicago, Illinois
183 articles 7 photos 484 comments

Favorite Quote:
He's the one I call in the middle of the night. He's the one who makes everything alright. He loves me with no regret...I just haven't found him yet.

aw thanx :)

on May. 8 2010 at 11:01 pm
romancewriter13 BRONZE, Brooklyn, New York
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OMG!!!! WAS NOT EXPECTING THAT!!!! once again your writing is soooooo good! i wish i could write like you!

on May. 1 2010 at 10:17 am
Sketched97 PLATINUM, Silver Spring, Maryland
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OMG!! woahh. I feel like the whole park thing was awkward. Like, how he's like, your so pretty, and shes like thats sweet and hes like yeah... you know? And I hate how she is wearing contacts for him.

But Im still totally hooked. Your an amazing writer!!


on Mar. 20 2010 at 8:39 pm
TeamJacobArchuleta ELITE, Chicago, Illinois
183 articles 7 photos 484 comments

Favorite Quote:
He's the one I call in the middle of the night. He's the one who makes everything alright. He loves me with no regret...I just haven't found him yet.

my cousin said the same thing when she read this lol :)

on Mar. 19 2010 at 6:56 pm
deardiary BRONZE, Saskatoon, Other
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Favorite Quote:
It is a truth universally acknowedged, that a single man in possession of a good fortune, must be in want of a wife. -Pride and Prejudice

whoa intense. ash is like every girl's dream guy. kinda reminds me of edward from twilight to tell u the truth.

on Feb. 3 2010 at 10:38 am
SaraRoxsHerSox SILVER, McVeytown, Pennsylvania
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"Brochacho!"

Oh My Gosh. The end of this one was a cliffhanger! I can't wait to read the next one!

on Nov. 28 2009 at 11:06 am
ajparker BRONZE, Robinson, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
If its not noon yet don't bother waking me up! ;)

I did too!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

on Nov. 10 2009 at 5:35 pm
Lost-In-Life GOLD, Whitby, Other
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Favorite Quote:
It's never to late, if it weren't for the last minute many things would never get done!

A little rushed, but amazing!!!! I have been reading through the series and this one stuck out so much I just had to comment. Finding chapter 6 right now!

on Oct. 23 2009 at 6:55 pm
noelleism PLATINUM, Russellville, Alabama
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Favorite Quote:
I can not dwell on the past, and I will not live on what the future may hold, but yet take comfort and find perpose in the second yet to come.

yeah i know i'm a little bit behind but whatev'. GOOD so far but I still htink your a little bit to hasty I think there love should blossom some B-4 they kiss but the story line is captiveating. :)

on Oct. 9 2009 at 4:57 pm
xxxVanessaxxx SILVER, Alexander, Arkansas
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Favorite Quote:
"i CaNt Be AwAy fRoM hEr BeLlA, iT hUrTs ToO mUcH." (Jacob from the breaking dawn book)

i agree too, it's rushed but i can't wait for more. the first thought i had after reading the last words was: WHAT?!

on Oct. 4 2009 at 4:58 pm
BeautifulSimplicity BRONZE, St. Louis, Missouri
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Favorite Quote:
We keep it light, until it's time to go dark. Then we go pitch black.

again i dont agree with Anjo, and WAY TO DROP THE BOMB ON US DANG! THIS IS REALLY GOOD!