Daddy's Womb MAG

April 23, 2008
By Carl Haynes, Staten Island, NY

i asked my father if i could swim,
and he said that i would drown.
The Sea would imprison me – he said
if my feet had left the ground.

So i walked out to the water,
and cried out – how ’bout now!
He said, a little bit further, Son,
and then you’ll leave the ground.

i stepped on sand then stone,
from hollow ground to sturdy.
The sky was at my level as I
gazed at the birdie.

The Sea brought me a new idea,
the urge to flee to the high.

i asked my Father if i could fly,
and he said, sure, Son – go try.

i jumped as high as i could.
Still, i landed on the ground.
i saw my Father pull on a chain,
then i knew that i was bound.



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on Dec. 27 2009 at 8:19 pm
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on Dec. 26 2009 at 10:13 pm
fall_from_grace SILVER, Lakeside, Arizona
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Favorite Quote:
"Most people are other people. Their thoughts someone else's opinions, their lives a mimicry, their passions a quotation."
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This is sooooo good! I want to read more!!!!!

on Dec. 26 2009 at 10:06 pm
fall_from_grace SILVER, Lakeside, Arizona
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Favorite Quote:
"Most people are other people. Their thoughts someone else's opinions, their lives a mimicry, their passions a quotation."
-Oscar Wilde
(yes, I do note the irony in quoting this)

You are remarkable. I really adore this poem. It's complex and figurative enough to make you reread it, but somehow communicative enough to express pure feeling.

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on Dec. 26 2009 at 2:48 am
Ankit 00000, 000000, Other
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Man is born free but is in chains everywhere said Rosseau.

Your poem is right.

on Dec. 26 2009 at 12:54 am
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now that just made me fall head over heels for that. very intense. keep writing i want to read more.

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Very interesting....good use of figurative language.

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on Dec. 17 2009 at 2:53 pm
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not weird...just different in a weird way lol!

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on Dec. 17 2009 at 9:49 am
Holmes SILVER, Olathe, Kansas
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Favorite Quote:
"It's only when we've lost everything that we're free to do anything."- Fight Club

I really like this poem. I've read it many times and it just keeps giving me an awesome feeling. That's a great mind you have there.

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on Dec. 16 2009 at 3:35 pm
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I always knew looking back on the tears would make me laugh, but I never knew looking back on the laughs would make me cry - Anonymous

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on Dec. 15 2009 at 4:49 pm
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um, i would like to say that I have never been so entranced by a story as I was this one. And I kind of sound like any idiot because for once cannot find the words to describe how amazingly well written that was...

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