Daddy's Womb This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine.

April 23, 2008
i asked my father if i could swim,
and he said that i would drown.
The Sea would imprison me – he said
if my feet had left the ground.

So i walked out to the water,
and cried out – how ’bout now!
He said, a little bit further, Son,
and then you’ll leave the ground.

i stepped on sand then stone,
from hollow ground to sturdy.
The sky was at my level as I
gazed at the birdie.

The Sea brought me a new idea,
the urge to flee to the high.

i asked my Father if i could fly,
and he said, sure, Son – go try.

i jumped as high as i could.
Still, i landed on the ground.
i saw my Father pull on a chain,
then i knew that i was bound.

This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. This piece has been published in Teen Ink’s monthly print magazine.

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NewDreamer said...
Dec. 15, 2009 at 6:37 pm
Wonderfully done. Loved it.
M.A.C. said...
Dec. 15, 2009 at 4:49 pm
amazing. write more.
kristinas-writtings said...
Dec. 15, 2009 at 11:01 am
I love this story. you have done an amazing job. keep writting please. words can't even begin to descirbe how good this is.
StevImanary said...
Dec. 14, 2009 at 1:12 pm
Your an amazing writer! That was awsome!
vpitts3200 said...
Dec. 14, 2009 at 8:15 am
this poem is very very good it reads as though you put lots of time and thought into it. Good job keep it up
unicornlover said...
Dec. 14, 2009 at 7:06 am
omg :) its amazing.
Aubrey B. said...
Dec. 12, 2009 at 8:00 pm
pure, thoughfull. keep up the good work, its amazing!
lolsmileyface(= said...
Dec. 11, 2009 at 7:13 pm
l;oooooove this poem
im sorry can i ask but its bin like 3 mouths since i rote my poems and they havent bin aproved yet how long it took your poems to be approved
DAIMON said...
Dec. 11, 2009 at 5:59 pm
There has been Romeo and Juliet...Edward and Bella...I give Darian and Clara in...
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Jayla163 replied...
Dec. 26, 2009 at 12:54 am
now that just made me fall head over heels for that. very intense. keep writing i want to read more.
fall_from_grace replied...
Dec. 26, 2009 at 10:19 pm
I love this story. PLEASE make it possible for us to read more!
DAIMON said...
Dec. 11, 2009 at 5:57 pm
"RAZED EXPECTATIONS" It continues...
Her lovely green eyes shifted into hard emeralds.
“What do you know about me, Dare? And what’s so wrong with having dreams? And why are you talking to me like that? I was simply commenting on the sunset.” She tossed her red curls, clearly miffed.
I lifted my chin, and blew smoke in her face. It was easier on me when she was angry. I don’t know why she bothered with me. Why she was brave enough to confro... (more »)
Lucy4himnotu replied...
Dec. 14, 2009 at 2:08 pm
um, i would like to say that I have never been so entranced by a story as I was this one. And I kind of sound like any idiot because for once cannot find the words to describe how amazingly well written that was...
shaquillle said...
Dec. 11, 2009 at 11:43 am
i like your poem keep writing poems they are realy good.
Khris R. said...
Dec. 11, 2009 at 11:38 am
you're doining a great job keep it up and you will be as good as me
Khris R. replied...
Dec. 11, 2009 at 11:39 am
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yolo95 said...
Dec. 11, 2009 at 11:36 am
this is good keep up the good work
Khris R. replied...
Dec. 11, 2009 at 11:40 am
~Snickers~ said...
Dec. 9, 2009 at 1:16 pm
No words can discribe it. All i can say is Wow; and even that doesn't add to it
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