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i asked my father if i could swim,
and he said that i would drown.
The Sea would imprison me – he said
if my feet had left the ground.

So i walked out to the water,
and cried out – how ’bout now!
He said, a little bit further, Son,
and then you’ll leave the ground.

i stepped on sand then stone,
from hollow ground to sturdy.
The sky was at my level as I
gazed at the birdie.

The Sea brought me a new idea,
the urge to flee to the high.

i asked my Father if i could fly,
and he said, sure, Son – go try.

i jumped as high as i could.
Still, i landed on the ground.
i saw my Father pull on a chain,
then i knew that i was bound.

This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. This piece has been published in Teen Ink’s monthly print magazine.




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Andrea L. said...
Jun. 6, 2011 at 9:22 pm
love it!! filled w/ lotsa emotion
 
RanaHewezi1998 said...
Jun. 4, 2011 at 11:23 am
it has good rythmes!
 
Highbarfreak87 said...
Jun. 3, 2011 at 11:00 am
Its such an odd poem to follow but its good!'
 
thedreamer said...
Jun. 2, 2011 at 3:00 pm
this is truely a beautiful poem seriously it is
 
torivix said...
Jun. 1, 2011 at 6:59 pm
I love this! it's so... mysterious, yet so down to Earth. keep writing, please!!!
 
WeAllBurn said...
Jun. 1, 2011 at 3:27 pm

wow.

i am wordless.

<3

 
RahmaReads said...
May 29, 2011 at 2:28 pm
This is beautiful! You really have potential.
 
Rinilove32 said...
May 27, 2011 at 9:00 am
this poem is gorgeous!! i love it(:
 
Alicia :) replied...
May 27, 2011 at 10:53 am
Wonderful Poem !
 
Bdawg325 said...
May 27, 2011 at 7:55 am
Set up very well.
 
Faithful365 said...
May 26, 2011 at 2:39 pm
The peom was very well versed. You did a really good job at depicting what the protection of a parent can feel like.
 
krarthurs said...
May 26, 2011 at 2:08 pm
I loved this poem. The innocence is very apparent and the dialogue was perfect. Very good job, keep it up!
 
EyesofBlueFire said...
May 25, 2011 at 3:14 pm
I love this poem. It's deep, but leaves it so that your readers can interpret it in different ways. Very well written. :)
 
GabbyLynae13 said...
May 24, 2011 at 1:16 pm
LOVE IT....'nuff said
 
cara_ruegg said...
May 21, 2011 at 8:02 pm
Wow this is brilliant, and flowed very well.
 
Garcia_R. said...
May 20, 2011 at 2:52 pm
Mine will be up by Tuesday (:
 
Garcia_R. said...
May 20, 2011 at 2:51 pm
This is a great poem. check out mine
 
Alon_Freebird said...
May 19, 2011 at 1:37 am
great poem.. :)
i can relate to it and i hate it when parents think they can control us..
 
jasmine66 said...
May 15, 2011 at 2:21 pm
This is a great poem!! Keep it up
 
Emmaxoxo said...
May 14, 2011 at 2:09 pm
This poem is amazing. I view it so many times but it NEVER gets old.
 
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