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Daddy's Womb MAG

April 23, 2008
By Anonymous

i asked my father if i could swim,
and he said that i would drown.
The Sea would imprison me – he said
if my feet had left the ground.

So i walked out to the water,
and cried out – how ’bout now!
He said, a little bit further, Son,
and then you’ll leave the ground.

i stepped on sand then stone,
from hollow ground to sturdy.
The sky was at my level as I
gazed at the birdie.

The Sea brought me a new idea,
the urge to flee to the high.

i asked my Father if i could fly,
and he said, sure, Son – go try.

i jumped as high as i could.
Still, i landed on the ground.
i saw my Father pull on a chain,
then i knew that i was bound.



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emattox SILVER said...
on Nov. 16 2011 at 10:51 am
emattox SILVER, Onancock, Virginia
9 articles 1 photo 28 comments

Favorite Quote:
You must not lose faith in humanity. Humanity is an ocean; if a few drops of the ocean are dirty, the ocean does not become dirty. -Ghandi

I had to read this like five times before I could comprehend it :) The message is really good, definitely one of those that makes you think!

on Nov. 15 2011 at 6:12 pm
Kimmie_Kat SILVER, Orlando, Florida
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HAVE YOU GUYS EVER WONDERED HOW THESE POEMS GOT SOOOOOO POPULAR? HOE IS IT SO POPULAR? I WRITE GOOD POEMS TOO!

Adam said...
on Nov. 15 2011 at 9:16 am
This was a pretty cool and confusing story. My best friend drowned in a pond so it was a little sad that he say you will drown...

SassysGirl said...
on Nov. 15 2011 at 8:56 am
 I think this poem is really good as it uses a lot of description and good detail. why didnt the sons father let him him, but he let him fly?

PRDGirl BRONZE said...
on Nov. 15 2011 at 8:40 am
PRDGirl BRONZE, NY, New York
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Favorite Quote:
Live for tomorrow cuz yeserday is so in the passed

I think it was  just great.

on Nov. 14 2011 at 1:35 pm
TheWhiteFlower BRONZE, Greenville, South Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
No man can be called friendless who has God and the companionship of good books. ~Elizabeth Barrett Browning


bubbles.. said...
on Nov. 14 2011 at 6:49 am
bubbles.., Warren, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
Dont forget the bad. learn from it.

she deff does. i tell her everyday. and i give her a high five and help her out as much as i can. i love her. shes my fav teacher.

:)


on Nov. 13 2011 at 5:45 pm
JayJay1998 BRONZE, Lenexa, Kansas
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Favorite Quote:
"Inspiration exists, but it has to find you working." -Pablo Picasso

That was  amazing! 

on Nov. 13 2011 at 1:38 pm
MANGALOVER33 BRONZE, BROOKFIELD, Illinois
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Favorite Quote:
"What you've said can't be undone" The Fray

That's true. Tell your teacher they're awesome =) I don't think they hear it enough.

on Nov. 12 2011 at 4:54 pm
HannahLaRen SILVER, Atchison, Kansas
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Favorite Quote:
The harder you work, the harder it is to surrender.

Amazing poem, very deep, I love your choice of words. great job.! 

bubbles.. said...
on Nov. 10 2011 at 6:58 am
bubbles.., Warren, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
Dont forget the bad. learn from it.

one of my teachers always say its better to keep them wanting more. :)

on Nov. 9 2011 at 8:17 pm
MANGALOVER33 BRONZE, BROOKFIELD, Illinois
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Favorite Quote:
"What you've said can't be undone" The Fray

Yep. I guess it's best to leave some mystery in poems, to make them more interesting.

Dreammer GOLD said...
on Nov. 9 2011 at 3:08 pm
Dreammer GOLD, Montrose, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
Love is like quicksand the further you fall the harder it is to get out

Well written look at mine and comment please :) Oh yeah I'd like an honest opinion

bubbles.. said...
on Nov. 9 2011 at 6:39 am
bubbles.., Warren, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
Dont forget the bad. learn from it.

makes you wonder

 


DylanRock GOLD said...
on Nov. 8 2011 at 5:38 pm
DylanRock GOLD, Cork, Other
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Favorite Quote:
And in the end, the love you take is equal to the love you make.

I think maybe the metaphor of the chain is a strong one which pushes more towards prisoner than caring for safety, I'm unsure whether this is deliberate though.

DylanRock GOLD said...
on Nov. 8 2011 at 5:36 pm
DylanRock GOLD, Cork, Other
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Favorite Quote:
And in the end, the love you take is equal to the love you make.

Good writing. Personally though, I didn't like it. I felt I couldn't relate to it but that's just me. Saying that, it was written well. Well done on its success here!

on Nov. 8 2011 at 2:47 pm
Gracious PLATINUM, Go Away, Kansas
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Favorite Quote:
"life sucks and then you die, yeah, i should be so lucky"



-Jacob, Twilight

I’m still that girl who falls when she runs, Getting back up, because falling is fun.

Stop doingthis

on Nov. 8 2011 at 12:43 pm
babygirl576 PLATINUM, Marion, Michigan
34 articles 0 photos 33 comments

Favorite Quote:
You lied, and I cried. You're a jerk, so I was hurt. You're a
deceiver, But I was a believer. Sorry I wasted your time, I guess?

It doesnt make sense sorry, i like it, believe me i do, but it lost me half way through

ral97 BRONZE said...
on Nov. 8 2011 at 9:46 am
ral97 BRONZE, Audubon, Iowa
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Favorite Quote:
I'm the farmers daughter your momma warned you bout.

Wow this is AMAZING!! I love it. It really makes you think about it.

chris0911 said...
on Nov. 8 2011 at 8:28 am
chris0911, Lawton, Oklahoma
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Favorite Quote:
The wild honey suckle, "Smit with those charms, they must decay/I greive to see your future doom/ they decay-nor were those flowers more gay/the flower that did eden bloom."

check out old dusty flag