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i asked my father if i could swim,
and he said that i would drown.
The Sea would imprison me – he said
if my feet had left the ground.

So i walked out to the water,
and cried out – how ’bout now!
He said, a little bit further, Son,
and then you’ll leave the ground.

i stepped on sand then stone,
from hollow ground to sturdy.
The sky was at my level as I
gazed at the birdie.

The Sea brought me a new idea,
the urge to flee to the high.

i asked my Father if i could fly,
and he said, sure, Son – go try.

i jumped as high as i could.
Still, i landed on the ground.
i saw my Father pull on a chain,
then i knew that i was bound.

This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. This piece has been published in Teen Ink’s monthly print magazine.

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KayleedanceEnglund said...
Apr. 20, 2011 at 8:38 pm
This is Beautiful!
ExpRESsY0uRselF said...
Apr. 18, 2011 at 4:19 pm
This poem was great, it definitely deserves to be on the front page for as long as it was. I loved loved loved how it was such a great metaphor. Btw, if you have time, please check out, comment on, and rate my poems, The Girl Inside, You Are the Lyrics In Me, and Remembering Spring. Thanks so much! 8)
nonstopclem. said...
Apr. 16, 2011 at 8:47 pm
This is very thoughtfully and beautifully written.  It spells out my relationship with my father as well.  I loved it. Good work. :)
caycay15 said...
Apr. 15, 2011 at 8:29 pm
i am not trying to be negative and it may be just how i personaly comprehended it but i was unaware of the whole poem, it didnt make sense to me but keep it up i see that you obviously have fans so more power to ya keep up the creativity!:)
Daddyo said...
Apr. 15, 2011 at 1:38 pm
it was gucci
Melody V. said...
Apr. 15, 2011 at 1:36 pm
GraceSanchez said...
Apr. 15, 2011 at 1:30 pm
This is cute & shows that you really care about your dad.
Miranda M. said...
Apr. 15, 2011 at 1:26 pm
i dont really get the point of this poem
sonnetsrock replied...
Apr. 28, 2011 at 9:15 am
i donteth get itith eitherith.
LiveInTheMoment said...
Apr. 15, 2011 at 12:38 pm
This poem was beautifully written, and had so much emotion and strong feelings behind it. Your writing style is very unique too. I loved how you used lower case i's instead of capitals. If you can, please check out and comment on my first poem I submitted, The Girl Inside. Thanks!
Nyla114 said...
Apr. 15, 2011 at 11:22 am
I loved it!!!!!!
ilyib said...
Apr. 14, 2011 at 7:42 pm

i love it it was the grates poem iv read


WindDancer said...
Apr. 14, 2011 at 3:48 pm
So good! And so interesting- including the title. I'm a bit confused, but I also get it, which is something I like about poems- they say what you can't say on your own, if that makes sense.
coravecwriter said...
Apr. 14, 2011 at 3:32 pm
This is amazing!
bellebelle1997 said...
Apr. 13, 2011 at 5:53 pm
I really liked it, but to tell the truth, I'm a blonde so, naturally, it took me a minute to understand the end. But it is a terriffically written poem, and it is going in my bookmarks! I'm just so sorry that iI was in such a blonde mood when i read this!!!! ;P
Range replied...
Apr. 14, 2011 at 7:39 am
great!I like it.
jayjay8642 replied...
Apr. 19, 2011 at 9:36 pm
I LOVED this poem!!!I thought it was the most beautiful poem I read!!!! Unfortanately I'm not a blondie and don't have the excuse of being stupid and not getting it!!!...JKS!
Yasamen_Denise said...
Apr. 13, 2011 at 4:50 pm
This is a really good poem! I've shared it with some of my friends and it brought tears to their eyes
Evilgummysattack said...
Apr. 13, 2011 at 8:30 am
Really amazing. I actually started to cry, I read it over and over.
floragj This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Apr. 13, 2011 at 5:17 am
This is lovely. The rhyme scheme reminds me of a rhythmic undertow.
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