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i asked my father if i could swim,
and he said that i would drown.
The Sea would imprison me – he said
if my feet had left the ground.

So i walked out to the water,
and cried out – how ’bout now!
He said, a little bit further, Son,
and then you’ll leave the ground.

i stepped on sand then stone,
from hollow ground to sturdy.
The sky was at my level as I
gazed at the birdie.

The Sea brought me a new idea,
the urge to flee to the high.

i asked my Father if i could fly,
and he said, sure, Son – go try.

i jumped as high as i could.
Still, i landed on the ground.
i saw my Father pull on a chain,
then i knew that i was bound.

This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. This piece has been published in Teen Ink’s monthly print magazine.




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softballfreak said...
Apr. 11, 2011 at 9:26 am:
This is an awesome poem!!!!! I think you should just make it a little bot more clear!!! But other than that it is FABULOUS!!!!
 
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soccergoalie6 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Apr. 9, 2011 at 2:22 pm:
I don't want to be mean or anything but i dont get it could some one please explain?
 
KaitlynCallahan replied...
Apr. 10, 2011 at 10:38 am :
You can't understand a poem by reading it once or twice. Open your mind and read it again, I thought it was really good.
 
Kunabee replied...
Apr. 13, 2011 at 9:35 pm :

A lot of the time a poem is all about self interpretation.  It's hard to get an obscure not-at-all-prose poem exactly the way the author intended it.

I read it once through and understood it as the son trying and testing, and wanting to be free, but the father loved him and wanted to protect him so he didn't let him go.

If I read it again, chances are I'd see it a different way.

Also, writing down stuff is helpful.  Half of me explaining my specific inter... (more »)

 
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RideTheWave said...
Apr. 9, 2011 at 9:35 am:
THIS WAS AMAZING!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!REALLY GOOD!!!!!!!!! KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK!!!!
 
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Angie123 said...
Apr. 8, 2011 at 8:17 pm:
This is creative. I really like it :)
 
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HeArToNmYsLeEvE said...
Apr. 8, 2011 at 7:54 am:
despite what others may say this is a really good poem not confusing at all nice and to the point keep it up!
 
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byebyebeautiful said...
Apr. 7, 2011 at 12:53 pm:
it was amazing! you are a gifted person, keep up the good work! <3
 
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Merlin the Gerlin said...
Apr. 7, 2011 at 12:40 pm:
How is this a hot poem? What kind of poetry is this?
 
inspiredbytheworld replied...
Apr. 8, 2011 at 8:19 pm :
What kind of poetry is this? The good kind.
 
drmstarlet21 replied...
Apr. 13, 2011 at 7:08 pm :
Leave Merlin to their opinion and we'll leave you to your own.
 
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CarolineLover<3 said...
Apr. 5, 2011 at 8:13 pm:
This is a really great poem. Nice job and well done(: 
 
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FRED VS CHEESE said...
Apr. 5, 2011 at 11:23 am:
Hi my name is blanka fatu and this guy is really stupid and fat (colton) but stop copyin my work artard.
 
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fred fredburger yes said...
Apr. 5, 2011 at 11:16 am:
shut up cityboy 13 ur makin fun of my comment... YES!
 
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LIL(E) CHERRY said...
Apr. 5, 2011 at 9:35 am:
THIS WAS A HOT POEM I REALLY LOVED THIS IT BROUGHT BACK MERRIORES THANK YOU HOPE U MAKE MORE
 
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karenlovesyou(: said...
Apr. 4, 2011 at 5:32 pm:
AWESOME POEM(: YOU GOT TALENT!!!!!!
 
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Singergirl2012 said...
Apr. 4, 2011 at 4:55 pm:
sounds about like MY dad :p
 
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bbcly123 said...
Apr. 3, 2011 at 9:38 am:
i really did not understand why the title said daddies womb so it made want to read it AND HONESTLY IT WAS GOOD.
 
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X-CountryRunner said...
Apr. 2, 2011 at 4:45 pm:
Great Poem!!
 
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RandomPi said...
Apr. 2, 2011 at 5:05 am:
This is a lovely poem. Great job!
 
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