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i asked my father if i could swim,
and he said that i would drown.
The Sea would imprison me – he said
if my feet had left the ground.

So i walked out to the water,
and cried out – how ’bout now!
He said, a little bit further, Son,
and then you’ll leave the ground.

i stepped on sand then stone,
from hollow ground to sturdy.
The sky was at my level as I
gazed at the birdie.

The Sea brought me a new idea,
the urge to flee to the high.

i asked my Father if i could fly,
and he said, sure, Son – go try.

i jumped as high as i could.
Still, i landed on the ground.
i saw my Father pull on a chain,
then i knew that i was bound.

This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. This piece has been published in Teen Ink’s monthly print magazine.




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LiveLoveAnna said...
Aug. 27, 2011 at 11:15 pm:
This is so beautiful! Extremely touching and deep :)
 
brenthewren replied...
Sept. 7, 2011 at 3:53 pm :
"anonymous" needs to get a life everyone knows you didn't mean it like that,  "anonymous" apparently has a very dirty mind, to take it as such.
 
secretholder replied...
Sept. 7, 2011 at 8:44 pm :
i agree it wasnt meant 2 be 'inappropriate' so jst go get a life nd quit dis'n ppl cuz u kno u cant compare!!! thank u ndi 2 think it wuz an amazing poem nd u need 2 let ppl spread their wings sumtimes
 
LiveLoveAnna replied...
Sept. 23, 2011 at 10:29 pm :
I completely agree! Thanks for understanding.
 
LiveLoveAnna replied...
Sept. 23, 2011 at 10:36 pm :
And you are welcome :) You have an amzing talent and I cannot get over how beautiful this is. String emotions must have been felt to write something so powerful. Never stop writting.
 
RayBaytheDinosaur replied...
Oct. 7, 2011 at 3:36 pm :
Geezz yu people are ridiculus. she said it was touching and deep. thats it. no hidden meaning >.> gosh everythings gotta have some secret little message now
 
RayBaytheDinosaur replied...
Oct. 7, 2011 at 3:39 pm :
I meant the first three people not yu last ones
 
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yousaypotato... said...
Aug. 26, 2011 at 9:23 pm:
I still really dont understand it. I mean, the words flow beautifully. but i just cant find the meaning behind them. please explain
 
blackdevilangel replied...
Aug. 31, 2011 at 10:19 am :
His father won't let him experience new things. He is being tied to the ground.
 
Trixie.B.Rose replied...
Oct. 2, 2011 at 10:58 am :
I was also wondering, how the bound was related in the poem, you explained it perfectly! :)
 
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LRS14 said...
Aug. 26, 2011 at 12:31 pm:
Wow, that was amazing.
 
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WhoWillCareIfEveryoneDied said...
Aug. 25, 2011 at 8:41 am:
Beautiful. i have work on here i would really appreciate it if you guys can check it out and tell me what you think. Thanks :) Keep up The amazing work :)
 
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ArtistGirlThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Aug. 24, 2011 at 10:09 pm:
I enjoyed this. I wish I had half as much talent as you have!
 
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Makaila. said...
Aug. 23, 2011 at 9:05 pm:
Amazing. Simply amazing. 
 
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Dark_Mind said...
Aug. 23, 2011 at 8:24 pm:
Very nice, could anyone read my poem Daddy's Little Girl
 
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CarolinaBoy23 said...
Aug. 23, 2011 at 8:12 am:
This is really good. Very deep. Hey can anybody read mine and tell me how it is. im just starting
 
Mudder_Hacky replied...
Aug. 23, 2011 at 5:15 pm :

can do.

btw, yes, great job, Carl :D it was amazing :D

 
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Claydub This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Aug. 23, 2011 at 12:10 am:
The whole point of poetry is looking at the world from a different view. Contradictions contribute to poetry.
 
Brin11 replied...
Sept. 12, 2011 at 4:07 pm :
But scene's also contribute and I can't picture this. He starts out walking toward the water and ends up on stone.....it was just a little confusing while I read it.
 
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Rebel13This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Aug. 20, 2011 at 5:35 pm:
This is good! I don't understand all of it though, just because some of the lines seem to contradict each other. Still good though, keep writing!
 
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Lizzy16 said...
Aug. 20, 2011 at 2:50 pm:
I totally agree with mynameisgrace.
 
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