Daddy's Womb This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine.

April 23, 2008
i asked my father if i could swim,
and he said that i would drown.
The Sea would imprison me – he said
if my feet had left the ground.

So i walked out to the water,
and cried out – how ’bout now!
He said, a little bit further, Son,
and then you’ll leave the ground.

i stepped on sand then stone,
from hollow ground to sturdy.
The sky was at my level as I
gazed at the birdie.

The Sea brought me a new idea,
the urge to flee to the high.

i asked my Father if i could fly,
and he said, sure, Son – go try.

i jumped as high as i could.
Still, i landed on the ground.
i saw my Father pull on a chain,
then i knew that i was bound.

This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. This piece has been published in Teen Ink’s monthly print magazine.

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eddys96 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Feb. 17, 2012 at 8:40 pm
this poem has good imagery. i like it
22711 said...
Feb. 15, 2012 at 7:04 pm
This is an awesome poem. I hope to get a lot of views and comments someday
Let-Love-In said...
Feb. 14, 2012 at 3:27 pm
I have no words. this is so beautiful and well written, the imagery is amazing and the flow is incredible. awesome job! definitely keep writing.
TheUntouchableShadow said...
Feb. 11, 2012 at 2:53 pm
i like it alot! new favorite
vail09 said...
Feb. 8, 2012 at 1:12 pm
that was wonderful...may i ask what inspired you?
BraxtonLangstonChapman said...
Feb. 8, 2012 at 12:24 pm
This is really good and I want to get to this level, can someone judge some of my poetry and tell me something I need to work on.
vail09 replied...
Feb. 8, 2012 at 1:14 pm
ill do it if you wish. before hand i want to not a rude person if i dont like something ill tell it easily
mikey'slover23 replied...
Mar. 30, 2012 at 4:29 pm
that waz a good poem.thanks it helps me out with my listening skills with my daddy xd
NickyJ said...
Feb. 6, 2012 at 9:08 pm
We need more poetry like this floating around.
ryanryanryan said...
Feb. 6, 2012 at 2:40 pm
This was exremely well written and had great imagery.
ThinkGeek72 said...
Feb. 6, 2012 at 2:40 pm
Very interesting and different! I loved it!
Alyssa897 said...
Feb. 6, 2012 at 2:35 pm
Great imagry and overall really well writen!
ImCoolerThanYou said...
Feb. 6, 2012 at 2:33 pm
Very very well written. Great imagery and good details. You can see it in your mind.
ryanryanryan said...
Feb. 6, 2012 at 2:30 pm
very well written, has good imagery, amazing flow
Slafyg said...
Feb. 6, 2012 at 9:47 am
Nice imagery
tdotcooley said...
Feb. 6, 2012 at 9:39 am
Very well written and relates to many important realizations in life.
Lillie M. said...
Feb. 6, 2012 at 4:30 am
So amazing! This can relate to a lot of different situations, you've written it so well that people can view it in their own ways.
Blacknblue_kissez said...
Feb. 5, 2012 at 12:06 pm
This poem is filled with imagery, it's so vivid and beautiful. I can see a warm summers day, and a boy trying to prove his father wrong. I love this.
White_Trash843 said...
Feb. 3, 2012 at 4:18 am
Great poem i wish i could be as good as you are and congrats on the mag i hope you keep writing!
Labyrinth said...
Jan. 30, 2012 at 2:36 pm
It is very good. And where do you get off saying it's "DREADFUL"??? I think you have no eye for poetry. V_V
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