Daddy's Womb This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine.

April 23, 2008
i asked my father if i could swim,
and he said that i would drown.
The Sea would imprison me – he said
if my feet had left the ground.

So i walked out to the water,
and cried out – how ’bout now!
He said, a little bit further, Son,
and then you’ll leave the ground.

i stepped on sand then stone,
from hollow ground to sturdy.
The sky was at my level as I
gazed at the birdie.

The Sea brought me a new idea,
the urge to flee to the high.

i asked my Father if i could fly,
and he said, sure, Son – go try.

i jumped as high as i could.
Still, i landed on the ground.
i saw my Father pull on a chain,
then i knew that i was bound.

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jellybean14 said...
Mar. 14, 2012 at 1:23 pm
This is an amazing poem I loved it. But what does the Father represent?
Ziggy7789 said...
Mar. 11, 2012 at 6:16 pm

This is a beautiful poem, and I feel a bit stupid for asking this, but I'm a bit confused about the last stanza.

Throughout the poem, it sounds like you are trying to escape the ground, and your father is encouraging you to do so. But it says "i saw my Father pull on a chain,/ then i knew that i was bound." 

Is this referring to your father holding you back in some way, or in your father attempting to free you from your limitations? Or would you rather this be left to inter... (more »)

Mz.Smith said...
Mar. 9, 2012 at 11:14 am
poem is real a motivator!
svds1 said...
Mar. 8, 2012 at 5:25 pm

this is amazing!! simple  but structured.

Hey I'd really like it if someone could comment on my poem 'the solo of a lost viola' I'd love to read some of yours too!!

team_haymitch This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Mar. 8, 2012 at 1:40 pm
i dont understand it, but its SO beautiful and weird in this awesome way
Nooneknowsme said...
Mar. 8, 2012 at 2:06 am

This poem is so easy but very fantastic in the selection of words! Very nice! ;)

Keep it up!

Please guys check out my two works also, im sure you`ll like it!!

Check it out ;)


Blemons said...
Mar. 5, 2012 at 9:17 pm
Interesting poem...I like the rhyme scheme. Anybody who reads this should look at my work! 
Agasaya said...
Mar. 1, 2012 at 9:12 am

Very well written. I would greatly appreciate someone--or everyon--to read my work and share your feelings about them.


lvamp1192 said...
Feb. 29, 2012 at 12:16 pm
nice poem...
eddys96 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Feb. 28, 2012 at 8:00 pm
Wow this is good. Can you guys CHECK out my poem please? im new at this and wanna GROW little by little. So im in need of five star ratings.
NoLi123 said...
Feb. 25, 2012 at 10:21 pm
This was a very well written poem. I like the to-the-point style shown here; not excessively long, yet has its share of imagery. 
I recently started writing poetry of my own; could someone please read my poems and post some comments? 
Maddyw5 said...
Feb. 21, 2012 at 5:22 pm
Amazing. Just amazing. Keep up the good work!
Lashonti said...
Feb. 18, 2012 at 6:46 pm
I heard/saw this poem somewhere else....
Felicia_The_Bestest replied...
Mar. 3, 2012 at 5:02 pm
What do you mean?
BabyBlue04 said...
Feb. 18, 2012 at 10:29 am
This poem was awesome. I liked the flow! :)
eddys96 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Feb. 17, 2012 at 8:40 pm
this poem has good imagery. i like it
22711 said...
Feb. 15, 2012 at 7:04 pm
This is an awesome poem. I hope to get a lot of views and comments someday
Let-Love-In said...
Feb. 14, 2012 at 3:27 pm
I have no words. this is so beautiful and well written, the imagery is amazing and the flow is incredible. awesome job! definitely keep writing.
TheUntouchableShadow said...
Feb. 11, 2012 at 2:53 pm
i like it alot! new favorite
vail09 said...
Feb. 8, 2012 at 1:12 pm
that was wonderful...may i ask what inspired you?
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