Stop The Violence MAG

By Anonymous

   Drugs all over under the ground.
Guns, people crying, putting each otherdown.
People every day do crazy things.
Buying fancy cars and a lot ofrings.
You have nothing to show for yourself.
You're dying on the inside,and you have bad health.
I wonder what the community can do.
I have noidea, not even a clue.
I look in the paper and I see someone dead.
They layon the stretcher like it was a bed.
The mothers stand in silence.
Peopleshould think TO STOP THE VIOLENCE!!!



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on Feb. 28 2012 at 8:11 pm
Let-Love-In PLATINUM, Chester, Connecticut
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Favorite Quote:
"You fail only if you stop writing."

i do think the concept and idea is very well done, however it was a bit choppy and that did take away from it. but not bad. 

on Feb. 6 2012 at 2:39 pm
booklover272 BRONZE, Waukesha, Wisconsin
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Next time work on your grammer and proof read! But topic and a good poem.

on Feb. 6 2012 at 11:26 am
JosephEdward BRONZE, Waukesha, Wisconsin
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Great idea! It could improve in grammer, and word choice.

on Feb. 6 2012 at 11:16 am
applesoranges PLATINUM, Waukesha, Wisconsin
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Favorite Quote:
People don't value life until they know how easy it is lost

i likeed it is this about the mexican drug wars

on Feb. 6 2012 at 11:14 am
LeviNathanial, Waukesha, Wisconsin
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Good idea! I think that you are right.

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on Feb. 6 2012 at 10:40 am
Shiblondche, Waukesha, Wisconsin
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Favorite Quote:
"It makes sense if you don't think about it."

Good flow, however it would be more deep or subtle without the capitalization in the end. Overall, the message is one of truth. It is a nice piece.

on Feb. 6 2012 at 10:39 am
sweetiepieleesh, Waukesha, Wisconsin
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I can feel the intensity when you talk about drugs and violence, i can almost feel like im there, and I can almost sence that you've been either involved with drugs and violence or someone you care about was.

on Feb. 6 2012 at 9:50 am
I_Can_Haz_Derp, Waukesha, Wisconsin
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Favorite Quote:
Problem?

ELLO GOVENAH!

on Dec. 24 2011 at 2:07 pm
RejoiceTheySay... PLATINUM, Topeka, Kansas
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i like it alot u seem to have a very innocent but deep voice and i like the contrast of the scary things and innocent voice

on Dec. 2 2011 at 11:32 pm
night i like the rhyme

niner PLATINUM said...
on Dec. 2 2011 at 5:25 pm
niner PLATINUM, Hartville, Ohio
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Favorite Quote:
"Isn't it funny how you broke my heart, but I still love you with all the pieces?"
"It's easy to stand in a crowd, but it takes courage to stand alone"
"What would you attempt if you knew you could never fail?"

i like the message of this piece, ALOT. you're a good writer :)  but a piece of advice (from a poet myself), try to use a simliar number of syllables in each line, so they flow together more smoothly. good job though :)

on Dec. 2 2011 at 5:08 pm
Karles_Ivy PLATINUM, Sunnyside, Washington
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Favorite Quote:
Sometimes the bully isn’t the captain of the cheerleaders or the girl who for some reason has it out for only you; sometimes the worst bully of them all is you.- Karles_Ivy

I really like this, it speaks the utter most truth. You have a great way of making the words go together.

on Dec. 2 2011 at 2:24 pm
venom_the_poet, Houston, Texas
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THIS IS GOOD

 


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on Dec. 2 2011 at 11:55 am
Proof SILVER, Silver Spring, Maryland
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Favorite Quote:
The world is yours you just have to take it

people people people jeesh why are u so hard on this writer???? if u have any knowledge of poetry u would know tht poetry is an art of self xpression a series of events tht represent who the witer is so ease up on the critique dnt condemn this poem jst becuase of the grammar see this writters vission and their voice

on Dec. 2 2011 at 10:05 am
MarissaWhitecloud SILVER, Oskaloosa, Iowa
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This was good and very reasonable!

NaiNelson said...
on Nov. 10 2011 at 10:31 pm

I agree with what you are saying, but the way you worded it is choppy, and probably not your best.

I do, however, have a problem with the line "You're dying on the inside,and you have bad health." I'm sorry, but to be blunt: that's just a stupid phrase.


mizzfrance said...
on Nov. 10 2011 at 2:43 pm
mizzfrance, Nottelling, Minnesota
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Favorite Quote:
"Only put off until tomorow what you are willing to die having left undone."

this is amazing. you should keep up the great work ;)

teh_daly said...
on Nov. 10 2011 at 2:07 pm
teh_daly, Killeen, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
Family-
We may not have it all together
But together we have it all

that is deep i wish you would had put your name so you can get dredit....

good job ANONYMOS :)


JakeLong said...
on Oct. 27 2011 at 3:23 am

Here are some tips that may help parents with violent teens:

Cool down - Avoid talking your teen when he/she is still angry or at the height of an emotional outburst. It's also not a good idea to go into their room or territory at home when they are angry. Wait for your teen to cool down before you talk. Some parents even prefer to take their teen outside in a public place in order to have a conversation about their attitude.Acknowledge the problem - Parents often make excuses for violent teens. They tend to play down the incidents where their teens become violent towards them and pretend that it's not serious, hoping that their teens will outgrow this eventually.Set consequences - Parents need to understand the importance of setting consequences for their teens' actions. During this time of their life, teens are already seeking independence and trying out their wings, so to speak, in preparation for this independence. However, if your teen is to mature properly, he/she must also learn to accept the consequences that come with bad decision-making.Take a closer look - Sometimes teens develop violent behavior suddenly. If your teen's violence is out of character, it's possible that your teen is going through something emotionally tumultuous and is not handling it well. Talking to your teen about it or asking his/her friends may give you clues on how to better help your child.Secure yourself and your home - In extreme circumstances where your teen's violent outbursts put you and your smaller children in harm's way, it's best to take your teen out of the home temporarily. Make this clear to your teen when you talk about consequences. You can arrange for your teen to go be sent to a therapeutic boarding school or boot camp the next time he/she has a violent outburst, or you can call the police when things get really bad.Get professional help - Sending abusive violent teens to therapy can turn their life around. For teens that need more help than others, you can actually consider therapeutic boarding schools or wilderness camps because these include intensive therapy with the curriculum. These schools are trained to handle this kind of problem. They can fill young students' schedules with more productive things to do and channel their energies to good use rather than aggression.

Parents need not feel trapped and afraid in their house. When dealing with violent teens, they just have to prepare themselves to make tough decisions for their own good as well as for the good of their children.

 

source: http://www.troubledteens.com/anger-and-violence/dealing-with-violent-teens-effective-punishment-for-teenagers.html


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on Oct. 25 2011 at 7:08 am
Lizzy16 BRONZE, Westerville, Ohio
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Favorite Quote:
"Treat others how you would like to be treated."

wow this was so amazing. I'm speechless


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