Impede, Recede, and Concede MAG

December 26, 2008
By meggyt BRONZE, Cranford, New Jersey
meggyt BRONZE, Cranford, New Jersey
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My heart does not beat for you anymore.
It powers down, ensuring no emotion.
I dare not surrender to your poison potion,
But flee from wounds which time could not restore.
What a pedestal that has been set,
An unyielding power coarse hands caress,
Fear lurks beyond confidence, I confess.
My own faults shall remain my own regrets.
I bestowed you with height, attesting me weak,
Recoiling behind acts of defiance,
Gives notion your battle will not succeed.
I accept our relations, we need not speak,
My heart need not beat, nor inquire alliance,
Tonight I impede, recede, and concede.


The author's comments:
This originally began as an English/Italian Sonnet mixed, but I ended up messing up with the rhyme scheme. I gave it to my teacher anyway. She will probably think it is an act of laziness that I did not take the time to adjust my rhyme scheme mistakes. Yet, sometimes, like people, poems are just better flawed.

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on Dec. 10 2017 at 2:27 am
InkStainedFingertips, Belfast, Other
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Favorite Quote:
"A bird sitting on a tree is never afraid of the branch breaking, because her trust is not in the branch but on it's own wings," - Unknown.

Absolutely beautiful. You're very talented.

joebro SILVER said...
on Dec. 11 2014 at 11:35 am
joebro SILVER, Compton, California
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Favorite Quote:
Dreams are like a box of chocolates, if you hold on and think about them for to long it will all start to melt away.

this article is so beautiful its very powerful im sure alot of people can relate to this especially me i hope you keep writer your amazing

EEKgirl GOLD said...
on Feb. 20 2014 at 12:04 am
EEKgirl GOLD, Tigard, Oregon
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Favorite Quote:
Those who don't remember the past are condemned to repeat it. ~ George Santayana

It sounds like a dance. I love it, it is a flawed beauty. Please, keep writing. Rhyme scheme schmime scheme.

on Apr. 29 2013 at 3:20 pm
Elizabeth-of-rohan PLATINUM, Abbeville, Louisiana
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Favorite Quote:
Pain is stronger than life, stronger than death, love, loyalty, duty.
~Essad Bey

"you are tired (i think) of the puzzle of living and doing; and so am i. come with me, then, and we’ll leave it far and far away—" - e.e. cummings

beautiful.

on Apr. 29 2013 at 2:16 pm
Gavin Schenk BRONZE, Park City, Utah
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It was awesome

on Jul. 25 2011 at 8:19 pm
AShiftInLife BRONZE, New Jersey
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Favorite Quote:
Brother: They call me junk yard dog. WOOF!!
Me: (laughs) More like junk yard chihuahua.

Beautiful. Its powerful. I can feel the emotion- that's what I love about poetry. Putting just a few words on the screen and still being able to show people how you feel is an art I'd love to learn someday. Very good job.

on Jun. 1 2011 at 2:52 pm
Youngshakespeare18 BRONZE, Ashland, Kentucky
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Favorite Quote:
"Love is defined not by money, clothes, or cars but by the mutural feeling of the one of whom you are shareing your heart with"-Nick Hall

I agree with your description. Poetry is better flawed because if you have to plan it out where is the feeling. You did amazing

on Jun. 1 2011 at 2:34 pm
IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM, Lothlorien, Utah
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Favorite Quote:
Boredom instigates extreme creativity.
~Amoniel

"Bowing gratefully to all of my subjects, 'thank you. Thank you. The pleasure is mine." Nah, I'm just kidding. We're all kings together.'"
~Thesilentraven

Wow, some of those lines really spoke to me about a friendship I once had.

on May. 20 2011 at 9:54 am
DarkAngelNinjaXP, Madison, Virginia
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Favorite Quote:
When dancing with Death, don't trip.

Wow. Just... wow. This is absolutely amazing. 

on Mar. 30 2011 at 5:35 pm
Zero_Black BRONZE, Las Vegas, Nevada
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Favorite Quote:
If you love something, then let it go,
If it comes back, it's yours forever,
If it leaves you, then it was never meant to be.

What d'you mean your teacher won't like it? It's really good! Even if you didn't follow the assignment, I think it's really, really good! >:}

on Jan. 23 2011 at 10:56 pm
Touchstone BRONZE, Calcutta, Other
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Favorite Quote:
Two roads Diverged in a wood....
And i chose the one less trodden black....

This is IT !!!! 

meggyt BRONZE said...
on Jan. 23 2011 at 5:06 pm
meggyt BRONZE, Cranford, New Jersey
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Of course I would comment!! Thank you so much for yours!! I appreciate it and it means a great deal. Let me know I would love to see yours :D

on Jan. 23 2011 at 3:28 pm
Alcanno DIAMOND, Mexia, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
"If you love life, don't waste time, for time is what life is
made up of."

-- Bruce Lee

Wow. This is so beautiful and strong.. The word choice is simply... excellent. A very inspiring sonnet - I'm going to try to write one I think and I'll let you know when its done. Would you comment on it? I'd love your opinion. Thanks! Keep writing! :)

Tuesday said...
on Jan. 23 2011 at 3:35 am
Better off flawed, indeed. You can tell how much thought and feeling is behind this.

MLStamp SILVER said...
on Dec. 10 2010 at 3:41 pm
MLStamp SILVER, Annandale, Virginia
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Favorite Quote:
Thats what we all are. Ameteurs. We don't live long enough to become anything else. -Charlie Chaplin

WOW! SENSATIONAL!

meggyt BRONZE said...
on Dec. 10 2010 at 2:40 pm
meggyt BRONZE, Cranford, New Jersey
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Thank you! I really appreciate the constructive criticism, sometimes even more so than compliments. 

dylaan said...
on Dec. 10 2010 at 2:05 pm
This poem has very meaningful words. It is written gracefully, yet has a sort of depressing tone. In the first line, it starts off with "My heart does not beat for you anymore". This line starts the poem with a mood that is about romance. The beginning is well written. The lines seem to go on with commas and just connect to each other which can be redundant. 

on Nov. 3 2010 at 10:15 pm
SideraCaeli GOLD, Marysville, Washington
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Favorite Quote:
“Be yourself. Above all, let who you are, what you are, what you believe, shine through every sentence you write, every piece you finish.” -John Jakes.

I loved it! My favorite part is, "An unyielding power coarse hands caress, Fear lurks beyond confidence, I confess. My own faults shall remain my own regrets.  All in all, it was a great poem. Poems are written the way they are meant to be, I'm glad that you didn't change it into what your teacher wanted!

on Oct. 27 2010 at 5:45 pm
ebony_and_irony, Tracy, California
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I'm very glad that you decided to go with this rather than throwing it out because it didn't fit a particular rhyme scheme. Good job.

Sarahlee GOLD said...
on Oct. 5 2010 at 8:48 am
Sarahlee GOLD, Westerville, Ohio
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Favorite Quote:
How is it that one match can start a forest fire, but it takes a whole box of matches to start a campfire? ~Christy Whitehead

and

Never do anything that you wouldn't want to explain to the paramedics. ~Author Unknown

WOW! Really good! Please read mine, I'd love to hear your opinion!


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