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Him & Him

January 15, 2010
By electrichearts SILVER, Franklin Lakes, New Jersey
electrichearts SILVER, Franklin Lakes, New Jersey
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Favorite Quote:
"It didn't matter in the end how old they had been, or that they were girls, but only that we had loved them, and that they hadn't heard us calling, still do not hear us, up here in the tree house with our thinning hair and soft bellies, calling them out of those rooms where they went to be alone for all time, alone in suicide, which is deeper than death, and where we will never find the pieces to put them back together. "

Commandments stone on slave-prince mountain maul
Less pay rebuke from quiet burdens pained
Thy new deems obsolete hath heaven call
Weeping doves cast crimson, edicts inane
Virtuous bride veneer exalting fifth
Wed tender beguil’d hands dearth commonplace
Forsake poor ills cherishing dev’lish sift
Abstract His binding ring; expunge thy grace
Hath said adoration shall relish flaws
Perhaps claimed forth heeding His hail and beck
Yet so accept tragedies, tender claws
Vehement joys s’rrounding thy face and neck?
Discern, breed sheep, elude, lest He appease
Exist no truer words abode of these

The author's comments:
This was written about a battered wife, who fears to leave her husband due to her commitment to God and religion, public scorn, and her husband. It does not take place in any specific place or time as such women have almost always and as long as partnerships have existed, suffered in silence. It tries to say that despite the Bible's intention to promote peace, love, and devotion in marriage, the social bind can also destroy when a spouse becomes abusive.

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This article has 111 comments.

ricci said...
on Feb. 1 2010 at 3:40 pm
beautiful sonnet!! great job!!!

Jenny said...
on Feb. 1 2010 at 3:37 pm
I didn't get this at first, but then I read your interpretation & loved it. The messge is so raw. Nice!

on Feb. 1 2010 at 3:33 pm
This piece rivals the Bard himself! <3

Hermie said...
on Jan. 31 2010 at 9:34 am
Beautifully written! You are unbelievable poet.

luxy said...
on Jan. 31 2010 at 9:33 am
you are a true writer. this sonnet is so touching i almost cried <3

on Jan. 31 2010 at 9:31 am
I LOVE THE OLDE ENGLISH! Keep up the awesome work!

nyclover said...
on Jan. 31 2010 at 9:30 am
such a touching piece!

KERRY said...
on Jan. 29 2010 at 7:46 pm

Monica said...
on Jan. 29 2010 at 5:20 am
Wow, very impressive Christina. Your mom told me you were a talented writer but I had no idea. Keep up the good work!

Gommy said...
on Jan. 27 2010 at 10:30 pm

This is brilliant! I look forward to an exergesis of the text when we hang out this weekend.

You are awesome!

HBUSA said...
on Jan. 27 2010 at 2:17 pm
Beautifully written, what an amazing talent you have... keep writing and I'll definitely keep reading!

on Jan. 27 2010 at 12:18 pm
Wow! I am so impressed with your craft and the way in which your writing really speaks to the reader. You are a truly talented writer.

SillySyl said...
on Jan. 27 2010 at 10:26 am
WOW! This touches on every emotional string in my body. A TRUE writer you are!

Can't wait to see more of your work!

on Jan. 26 2010 at 3:50 pm
this is very touching. i wish i could write like this

csarfati said...
on Jan. 26 2010 at 3:43 pm
rhyme scheme, vocabulary, theme, PERFECT! 10/10!!

Acting_Rox said...
on Jan. 26 2010 at 3:40 pm
You are truly and amazing writer! Keep up the amazing work!

on Jan. 26 2010 at 2:42 pm
christina!! you're such an amazing writer/poet! great job :D ♥

BLM123 said...
on Jan. 26 2010 at 2:31 pm
AMAZING! Perfect rhyming scheme and every thing! Obviouly a very talented writer!

writer614_93 said...
on Jan. 26 2010 at 12:59 pm
for some reason, i can't vote, but I really love your sonnet! it's so deep and quite beautiful

on Jan. 26 2010 at 10:51 am
Your poem sounds very professional and the message you conveyed is phenomenal. You have quite the future ahead of you! Keep writing, I look forward to reading your coming pieces.