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Lover

April 25, 2017
By DarkRayne PLATINUM, Garden City, Idaho
DarkRayne PLATINUM, Garden City, Idaho
35 articles 0 photos 25 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I swear dude, one day, i'm gonna get off the bus and run into the forest, and i wont come back, and when i do, i'm gonna be the knife master." ~The Rev


Her eyes,
I cannot describe the feeling,
Blocked of lies,
See, this is the beginning,
And I know it won’t end,
I love her,
She is an angel God send,
No pain will occur,
This is real,
If it were a dream, I am not sure,
If it is, tears will reveal,
I need you,
Nobody else,
And I promise to,
Love more than wealth,
Will she give me a sign,
I need to be alive inside,
She will always be mine,
Beside her I reside,
I’ll be the shoulder she will cry on,
And she will know,
She is the reason I write this song,
I know this is how,
She is the only one,
Who keeps me here,
Hell has begun,
Mortality is sheer,
I’m no longer shattered,
Like the mirror I saw myself in,
I will be heard,
Instead of releasing the beast within,
They all left me here,
They left me to die,
Their problems are mere,
And ill cry,
Because I can’t save a falling angel,
I won’t let you fall tonight,
I’ll make sure your well,
And any of your fears I will fight,
I won’t sleep,
Without knowing you’re ok,
Ill weep,
If you die before the end of today,
Then I’ll take up my will,
And give it to god,
For me I’ll let him kill,
My mind is odd,
You make me feel alright,
You’re my fallen angel,
For you I fight,
And I make you well,
See the darkness,
You’re my light in all of it,
You’re my mistress,
Every single bit,


The author's comments:

To my love and life, I know things are hard, but we will pull through together, I promise. 


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on May. 29 2018 at 10:48 pm
sara-a-bear GOLD, Brandon, Mississippi
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Favorite Quote:
"I can tell by the way you're laughing, you're trouble looking for a place to happen."
- Chris Young

Great song! I assume you're a Three Days Grace fan? Some of the lyrics resemble the lyrics of Fallen Angel... :)

on May. 24 2017 at 6:23 pm
DarkRayne PLATINUM, Garden City, Idaho
35 articles 0 photos 25 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I swear dude, one day, i'm gonna get off the bus and run into the forest, and i wont come back, and when i do, i'm gonna be the knife master." ~The Rev

Thank you my wonderful friend

on May. 24 2017 at 9:58 am
Thisisreal_life PLATINUM, Manhattan, Kansas
48 articles 3 photos 69 comments

Favorite Quote:
"so do it. Decide. Is this the person you want to be? Is this the life you want to live? Is this the best you can be?"
"I survived the fire because the fire within me burns brighter than the one around me"

this poem is really good overall. However, i do notice you try, whether intentional or unintentional, to rhyme. I feel like it would be more successful (it being the poem) if it either all rhymed or none of it did. you have some lines that do, such as And I know it won’t end, I love her, She is an angel God send, No pain will occur, This is real, If it were a dream, I am not sure, end and send rhyme, and so do occur and sure, but then you have other lines such as, f it is, tears will reveal, I need you, Nobody else, And I promise to, Love more than wealth, nothing rhymes. To put more emphasis, do not do a blend of the two. it is more effective to rhyme or dont rhyme. I loved the poem though my favorite part was Like the mirror I saw myself in, I will be heard, Instead of releasing the beast within, They all left me here, They left me to die, Their problems are mere, And ill cry, Because I can’t save a falling angel, I won’t let you fall tonight, keep up the good work!

on May. 8 2017 at 1:43 pm
DarkRayne PLATINUM, Garden City, Idaho
35 articles 0 photos 25 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I swear dude, one day, i'm gonna get off the bus and run into the forest, and i wont come back, and when i do, i'm gonna be the knife master." ~The Rev

nobody can ask that anymore...

on May. 4 2017 at 3:41 pm
DarkRayne PLATINUM, Garden City, Idaho
35 articles 0 photos 25 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I swear dude, one day, i'm gonna get off the bus and run into the forest, and i wont come back, and when i do, i'm gonna be the knife master." ~The Rev

so what is your e mail?

on May. 4 2017 at 3:37 pm
DarkRayne PLATINUM, Garden City, Idaho
35 articles 0 photos 25 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I swear dude, one day, i'm gonna get off the bus and run into the forest, and i wont come back, and when i do, i'm gonna be the knife master." ~The Rev

well ill tell you via Email, I refuse to share to wide public.

Babygirl2002 said...
on May. 4 2017 at 11:02 am
Babygirl2002,
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Who's your love and life @DarkRayne