America, home of the brave

July 19, 2016
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This is America, home of the brave

Known for their cruel treatment to slaves

Home to animals who sleep in caves

And gnarly surfers who ride on waves

There's no need to be afraid

America will come to your aid

If you got wings they'll dig you a grave

No how no way

No place to stay

But this is America, home of the brave

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Consalvator This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Aug. 29, 2016 at 5:30 pm
Reminds me of Uncle Sam G*dd*mn by Brother Ali. I wouldn't really qualify this as a limerick, it's more freeverse. Very powerful lines, but it seems like there wasn't much real heart into it. Like you are trying to convince someone that you don't like something you like. I really like some of the images you showed, especially the line "If you got wings they'll dig you a grave". Keep writing. :)
missfloetry replied...
Sept. 22, 2016 at 8:45 pm
Thank you. :)
Gagax said...
Aug. 6, 2016 at 10:08 am
this is really good! Its good as a limerick, its kinda satirical and pokes fun at America! Honestly I really liked it so if it were longer i would like that. Unless limericks arent supposed to be long?
missfloetry replied...
Aug. 6, 2016 at 2:56 pm
Thank you! Limericks are "supposed" to be 5 lines long, but as you can see I made it a little longer. I'm a rebel!!! >:) lol
poetic.eyes said...
Aug. 5, 2016 at 6:27 am
Sorry getting your feedback to you so many days after I said I would. Great theme, full of emotion. I love the contrast brought out by repeating the statement "America home of the brave", placed next to all the unfair things America has done. One thing I feel doesn't fit too well is the line: "And gnarly surfers who ride on waves"... Good work!!!
missfloetry replied...
Mar. 7 at 7:42 pm
Thank you! Sorry for the late reply.
Frankie Johnson said...
Jul. 30, 2016 at 1:18 pm
This deserves more likes!
kirstyI said...
Jul. 25, 2016 at 7:39 pm
I really get it, like America treats certain people (ppl of color) differently than everyone else because of deeply rooted institutionalized racism and it isn't right. The only thing that is more terrible is how ppl are silencing the problems.
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