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My Body is a Squiggle, My Feet are on Backwards

July 23, 2011
By SecretFlame PLATINUM, Portland, Oregon
SecretFlame PLATINUM, Portland, Oregon
20 articles 1 photo 375 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I have a life. I just choose to ignore it."
-one of my friends


My body is a squiggle,
I have 46 eyes,
I talk when I giggle,
And my hands look like pies.

My feet are on backward,
I have six noodle like arms,
I twist and bend like rubber,
But my smile always charms.

I live in a world of upside down,
With fish in the sky,
And birds in the sea,
Where a smile is a frown.

Everything here,
Is clear cut and defined,
A place where right and wrong,
Still bind.

True the sky is purple,
And looks like cupid,
And ants are the size of deer,
But I still think,
I’m better off here.

Here the air is clean,
Not grey with smog,
There isn’t a single toxin filled stream,
And no one is greedy or a hog.

We live in peace,
No wars are fought,
No one lives in the street,
And we take comfort in family,
Not just the things we’ve bought.

True the cherries are blue,
But here freedom has no price,
No one must go to the bloody altar of battle,
To be our protection, and our sacrifice.

Yellow faces may seem strange,
Even in my dream,
And the fire that warms the hearth,
Looks like a corkscrew and is definitely green,
But I still think,
That we appreciate life here better,
And I feel so much more worth,
Than I ever could on Earth.

We are friends to each other,
Every striped and polka dotted squiggle a sister,
And every star splattered spiral a brother.

Our families may seem quirky,
And possibly a little weird,
My sister is a turkey,
My father is a sheep sheer,
But at least here,
No child lives in fear.

It may only be a fantasy land,
A creation of my overactive imagination,
But I think it’s rather grand,
Pay attention,
Take an observation,
Maybe we could learn,
A thing or two,
From this made up world discern
Something to help us put out our fires,
Before we burn,
Along with from where it grew,
This better place,
In my imagination unfurled,
Could be,
Don’t mean to brag,
But a saving grace,
And on my part,
A total ace!


The author's comments:
I started this piece to enter it in a contest on teen ink about things that had nothing to do with reality, then as I was writing I found a deeper meaning in the poem. PLEASE comment and rate! Enjoy! Yes it is supposed to be funny!

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on Oct. 7 2011 at 11:34 pm
Love.Hate.Passion., Spring Valley, Illinois
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Favorite Quote:
~Hope. Faith. Love~
~Be proud of who you are.You are all unique in a different way.~
~I WILL NOT fade into oblivion , and become less than
a distant memory.~

Bree Tayler just stole the words out of my moth This piece is funny , emotive and just plain amazing. Your rhyme scheme is decent and your poem is clever. Loved it!

on Sep. 7 2011 at 5:18 pm
SecretFlame PLATINUM, Portland, Oregon
20 articles 1 photo 375 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I have a life. I just choose to ignore it."
-one of my friends

Thanks!             

on Sep. 7 2011 at 2:59 am
Garnet77 PLATINUM, Sinagpore, Other
31 articles 6 photos 578 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Everything's a triangle." ~ My mother

"Write what you love, write what you care about, because sometimes, it's the easiest way to be heard."

This is amazingly creative! The message behind it was very powerful, and I'm sure everyone has said this, but I love the title!!! Your word choice was excellent, though the flow at certain parts seemed a bit awkward. Maybe it was just me, though, because some parts were more rhythmic than others..? But overall, this was a great poem! :)

on Aug. 31 2011 at 9:55 am
ItsAshMal SILVER, Guilford, Connecticut
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I'd just like to start out saying I am in love with the title. I just had to click on it. It's also just a really fun poem to read, and the word feel sort of thick on my tounge, like they were meant to be put in the order you've got them in. 

The only negatives I have for this piece are in its length and a couple of the rhyes. After a while, it becomes slightly tedious, and I started to feel like you were losing your real point in all the other things you were saying. Also, a couple of the rhymes felt stretched, like you knew you needed a rhyme but couldn't find one that meant what you needed it to. Do I make any sense? Probably not. 

In any case, this is a great read! 


on Aug. 17 2011 at 10:17 pm
SecretFlame PLATINUM, Portland, Oregon
20 articles 1 photo 375 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I have a life. I just choose to ignore it."
-one of my friends

Thank you so much! I love it when people give me more than just the one line of feedback (especially when they like it ;) And I'm certainly not going to object to you reading the rest of my stuff ;) Please rate/comment them if you do!

on Aug. 17 2011 at 10:13 pm
BreeTayler PLATINUM, Carlisle, Arkansas
30 articles 0 photos 57 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Where there is love there is life." --Ghandi

Haha! That was brilliant. And clever! Before I read the passage I thought the TITLE ITSELF was genius... But Wow! lol The symbolism is beautiful ( it has that same powerful meaning as the last I read: We Claim) Your diction, i've noticed, is clever in itself... You are simply a gifted writer. I think i'm going to read all of your work just for the fun of it cause your work is fun to read lol I favorited this by the way:))

MY FAVORITE LINES ARE: "Every striped and polka dotted squiggle a sister" "...every star splattered spiral a brother." (simply because it's creatively goofy) And every line before and after these two... Were masterful! great job!!


on Aug. 11 2011 at 11:24 am
SecretFlame PLATINUM, Portland, Oregon
20 articles 1 photo 375 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I have a life. I just choose to ignore it."
-one of my friends

Thank you so much!

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on Aug. 11 2011 at 12:35 am
Abby96 BRONZE, Leesburg, Virginia
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I absolutely love the first two stanzas and that bloody altar of battle part was brilliant!