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How the Clouds Formed MAG

August 3, 2013
By 411Ellie PLATINUM, Fridley, Minnesota
411Ellie PLATINUM, Fridley, Minnesota
41 articles 28 photos 235 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Paper is more patient than people." –Anne Frank


In the beginning
When the sky was black coffee
God poured in some cream


The author's comments:
When a person pours cream into a cup of dark coffee, there is a wonderful moment of diffusion where billowing clouds consume the murk. When I look up at the sky and see clouds, this is what I am reminded of. This comparison inspired an adaptation of the Christian creation story.

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on Jul. 20 2014 at 4:03 am
TheDolphin ELITE, Iloilo, Other
210 articles 11 photos 51 comments
WOW.WOW.WOW.

on Mar. 9 2014 at 2:24 pm
411Ellie PLATINUM, Fridley, Minnesota
41 articles 28 photos 235 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Paper is more patient than people." –Anne Frank

Thank you! You made my day :D

on Mar. 9 2014 at 1:43 pm
Paradisaically BRONZE, Charlottesville, Virginia
3 articles 0 photos 18 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I taught you to fight and to fly, what more could there be?" - J.M Barrie

Awesome poem Ellie!!  I love that you compared the sky to black coffee.  I'm so glad it was published in the magazine!

on Nov. 30 2013 at 8:58 pm
411Ellie PLATINUM, Fridley, Minnesota
41 articles 28 photos 235 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Paper is more patient than people." –Anne Frank

Wow! Thank you so much!

Alabian GOLD said...
on Nov. 30 2013 at 7:59 pm
Alabian GOLD, Limbo, Other
13 articles 2 photos 126 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you can fly, don't stop at the sky cause there are footprints on the moon" - Owl City

Wow, this is beautiful!! I love the metaphor, awesome job! It deserved to be published in the magazine!! :D 5/5 hands down!

on Nov. 30 2013 at 1:33 pm
411Ellie PLATINUM, Fridley, Minnesota
41 articles 28 photos 235 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Paper is more patient than people." –Anne Frank

Thanks Shade. I appreciate your honesty :)

on Nov. 30 2013 at 1:12 pm
Shade3043 DIAMOND, Shade3043 Did This, In Case Of Anonymous, Other
87 articles 0 photos 168 comments

Favorite Quote:
When I was a boy, I would always hear scary things in the news and my mother would say to me, "Always look for the helpers. Everywhere you look you will always find people helping." - Fred Rogers

Well, it's a haiku. It only has three lines, and only one metaphor, so I can't expect much. This is just about as much as I can get from a haiku. Pretty nice. The metaphor is good, I just can't draw too much enjoyment out of haiku. Good job, though. YOu've earned a 4/5. :D

on Nov. 15 2013 at 4:15 pm
411Ellie PLATINUM, Fridley, Minnesota
41 articles 28 photos 235 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Paper is more patient than people." –Anne Frank

Thank you soooooooo much! I subscribed :)

on Nov. 15 2013 at 11:15 am
SaphiraBrightscales DIAMOND, Islamabad, Other
75 articles 16 photos 1143 comments

Favorite Quote:
I've learned that people will forget what you said, people will forget what you did, but people will never forget how you made them feel.
- Maya Angelou
When i was little/I used to point a chubby finger toward the dark sky/And ask my father/why some stars moved and others didn’t/He would laugh and explain that some were airplanes/I still wish on them today ~ Laugh-It-Out
The feathers of a crow are black/The ink of my pen is blacker/The pain of my heart is blackest~ Mckay
If love produced a blossom/I’d take it in my palm/What a blessing, the bright color!/How soothing, such a balm!/I’d keep a petal for my own/The rest, drop from my hands/For such a flower would multiply/And populate the lands~ thesilentraven
And I began to rival legends/Long entombed before my birth./But for all my much envied fame/The lust for more would not abate./The plaques and prizes with my name/Will, like all things, disintegrate. ~ TheEpic95 now known as Helena_Noel

hehehehehe, the metaphor you used is truly appreciated. I do not know what more to say because I am pretty sure you have already heard much praise that is to be said so all I'll add is that the best of the best are the ones that achieve complexity within simplicity and those that achieve simplicity in every form have truly learned much of what there is to be learned and I must admit, you are among those. 

on Nov. 13 2013 at 9:55 pm
411Ellie PLATINUM, Fridley, Minnesota
41 articles 28 photos 235 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Paper is more patient than people." –Anne Frank

Thanks Allie :) You are the best!

on Nov. 13 2013 at 9:55 pm
411Ellie PLATINUM, Fridley, Minnesota
41 articles 28 photos 235 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Paper is more patient than people." –Anne Frank

Thanks wildflower :)

on Nov. 13 2013 at 9:54 pm
411Ellie PLATINUM, Fridley, Minnesota
41 articles 28 photos 235 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Paper is more patient than people." –Anne Frank

OMG.... Thank you so much! I'm speechless!

on Nov. 13 2013 at 9:53 pm
411Ellie PLATINUM, Fridley, Minnesota
41 articles 28 photos 235 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Paper is more patient than people." –Anne Frank

Thank you so much!

Mckay ELITE said...
on Nov. 13 2013 at 9:41 pm
Mckay ELITE, Somewhere, Virginia
146 articles 0 photos 2260 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The people who are crazy enough to think they can change the world are the ones who do."
—Apple’s “Think Different” commercial, 1997
“Crazy people are considered mad by the rest of the society only because their intelligence isn't understood.”
― Weihui Zhou

As a fan of coffee, I enjoyed he sauve tranquility that this poem gives off to the reader. 

on Nov. 13 2013 at 5:12 pm
ChrisJ PLATINUM, Rochester, New York
24 articles 15 photos 289 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Man must evolve for all human conflict a method which rejects revenge, aggression and retaliation. The foundation of such a method is love.”
- Martin Luther King Jr.

Awesome Ellie, congrats on the publication, I really enjoy this piece and it is now on my favorites list.  - Fan ;)  

hieverybody said...
on Nov. 13 2013 at 1:06 pm
hieverybody, Shoreview, Minnesota
0 articles 4 photos 13 comments
Congrats Ellie. Again this is an amazing haiku and you are a GREAT poet/writer. FYI everyone should attempt to complete the Infinite Cosmos challenge

on Nov. 13 2013 at 1:02 pm
boundlesswildflower SILVER, Minneapolis, Minnesota
8 articles 1 photo 56 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Some infinities are bigger than other infinities." - faults in our stars by John Green

this is such a simple, great piece! GREAT JOB AND CONGRATS ON YOUR AWARD! :)

on Aug. 19 2013 at 9:44 pm
411Ellie PLATINUM, Fridley, Minnesota
41 articles 28 photos 235 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Paper is more patient than people." –Anne Frank

Thank you so much!

anniejones said...
on Aug. 18 2013 at 1:53 am
anniejones, No Wheres, Alabama
0 articles 0 photos 1 comment
This is absolutley amazing!!

on Aug. 13 2013 at 12:50 pm
ChrisJ PLATINUM, Rochester, New York
24 articles 15 photos 289 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Man must evolve for all human conflict a method which rejects revenge, aggression and retaliation. The foundation of such a method is love.”
- Martin Luther King Jr.

Thank you so much! That means alot coming from you!


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