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Beauty of the Beach

July 19, 2012
By Choirgirl SILVER, Las Cruces, New Mexico
Choirgirl SILVER, Las Cruces, New Mexico
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The noise of the seagulls,
the wind blowing in your face,
walking by the sea.

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on Apr. 28 2013 at 6:35 pm
Choirgirl SILVER, Las Cruces, New Mexico
7 articles 0 photos 22 comments
Thanks for the feedback.  I really appreciate it.

on Apr. 28 2013 at 2:28 pm
TaylorWintry DIAMOND, Carrollton, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
"Never fear shadows. They simply mean there's a light shining somewhere nearby." - Unknown

I've tried to write poems about the beach many times, but have never successfully performed the task. This poem is an example of what I want to do... It seems like it was SO easily written, and the words flow together impeccably. It's like they could be threaded on a string. I lovethe imagery. If there was one thing I would change, it would be the first line. Maybe instead of the noise of the seagulls, you could come up with a synonym of noise. I think that would make it a bit more poetic. But really, great job.

on Jul. 22 2012 at 5:41 pm
albinotiger GOLD, Gloucester, Massachusetts
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Favorite Quote:
"Monsters are real, and ghosts are real too. They live inside us, and sometimes, they win"- Stephen King
“In life, unlike chess, the game continues after checkmate”- Isaac Asimov

i can totally realte ( hate seagulls)