the day i swallowed the sun

May 26, 2018
By saltyranchers SILVER, Brooklyn, New York
saltyranchers SILVER, Brooklyn, New York
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the day i finally caught the sun
between my lips
was the day i was set free
from the iron cage
with its iron bars,
that crushed my arms
and shattered my lungs.
i closed my eyes
and let the golden flames
drip down the back of my throat
and coat my tongue like honey.
i felt it spread through
my chest,
felt the thing i
had been chasing
for years
and years
and years.
i watched as the inky blackness
that had suffocated me
for so many silent nights
bled from my fingertips and
sunk into the dirt,
staining the daisies
and wilting the poppies.
a golden bead
slipped
down my cheek,
and i wondered
why my tears
had never tasted so
sweet.
sitting down with the sunflowers,
i watched the cotton candy
clouds
float across the baby blue sky,
and began writing about
the day i swallowed the sun.



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on Oct. 24 at 3:51 pm
cat_the_creative GOLD, Austin, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
All endings are beginnings

THIS IS INCREDIBLE SO VIVID!

Catniss SILVER said...
on Oct. 20 at 12:53 pm
Catniss SILVER, Jakarta, Other
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So beautifully and uniquely. Nice use of symbolism.

SonnyT BRONZE said...
on Oct. 16 at 9:25 am
SonnyT BRONZE, Columbus, Ohio
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This is beautiful! The language, the imagery, I really enjoyed reading this poem!!

on Oct. 13 at 3:22 pm
williamgrantland, Columbia, South Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
“Injustice everywhere is a threat to justice everywhere.” Martin Luther King, Jr.
“Be yourself. Everyone else is already taken.” Unknown

wow! awesome job!!

on Oct. 1 at 9:51 am
CheerSwimmer8 BRONZE, Browntown, Wisconsin
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Favorite Quote:
Do it with passion or not at all

I want to swallow the sun now that was beautiful

kmagic BRONZE said...
on Sep. 28 at 10:17 am
kmagic BRONZE, Denver, Colorado
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This made me almost cry my god this is such a beautiful peace.

GigiK BRONZE said...
on Sep. 25 at 10:35 pm
GigiK BRONZE, Hayward, California
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This is so beautifullllllll
I’m dyinggggggg

deanib BRONZE said...
on Sep. 18 at 7:54 pm
deanib BRONZE, Valle Vista, California
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I really enjoyed your description of how the sun felt in your chest and how it coated your tongue. However, I would say that the ending doesn't really fell resolved.

on Sep. 12 at 10:50 am
rockstar_KK GOLD, Farmington, New Mexico
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Very descriptive. Well done.

on Sep. 8 at 8:08 pm
ramblingwriter_7 GOLD, Dublin, Ohio
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Favorite Quote:
"I've realized now that our world doesn't define us, we define our world."

Beautiful! Great job.

on Aug. 25 at 2:29 pm
natalie_reed13 GOLD, Blair, Nebraska
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Favorite Quote:
If you want to win, you have to first believe that you can.

@astork1322

on Aug. 24 at 10:12 am
littlesun BRONZE, Plymouth, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
You're a hairy, wizard

this is soo beautiful omg

on Aug. 18 at 2:53 am
Clary_Fray DIAMOND, Castro Valley, California
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Favorite Quote:
foolish consistency is the hobgoblin of the mind
-rwe

I like this a lot

on Aug. 10 at 5:31 am
TeaOnPluto PLATINUM, Dublin, Other
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You have talent, this is really beautiful.

on Jul. 28 at 5:12 am
Meghali Bari BRONZE, Indore, Other
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This poem is really wonderful .

on Jul. 25 at 3:39 pm
Summer_R_Quinn PLATINUM, Sioux Falls, South Dakota
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Favorite Quote:
If you chase two rabbits, you will lose them both.
- Native American proverb

Do not go gentle into that good night but rage, rage against the dying of the light.
- Dylan Thomas

What is past is past -- it is the present and the future that concern us.
- Hiawatha, founder of the Iroquois Confederacy

This poem is so beautiful I'm speechless. I love the style, keep up the good work!

on Jul. 21 at 6:39 pm
Notte_Stellata SILVER, San Jose, California
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Favorite Quote:
"If you cannot do it, practice until you can do it. If you can do it, then practice till you can do it perfectly. If you can do it perfectly, then practice until you can do it perfectly every time."
- Yuzuru Hanyu

It's beautiful, and I don't know... I think the word that represents it the best is 'Freedom'. Incredible Poem. Keep writing!

on Jun. 27 at 3:47 pm
EyesofIris SILVER, South Burlington, Vermont
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Favorite Quote:
"I've always loved the idea of not being what people expect me to be." -Anonymous

I love this poem, thank you for sharing!

on Jun. 22 at 9:36 pm
Bronwyn-Sophronia-Atlet ELITE, Dardenne Prairie, Missouri
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Favorite Quote:
"To these the past hath its phantoms,
More real than solid earth;
And to these death does not mean decay,
But only another birth"
- Isabella Banks

P.S.: I submitted a feedback post for you, and really hope your piece gets published!! Gah! I love it so much!!!!

on Jun. 22 at 9:23 pm
Bronwyn-Sophronia-Atlet ELITE, Dardenne Prairie, Missouri
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Favorite Quote:
"To these the past hath its phantoms,
More real than solid earth;
And to these death does not mean decay,
But only another birth"
- Isabella Banks

This gave me the chills! So powerful, raw, and touching. I can feel the tone of the poem, a soft, ephemeral heart beat, seeping through my computer screen. This is an amazing piece, and I encourage you to continue writing enthralling poetry such as this!


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