From the waves crashing on the sand
Like the wind running through my hand
Number one is the pier where I fear
From the clouds fill up the sky as the heat is trapped in side
For as the cold water washes the shore spraying on me off the rocks
                                                                               As I was drenched as ever
New
NEW      is the issue
Extra     is nothing
The        Dna is Ebola
The        Aliens
The       3-D micro People
                                                             THE END

I feel great about my writing is that I noticed that I grew as a writer by doing this because there is always something you can do to make your poem better even if it is even a word it changes a lot of the felling of the poem i love my writing because it about me. My favorite piece of the poems is the is rymes. My favorite piece and why is the first poem because it really brings out the feeling of the pear and the water and how cold and nice it would be “For as the cold water washes the shore spraying on me off the rocks.”  The 3 changes I made where number one, line stanzas and number two, I made the words more complex number three, I cut out parts that didn't make much sense like for ex in my first poem i took it like a kit in the sk i didn't think it was good to be in there.