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Fallen From Grace

March 22, 2016
By Amara-rose GOLD, Pendleton, Indiana
Amara-rose GOLD, Pendleton, Indiana
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Favorite Quote:
Let go and live.

I've fallen from grace
Crashed through the sky
Landing crumpled where I lie
My sins are what sent me tumbling
Weighting down my soul.
Wings ripped out
Im bleeding from the scars
I've been cast out forever
My golden halo no longer shines
My sins forever haunt me
Lies, darkness, and empty eyes.
My fall from grace has left me hallow
Wishing for the girl who used to fly
Before the lies
Before the wrong paths my feet followed
My mortal sins confine me
Tormenting me in the form of
Darkness and daemons
which attack me from all sides
As they invade my mind.
If not for  being branded on my soul
I'd just wash them all away
Hoped to turn the water black
Cleansing the shadows to light again
Ill live amongst the sinners now
Forced to fight and try to survive
It's my eternal punishment.
Forced to wonder with those like me
Other who have fallen
because of their dark and secret sins
Aging till we die.
Maybe then I'll be forgiven
For the sins written in my soul.
Maybe then in deaths embrace
ill be able to fly again .

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This article has 2 comments.

on Mar. 29 2016 at 9:52 pm
CalmingCalligraphy BRONZE, Lake Oswego, Oregon
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Favorite Quote:
"All you need in this life is ignorance and confidence, and then success is sure." (Mark Twain)

Beautiful! The word choice is great, but when you read it aloud, it doesn't sound quite right. Maybe try having a certain amount of syllables every other line next time to even it out, or write the poem as more of a conversation with the reader.

on Mar. 29 2016 at 9:30 pm
Consalvator BRONZE, South Jordan, Utah
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Favorite Quote:
"Once you make a decision, the universe conspires to make it happen." - Ralph Waldo Emerson

I love your imagery. It's very powerful. Watch your meter, it's very sporadic, making the poem read a bit choppy. Also, I don't really understand your rhyme scheme, it also seemed random. The emotion was powerful too, there was clear pain woven in each line beautifully. Very nice.