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Magnolia MAG

February 3, 2009
By Jeremy SILVER, Courtland, Virginia
Jeremy SILVER, Courtland, Virginia
6 articles 15 photos 1 comment

extend from
an ever-so-big body;
like arms that hold
a nest of young birds
or offer a home to those who
seek shelter in her shade
from sun and rain. Her flowers
perch precariously
upon her embossed
green leaves and seem
to glow in a beautiful blend
of whites and pinks
that provide her with a perfume
all her own. They are the same
petals that make me look forward
to their beautiful blooms in the spring,
when the sun and sky reflect off her leaves.
When I sit in her arms, close to her body.
She doesn't seem to mind
that I talk to her and tell
her all my stories. And she,
in return, provides me
with a place to go
and escape the world.

The author's comments:
This is the revised version, and in my opinion, a lot better than the first. i actually revised this one three different times.

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on Aug. 15 2010 at 10:23 pm
Marlyre PLATINUM, Kalamazoo, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
"when you cry, do you waste your tears?" Madonna

you paint a beautiful picture, with a maternal vibe about the description of the tree... read someof mine?

on Mar. 26 2010 at 9:36 pm
firstsnowfalls DIAMOND, Marcellus, New York
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Great Job!  Nice imagery.  I can relate.  Its nice to have a place like that!!

jwlamm said...
on Mar. 18 2010 at 7:43 am
Thank you so much for the comment. Believe it or not, your comment about me making your day actually made my day! Thank You immensly!! May God bless!!!!

on Nov. 18 2009 at 2:59 pm
greenwithvelvet SILVER, Fallon, Nevada
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Great voice. I have a place at home just like that...I haven't been there in a while...

Amber1994 GOLD said...
on Nov. 9 2009 at 7:07 pm
Amber1994 GOLD, Roanoke, Illinois
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amazing! that sums it all into one word.

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on Nov. 8 2009 at 8:41 pm
kaseyparks PLATINUM, Houston, Texas
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this is AMAZING.

on Nov. 6 2009 at 9:28 pm
MorningStar15 DIAMOND, Orange, Vermont
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wow amazing <3

on Nov. 5 2009 at 7:22 am
IgniteTheAirwaves PLATINUM, New City, New York
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Favorite Quote:
"Don't ever tell anybody anything. If you do, you start missing everybody." -J.D. Salinger, Catcher in the Rye

I really like this poem. If I had any suggestions, it would just be to make more of a purpose to your line breaks. They just seemed a bit distracting. But still, great job.

on Nov. 4 2009 at 9:03 am
songofthenight SILVER, Manistee, Michigan
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So pretty! And the poem itself kind of looks like half a tree. Beautiful!

Shelby1984 said...
on Feb. 25 2009 at 5:31 pm
I just loved this poem it brought tears to my eyes.How wonderful it is to go on line and read this poem it just makes my day so much better.I am very proud of this yound man he puts his whole heart into it.God Bless You