Like A | Teen Ink

Like A

June 15, 2014
By gboo12 SILVER, Bergen County, New Jersey
gboo12 SILVER, Bergen County, New Jersey
6 articles 0 photos 18 comments

A bullet through my heart
Death on a rainy day
A wart on my pinky
The aftermath,
It never goes away.

Your eyes
Like lasers
Sear a hole
Through my chest

You hurt me
I love you
And you don’t love me (back)

The sound of your voice
Is not loud enough
To stop me from
Thinking about how

Hands through my hair
On my shoulders
On my breasts
On my neck

I look back
And wonder why
I let
I love
And made my heart hurt

A bullet shot
Right through it.

The author's comments:
This guy that I am friends with loves his girlfriend (they just broke up but he still does) and he doesn't know that I have liked him all along. This poem isn't entirely about my experience but it was inspired by him.

Similar Articles


This article has 12 comments.

gboo12 SILVER said...
on Nov. 16 2014 at 1:44 pm
gboo12 SILVER, Bergen County, New Jersey
6 articles 0 photos 18 comments
thank you so much! and "back" is in parentheses to clarify that she is in love with him and he doesn't love her "back" essentially. I didn't feel it was necessary to write there that is why it is the way it is.

on Oct. 16 2014 at 10:30 am
AutumnMoon BRONZE, Lebanon, Maine
3 articles 0 photos 23 comments

Favorite Quote:
"We see our better selves in the eyes of those who love us." -Cassandra Clare

I love the part about letting lovely become I love. That was my favorite part of the poem. I feel like this a very relatable piece and beautifully done. Is there a reason that back is in parentheses? Fabulous! 5/5

on Oct. 13 2014 at 10:42 am
EmilytheBelleofA. DIAMOND, Athens, Georgia
81 articles 5 photos 1486 comments

Favorite Quote:
To love is to be vulnerable; Triumph is born out of struggle; We notice shadows most when they stand alone in the midst of overwhelming light.

This is beautiful and sweet and just, all in all, has musical atmosphere or air around it. A tinkling, haha. If that makes sense. :) You really do have such a beautiful way of writing. Nevr stop writing, please. I hope to be readin more of your writings, because I'll be looking for it. :) Thank you so much, for sharing this. :)

Longlegs GOLD said...
on Aug. 3 2014 at 7:41 am
Longlegs GOLD, Greeneville, Tennessee
16 articles 0 photos 84 comments
What a nice, musical, easy-going poem. I'm giving it 5 stars.

on Jun. 29 2014 at 3:08 pm
Olivia-Atlet ELITE, Dardenne Prairie, Missouri
324 articles 10 photos 1165 comments

Favorite Quote:
"To these the past hath its phantoms,
More real than solid earth;
And to these death does not mean decay,
But only another birth"
- Isabella Banks

sweet! Keep writing! XD

on Jun. 23 2014 at 2:13 pm
LavanderMayday SILVER, Oroville, California
7 articles 0 photos 72 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Writers aren't exactly one person, they're a whole bunch of people trying to be one person"

Hello! I enjoyed reading this poem. I also liked the title, and the poem was simple yet sweet and just,,yeah, it was good. Nice job!

on Jun. 23 2014 at 1:08 pm
HayatC. PLATINUM, Louisville, Kentucky
25 articles 0 photos 59 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Do not pray for an easy life, pray for the strength to endure a difficult one."

Love how you incorporated the beginning lines in the end, it made the poem resonate! Great Job!

on Jun. 22 2014 at 11:07 pm
SabrinaFaire SILVER, Odenville, Alabama
5 articles 0 photos 32 comments

Favorite Quote:
"You aren't going to impose the patriarchal paradigm on ME." Alaska Young

Truly moving.

EileenD said...
on Jun. 22 2014 at 10:16 pm
EileenD, Paramus, New Jersey
0 articles 0 photos 1 comment
That was so deep. This is so relatable to teens my age. Keep up the good work

on Jun. 21 2014 at 11:37 pm
AllThingsFlawless GOLD, Las Vegas, Nevada
10 articles 2 photos 29 comments

Favorite Quote:
“To gain your own voice, you have to forget about having it heard.”
—Allen Ginsberg, WD

This is just beautiful. Just beautiful

gboo12 SILVER said...
on Jun. 18 2014 at 5:44 pm
gboo12 SILVER, Bergen County, New Jersey
6 articles 0 photos 18 comments
wow, thank you so much! means so much to me!

HudaZav SILVER said...
on Jun. 17 2014 at 10:11 pm
HudaZav SILVER, Toronto, Other
8 articles 6 photos 390 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Nothing is impossible; the word itself says 'I'm possible'!" -Audrey Hepburn

Very well written piece! It really touched me, kept me hooked from the first line to the last. I'll be on the lookout for more of your work =)