Motes of Color

May 9, 2014
By .king. SILVER, Yeux Bien Tres Bien, Other
.king. SILVER, Yeux Bien Tres Bien, Other
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"What is a rainbow?
-I have not seen."
Bewildered, as the words
Evaporated
From her sandy lips.

"Delightful crystal motes
of color," said I.
"They celebrate in the
ending ceremony
of a pleasurable shower.
Hand-in-hand they arch across
the blue, a dainty bridge
in the clouds."

I didn't know if she grasped
my vision

I smiled.

Her wide eyes steered away.
She looked up at the African sky,

I think she saw...


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AmericaniumJ said...
on Jun. 19 2015 at 7:32 pm
AmericaniumJ, Eureka, Utah
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Though she be but little, she is fierce!
-Shakespeare

I love the imagery! Beautiful poem!!!!

.king. SILVER said...
on Mar. 5 2015 at 12:37 pm
.king. SILVER, Yeux Bien Tres Bien, Other
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Wow, thanks for the helpful feedback, Amai. I shall keep that in mind. ^_^

on Mar. 1 2015 at 7:40 am
Allen. PLATINUM, Palo Alto, California
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[i]No matter how much people try to put you down or make you think other things about yourself, the only person you can trust about who you really are is you[/i] -Crusher-P

I like this poem very much. I think if there were something to improve, it would be the word choice and flow. The word choice at times can get too complex for the poem to flow properly, and I think you should just use the words that come to mind. I have great faith in you.

-Mavis- BRONZE said...
on Jan. 12 2015 at 6:36 pm
-Mavis- BRONZE, Hilo, Hawaii
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"pretty words are worth being cynical over, for they are just baits to be caught in the moment." -mavi

"What exactly would change if I cried, wanted revenge, was consumed by hatred, or went insane with rage?" -Yoshino

"I am your shadow. Worry not for if your light is dim, I will become darker so that you can become more defined.“ -mavi

"We create beautiful things to mask what we destroyed in order to create such.” -mavi

rawr. lol man. your poetry- 2Gud4Me

.king. SILVER said...
on Dec. 18 2014 at 5:51 am
.king. SILVER, Yeux Bien Tres Bien, Other
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@Mavis808 :O

.king. SILVER said...
on Nov. 1 2014 at 4:02 am
.king. SILVER, Yeux Bien Tres Bien, Other
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Hope you like it..? :)    Thanks for commenting. :D

.king. SILVER said...
on Nov. 1 2014 at 4:02 am
.king. SILVER, Yeux Bien Tres Bien, Other
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Glad you do! :D ♥

.king. SILVER said...
on Nov. 1 2014 at 4:01 am
.king. SILVER, Yeux Bien Tres Bien, Other
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Aww, you're amazing! Thanks so much, Emily! :3 ♥ ♥  ♥

.king. SILVER said...
on Nov. 1 2014 at 4:00 am
.king. SILVER, Yeux Bien Tres Bien, Other
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Thank you! I am throughly encouraged by this comment, thank you for your kind words. :D ♥ ♥ ♥

.king. SILVER said...
on Oct. 30 2014 at 1:11 pm
.king. SILVER, Yeux Bien Tres Bien, Other
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..Do I know you? O_O Thanks, by the way! :D

on Oct. 29 2014 at 3:48 pm
Armadeus_Zoolitzer GOLD, Ratter Corner, Other
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"Arose by any other name is still the past tense of arise." Steve Patterson on CBC's The Debators "The devil's greatest trick was chopping the water into separate bathtubs. Then attaching claws to those bathtubs." Bob Schofield's The Inevitable June

This poem creates a feeling of peace and reminds us that even in this rushed and hectic life it is important to take some time and marvel at something as seemingly simple as an act of nature which; if you think about it; really is a thing to behold.   This poem features vivid imagery mixed with a strong and clear presence of voice that doesn't distract- if anything it adds- to the story being told and the scene created. You have such a talent for taking what could be such a dull picture and molding it into something vibrant and beautiful. It's a rare gift that you should truly be proud of, as you should be proud of this work. I thoroughly enjoyed it. 

on Aug. 29 2014 at 5:48 pm
EmilytheBelleofA. DIAMOND, Athens, Georgia
81 articles 5 photos 1492 comments

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To love is to be vulnerable; Triumph is born out of struggle; We notice shadows most when they stand alone in the midst of overwhelming light.

This is absolutely beautiful. Very breath-taking. ^_^ I love it. You're very descritptive in it, and I like that. All in all, al I can say is that you're a wonderful writer and person. You have a lot of talent! Thank you for sharing this! ^_^

Gangsta said...
on Aug. 24 2014 at 10:11 am
Felt like I got dropped in the hood and the blood was different colors... man it makes me miss my homies. Oh lovely story btw.

on May. 18 2014 at 2:59 pm
ShadowOfDarkness PLATINUM, Sioux Falls, South Dakota
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Coute que coute(Cost What It May)

this was a new experience of style for me

on May. 18 2014 at 2:39 pm
Bronwyn-Sophronia-Atlet ELITE, Dardenne Prairie, Missouri
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"To these the past hath its phantoms,
More real than solid earth;
And to these death does not mean decay,
But only another birth"
- Isabella Banks

Love it! XD




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