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April 29, 2014
By Hanban12 ELITE, Lake Worth, Florida
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Hanban12 ELITE, Lake Worth, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
"If you have built castles in the air, your work need not be lost; that is where they should be. Now put foundations under them."
Henry David Thoreau

"I fell in love the way you fall asleep; slowly, and then all at once."
John Green

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Breathe deep while you still can;
Veer from their ragged breaths which
Heave from corrupted lungs.
A word of advice:
Breathe graciously
While the air is still
Pure.

© Samantha A., Southbury, CT

The author's comments:
This originally started off as a Haiku, and then transformed into something all of its own :P
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This article has 11 comments.

EmilytheBelleofA. DIAMOND said...
on Aug. 24 2014 at 12:38 am
EmilytheBelleofA. DIAMOND, Athens, Georgia
81 articles 5 photos 1486 comments

Favorite Quote:
To love is to be vulnerable; Triumph is born out of struggle; We notice shadows most when they stand alone in the midst of overwhelming light.

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You inspire so much people, Hanban12! I thank you for inspiring me, and I'm glad that you inspire more people than me. You inspire, you just do. I agree with Liv.Harris tecaher's quote. You a truly wonderful person and writer. Thank you for sharing this, I love it. 
Hanban12 ELITE said...
on Jul. 1 2014 at 4:53 pm
Hanban12 ELITE, Lake Worth, Florida
133 articles 7 photos 631 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you have built castles in the air, your work need not be lost; that is where they should be. Now put foundations under them."
Henry David Thoreau

"I fell in love the way you fall asleep; slowly, and then all at once."
John Green

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And that is the best advice out there, to write like no ones reading. It makes my day to know that I can inspire :)
Olivia-Atlet ELITE said...
on Jun. 30 2014 at 7:57 pm
Olivia-Atlet ELITE, Dardenne Prairie, Missouri
325 articles 10 photos 1165 comments

Favorite Quote:
"To these the past hath its phantoms,
More real than solid earth;
And to these death does not mean decay,
But only another birth"
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You remind me of my sixth grade teacher. She told my work was too reserved, and she could tell I was itching to write something else. So she gave me a quote I will never forget "Write like no one's reading." I don't know who said it, but I do know that it inspired me. And so does your work! It makes me want to write something inspiring, maybe a little raw. Keep up the great work!
HudaZav SILVER said...
on Jun. 24 2014 at 9:57 am
HudaZav SILVER, Toronto, Other
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"Nothing is impossible; the word itself says 'I'm possible'!" -Audrey Hepburn

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This short poem is so extremely powerful. All your poems are amazing, keep it up! 
Hanban12 ELITE said...
on May. 18 2014 at 8:34 pm
Hanban12 ELITE, Lake Worth, Florida
133 articles 7 photos 631 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you have built castles in the air, your work need not be lost; that is where they should be. Now put foundations under them."
Henry David Thoreau

"I fell in love the way you fall asleep; slowly, and then all at once."
John Green

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Thank you entirely for taking the time to read this :)
SunnyDreams BRONZE said...
on May. 18 2014 at 3:49 pm
SunnyDreams BRONZE, Niger Falls, Other
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Can you feel what I have seen, when no one else has lived through what I have?-HalveOfLife

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Dear Hannah, the world needs this advice.  Breathing deep and soundlessly, is the only way one can see the world for what is it worth.  Only way the wolrd would understand the beauty of ones inner soul.  Thank you entirely for writing this piece.
Hanban12 ELITE said...
on May. 7 2014 at 5:33 pm
Hanban12 ELITE, Lake Worth, Florida
133 articles 7 photos 631 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you have built castles in the air, your work need not be lost; that is where they should be. Now put foundations under them."
Henry David Thoreau

"I fell in love the way you fall asleep; slowly, and then all at once."
John Green

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Thank you so much, I actually thought I could have done better with this :P
Love2Read72 PLATINUM said...
on May. 3 2014 at 12:17 pm
Love2Read72 PLATINUM, Kentfield, California
24 articles 0 photos 105 comments

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"Life isn’t about how to survive the storm, it’s about learning to dance in the rain.” — Taylor Swift

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No words . . . This poem actually makes me think. I like the word choice and the overall meaning.
hopeisnotcrazy SILVER said...
on May. 3 2014 at 9:25 am
hopeisnotcrazy SILVER, None, Virginia
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"I don't want to start, but I will." -the amazing ZE FRANK!!!

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I love the sudden change in rhythm in the middle. At first the lines are longer with more complicated word choice and ideas, then suddenly: "A word of advice:" It's like you're jumping in, like an intervention. It shocks the reader to read the last three lines clearly. Well done!
Columbus BRONZE said...
on May. 2 2014 at 4:32 pm
Columbus BRONZE, Columbus, Ohio
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Thank you for writing something that I can contemplate :)
x_rbdf GOLD said...
on May. 2 2014 at 7:31 am
x_rbdf GOLD, Augusta, Georgia
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Its Speaks To Me.... I love the way ,Idk Speachless 100 % Beautiful