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Final Goodbye

December 24, 2013
By Cat521 SILVER, Berwick, Maine
Cat521 SILVER, Berwick, Maine
6 articles 0 photos 14 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Think, before you speak. Know, before you react. Love, before you hate. There is far too much anger and hatred in the world for you to be the cause of anymore."


Slipping out
Of your life
Much like how
I came in

Hoping to avoid
You noticing
Me leaving

If you saw
You might beg me to stay
Ask me why I must go

It is hard to leave
Even after all
You put me through

I must move on
Before you see
Trying to catch
Up with me

I am sorry to leave
But I can’t bare to stay
I just cannot let you see
Me this way

As I go
Please do not notice
Or even say goodbye

I miss you already
But I am not gone yet
Crying inside as I leave
Smiling with each step

If I am wrong
You have moved on
Will not miss me
As I leave

I say goodbye
Farewell
Hopefully not
To meet again
Someday


The author's comments:
This piece is about just saying goodbye to that friendship that isn't helpful and just hurts you but you don't want to let it go. Though in the end you realize you have to.

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on Dec. 30 2013 at 3:19 pm
writing.is.my.life. SILVER, Newburgh, New York
7 articles 0 photos 29 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I can do all things through Christ who gives me strength." Philippians 4:13

"Perspective is a lovely hand to hold." -Matthew Thiessen

I really like the concept in this poem. It's slightly choppy, but other than that, it's beautiful! I really got into the emotion of it, especially after saying goodbye to a close friend that I'll never see again. Very moving. good job! (:

on Dec. 28 2013 at 9:12 pm
Myvoice4change SILVER, Other, Other
9 articles 3 photos 164 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Everything will be ok in the end. If it's not okay, it's not the end."

I have a suggestion that you maybe make all the stanzas the same length, but that's just an idea. It should be ok because you have a pattern of either having 3 or 4 lines per stanza. I like the idea of this poem!

Taconut7 GOLD said...
on Dec. 28 2013 at 8:42 pm
Taconut7 GOLD, Cohasset, Minnesota
17 articles 1 photo 34 comments

Favorite Quote:
Life's challenges are not to bring you down, they are to help you become a stronger and better person! -Me

"If you judge a fish by its ability to climb a tree, it will forever live its life believing it is stupid." - Albert Einstein

Nice poem, I think you could add some more emotion and imagery to make this even better (that's just my personal opinion). Otherwise great job!