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Agonizing Pain

November 2, 2013
By JennieRain SILVER, Guam, Other
JennieRain SILVER, Guam, Other
5 articles 0 photos 3 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I create my Own Legends"


My knees shaking,
My body shivering.
This pain is too much,
It makes me yearn for your touch.
My voice that seemed to be lost,
This agony that makes me feel like a holocaust.

These words that i wanted to yell them out,
They came out as whimpers and whispers, instead of a shout.
This agonizing pain,
It reminds me that i am living in vain.
My heart feels like it's being ripped out and torn apart,
And my body is full of bruises like a work of art.

My soul is torn,
I wish i could have been reborn.
That way maybe just maybe i would've chosen a different path,
And i wouldn't be able to feel this wrath.
This agonizing pain,
It reminds me of how much poisons have gone into my veins.


The author's comments:
"Life is like a roller coaster. It has it's ups and down. Sometimes you may want to give up. But before you do, think about others and how you actions may affect them. It's okay to lose. Because there will be second chances. It's okay to make mistakes, we're not perfect. But learn from those mistakes. Trust me i know what it feels like to lose. fall down and i have had made a lot of mistakes. But i have moved on and i let those things be a lesson for me."

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on Nov. 27 2013 at 10:55 pm
JennieRain SILVER, Guam, Other
5 articles 0 photos 3 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I create my Own Legends"

thank you..  

on Nov. 27 2013 at 10:40 pm
heartagramflex PLATINUM, Moore, South Carolina
31 articles 0 photos 33 comments

Favorite Quote:
"No hope = No fear." - Peter Steele

Beautiful.

on Nov. 8 2013 at 5:08 am
JennieRain SILVER, Guam, Other
5 articles 0 photos 3 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I create my Own Legends"

@ raternat, in a way yes i did made the i's lower case. Because that way it will show more emotions. Just like you said. But that does not mean the speaker's way of speaking is not important. I was trying to make my readers feel some kind of emotion just by reading my poem. 

raternat GOLD said...
on Nov. 5 2013 at 9:39 pm
raternat GOLD, Tampa, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
"I believe a leaf of grass is no less than the journey work of the stars." - Walt Whitman "Song of Myself"

Hi! I was wonderign, did you make the i lower case to show that the speaker is insignificant? Because if you did that's a really cool tactic! I loved it! It invoked a lot of feeling, something totally relatable!