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Regret

October 3, 2013
By Amari Freshley BRONZE, Detroit, Michigan
Amari Freshley BRONZE, Detroit, Michigan
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Staying up till light returns,
head back while the liquor burns,
eyes red, and words slur,
head spinning
vision blurred.

The walls seem so near,
a crowded room,
my thoughts are far from clear.
Vague

trying to talk but I'm paralyzed,
bathroom water splashed on my eyes,
physically I'm foundered,
Mentally realized,
The person in the mirror is all lies.

This is not safe, this is not me
It took all the throwing just to see.
I am more than enough,
not another shot, or another puff.


The author's comments:
The poem "Regret" was written from the mistakes some typical teenagers or college students make in their early years. Once you have matured or grown to know that those things aren't as "fun" as you may have perceived. Within this poem I used many rhetorical strategies or writing decisions to appeal to my audience. I used imagery to paint the image and give a lay-out of the setting. I also used many line breaks to put emphasis on things that I felt were significant or were worth the need of some power. My mentor poet Dina Haveric, from Teen Ink also used line breaks, which led me to utilize this into my poem. My writing has pretty much stayed the same the only change would have to be adding more line breaks than usual. In conclusion, I used many strategies to entertain my reader hoping someone could connect or relate to a similar situation. Also, to try to persuade readers not to interact in drinking and smoking.

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dinks PLATINUM said...
on May. 21 2014 at 5:15 pm
dinks PLATINUM, Hinsdale, Illinois
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Favorite Quote:
"and kisses are a better faith than freedom"

love this poem!