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Stepping Stones

August 7, 2013
By ss.Heart SILVER, San Jose, California
ss.Heart SILVER, San Jose, California
8 articles 0 photos 11 comments

Favorite Quote:
You try you fail,you try you fail, but the only true failure is when you stop trying.


I hear an empty breeze calling out to me,
The sound of plain defeat enveloping me inside,
The feeling is too painful,
But i take it in a stride,
Sometimes i feel like nothing works,
And my whole worlds coming down,
But then i hear an angelic voice,
A resonating sound,
That says dear child hold on!
And tonight when you go home,
Don't forget to remember,
That failures are stepping stones



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on Sep. 12 2013 at 1:21 am
ss.Heart SILVER, San Jose, California
8 articles 0 photos 11 comments

Favorite Quote:
You try you fail,you try you fail, but the only true failure is when you stop trying.

Dear, Tori girl, Thank you SOOOO much for your thoughts.Yes i believe that its okay if sometimes we try, we fail,we try we fail, but the only TRUE failure is when we STOP trying. :)

on Sep. 1 2013 at 6:40 pm
tori-gurl PLATINUM, Norwich, New York
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smile through everything no matter how bad it gets because it could be worse and if it gets worse well then it can only get better. :)

This poem is constructed so well and i love how you admit that you are defeated, but will never give up. I think the rhyming in this poem is necessary and doesnt interupt the flow of this poem. In fact, your poem flows very well and your choice of when to start a new line is articulated very well. The first line of this poem just drew me in immediately and then the end circles back to your title. I love how well constructed this is. Good Job and keep up the good work! :D

on Aug. 31 2013 at 3:43 pm
ss.Heart SILVER, San Jose, California
8 articles 0 photos 11 comments

Favorite Quote:
You try you fail,you try you fail, but the only true failure is when you stop trying.

Thanks! <3 I'll be sure to check those :)

on Aug. 27 2013 at 9:20 pm
Jade.I.Am ELITE, Fishers, Indiana
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Favorite Quote:
“If you're losing your soul and you know it, then you've still got a soul left to lose”
― Charles Bukowski

This is really good, if a little cliche, and you had a few grammatical errors. But that's just not picky, the overall idea was good and it was very well written. Good job! :)