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As I Entered Hell

June 18, 2013
By TheHuntress BRONZE, Konstancin- Jeziorna, Other
TheHuntress BRONZE, Konstancin- Jeziorna, Other
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Fire scorched for a second,
and infernal flare, retching my
limbs, my flesh of ash, from my

Water trickles in my dry eyes.
My lips tremble beneath my
bite. Blood drained from my
burning skin, frosted dry.
There is no air to breathe yet my
lungs swell- and choking, I
prick my fingertip and rub my

If you look into my blackened eye,
my stormy clouds will never cry.
The pain, my skin is numb though I
drink the smoke and eat my

On shaken legs again I try.
Wobble in stance where muscles fry.
My toes all black, I clench my
teeth, screaming for I don't know why
I cannot escape the ropes Hell ties.

For, after all, it was
who lit the

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on Aug. 17 2013 at 9:59 pm
tori-gurl PLATINUM, Norwich, New York
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Favorite Quote:
smile through everything no matter how bad it gets because it could be worse and if it gets worse well then it can only get better. :)

I love how you ended this poem, acknowledging that the hell you have entered was brought upon by yourself. I felt that this poem illustrates your points so beautifully, that I can't help but love every line! :) Your spacing is also very well thought out, and it makes the flow of the poem very smooth. Your rhyming also helps add to the flow, and none of the rhymes feel forced. I love when an author can make the rhyming come in a way that doesnt make the poem feel forced. Good Job! :)