Good Morning | TeenInk

Good Morning

April 20, 2013
By Mckay ELITE, Somewhere, Virginia
Mckay ELITE, Somewhere, Virginia
146 articles 0 photos 2260 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The people who are crazy enough to think they can change the world are the ones who do."
—Apple’s “Think Different” commercial, 1997
“Crazy people are considered mad by the rest of the society only because their intelligence isn't understood.”
― Weihui Zhou


There is something crisp
about this morning
with an azure
clouded-dappled sky
and a honeyed haze.

There is something sweet
about this morning:
the vase of violet orchids
that sits on our nightstand
are fresh and fragrant as
the day last week
when you brought them home
coming back from work.

There is something provocative
about this morning
with the only thing covering
our bodies
are these thin
cool cotton sheets so sheer
that the outlines
of both you and me
must be visible:
our warmth trapped beneath.
You roll over,
thinking I’m asleep,
and get out of bed
without bothering to put on your crumpled clothes,
lying on the floor next to mine,
or without covering your torso
with some sheets.
You bare backside recedes
from my view
as you go out to the kitchen
to brew our coffee.

There is something euphonic
about this morning,
as you get back in bed,
and your voice
is the first sound
to bid me, “Good morning,”
while our steaming coffee
brews in the background,
its guttural song
making it all the way
into our bedroom.
There is something promising
about this morning
with your smile greeting me,
your cheeks dimpling,
letting me know
that I still have
one more day
with you
today.


The author's comments:
I began to develop the idea of this poem in a afternoon. But I decided to wait until the nest morning to write in order for it to have a raw feeling. And this was what I came up with. I have to give MyApocolyptic for being some inspiration for me. Hope you all enjoy.

Similar Articles

JOIN THE DISCUSSION

This article has 156 comments.


on May. 12 2013 at 9:01 pm
laurengerhard SILVER, South Windsor, Connecticut
8 articles 0 photos 124 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I am gone quite mad with the knowledge of accepting the overwhelming number of things I can never know, places I can never go, and people I can never be." -Sylvia Plath

This structure is amazing. Your second stanza is my favorite.

on May. 12 2013 at 1:40 pm
ChocolateLove SILVER, Warsaw, Other
5 articles 6 photos 158 comments
I love it!!!! :D Great vocabulary and amazing imagery. :) 

on May. 10 2013 at 11:28 pm
AnotherSouthernGirl BRONZE, Augusta, Georgia
1 article 0 photos 5 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Shoot for the moon, and if you miss, you'll land amoung the stars."

I love the imagery and description.I can imagine myself as the character in the poem. You painted a beautiful scene. Great job!

on May. 10 2013 at 6:55 pm
GleekGamer PLATINUM, Somerset, New Jersey
28 articles 1 photo 34 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Friendship isn't always easy, but there's no doubt it's worth fighting for."

Haha. No, haven't met you, except you commented on my haiku, Pain at the Locker. :) I really appreciated your feedback!

Valery5 said...
on May. 10 2013 at 4:21 pm
Valery5, Riverside, California
0 articles 0 photos 74 comments

Favorite Quote:
"To be great is to be misunderstood."
"She's got the eyes of innocence, the face of an angel, a personality of a dreamer and a smile that hides more pain than you can ever imagine."
"What's bad for your heart is good for your art."

i love it i can picture a beautiful scene its great

Mckay ELITE said...
on May. 10 2013 at 4:09 pm
Mckay ELITE, Somewhere, Virginia
146 articles 0 photos 2260 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The people who are crazy enough to think they can change the world are the ones who do."
—Apple’s “Think Different” commercial, 1997
“Crazy people are considered mad by the rest of the society only because their intelligence isn't understood.”
― Weihui Zhou

Awww. I'm so happy it did that for you. Only thing I could ask for. Thanks, Rose. Really appreciate it. 

Mckay ELITE said...
on May. 10 2013 at 4:08 pm
Mckay ELITE, Somewhere, Virginia
146 articles 0 photos 2260 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The people who are crazy enough to think they can change the world are the ones who do."
—Apple’s “Think Different” commercial, 1997
“Crazy people are considered mad by the rest of the society only because their intelligence isn't understood.”
― Weihui Zhou

Thanks, Scar. And you don't sound dumb commenting on poetry. Better than most people who call themselves poets. Yeah right! Wow, I'm so mean. I don't mean in it in a mean way. Thanks.

Rose22 SILVER said...
on May. 10 2013 at 4:06 pm
Rose22 SILVER, Shutesbury, Massachusetts
6 articles 0 photos 1 comment
I realy like this poem it has a nice flow that makes me smile!

on May. 10 2013 at 4:06 pm
Scarlett_the_pegacorn BRONZE, Niceville, Florida
4 articles 24 photos 136 comments

Favorite Quote:
Don't tell me how to live my life; I do what I want.

Very descriptive. paints a very beautiful scene. :3

Mckay ELITE said...
on May. 10 2013 at 4:02 pm
Mckay ELITE, Somewhere, Virginia
146 articles 0 photos 2260 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The people who are crazy enough to think they can change the world are the ones who do."
—Apple’s “Think Different” commercial, 1997
“Crazy people are considered mad by the rest of the society only because their intelligence isn't understood.”
― Weihui Zhou

Oops. GleekGamer. Apologies.

Mckay ELITE said...
on May. 10 2013 at 2:00 pm
Mckay ELITE, Somewhere, Virginia
146 articles 0 photos 2260 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The people who are crazy enough to think they can change the world are the ones who do."
—Apple’s “Think Different” commercial, 1997
“Crazy people are considered mad by the rest of the society only because their intelligence isn't understood.”
― Weihui Zhou

Thank you. And nice to meet you, GleekGmaer. I don't think Iv'e met you before. If we have, then remind me. I'm known for having short-term memory. Not good. But what can you do? Oh well. ^u^ Thanks.

on May. 9 2013 at 5:30 pm
GleekGamer PLATINUM, Somerset, New Jersey
28 articles 1 photo 34 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Friendship isn't always easy, but there's no doubt it's worth fighting for."

Absolutely beautiful, well written: I really felt like I was there.

OldYoungOne said...
on May. 8 2013 at 2:54 pm
I love it. Like I love the sweet scent of my love in the morning after a night of passion (PG13 of coarse just makign out incestantly lol) I feel like this when i wake up to him. I feel complete. I like this poem a lot well done.

Mckay ELITE said...
on May. 7 2013 at 1:59 pm
Mckay ELITE, Somewhere, Virginia
146 articles 0 photos 2260 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The people who are crazy enough to think they can change the world are the ones who do."
—Apple’s “Think Different” commercial, 1997
“Crazy people are considered mad by the rest of the society only because their intelligence isn't understood.”
― Weihui Zhou

Phewww. I thought you wouldn't like someone calling you the way Draco normally does. XD Thanks.

Mckay ELITE said...
on May. 7 2013 at 1:58 pm
Mckay ELITE, Somewhere, Virginia
146 articles 0 photos 2260 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The people who are crazy enough to think they can change the world are the ones who do."
—Apple’s “Think Different” commercial, 1997
“Crazy people are considered mad by the rest of the society only because their intelligence isn't understood.”
― Weihui Zhou

Thanks. ^u^

on May. 7 2013 at 1:52 pm
VitamAeternam PLATINUM, Fenton, Michigan
26 articles 0 photos 6 comments

Favorite Quote:
“Only the very weak-minded refuse to be influenced by literature and poetry.”
― Cassandra Clare

Great imagery... Love it

on May. 7 2013 at 9:02 am
PotterWhoLocked GOLD, Montclair, Virginia
13 articles 0 photos 28 comments

Favorite Quote:
“Wednesdays are limbo days. Monday is the beginning of the week, Tuesday is getting used to it, Thursday is looking forward to Friday and Friday is getting ready for the weekend. Wednesdays aren’t really anything in particular. They’re just there.”

lol you can say my name any way u like!

Mckay ELITE said...
on May. 6 2013 at 6:16 pm
Mckay ELITE, Somewhere, Virginia
146 articles 0 photos 2260 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The people who are crazy enough to think they can change the world are the ones who do."
—Apple’s “Think Different” commercial, 1997
“Crazy people are considered mad by the rest of the society only because their intelligence isn't understood.”
― Weihui Zhou

Thanks so much, Pottah. Sorry I couldn't resist saying your name that way. Thanks. ^u^

on May. 6 2013 at 3:12 pm
PotterWhoLocked GOLD, Montclair, Virginia
13 articles 0 photos 28 comments

Favorite Quote:
“Wednesdays are limbo days. Monday is the beginning of the week, Tuesday is getting used to it, Thursday is looking forward to Friday and Friday is getting ready for the weekend. Wednesdays aren’t really anything in particular. They’re just there.”

I love the bright imagery of this poem. It seems really peaceful to me. :)

Mckay ELITE said...
on May. 5 2013 at 7:52 pm
Mckay ELITE, Somewhere, Virginia
146 articles 0 photos 2260 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The people who are crazy enough to think they can change the world are the ones who do."
—Apple’s “Think Different” commercial, 1997
“Crazy people are considered mad by the rest of the society only because their intelligence isn't understood.”
― Weihui Zhou

Wow. Thanks. That just made my entire day. Was not expecting such kindness today. I overwhelmed that you find this poem memorable. It was a tough one to write. But it has paid off. I'm happy that you're one of these people who appreciate this poem. Thank you with all my enitre heart. I'm happy you "relished this poem. ^u^