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A Mixed-Up World

April 8, 2013
By ElisaTheDuck ELITE, Rigaud, Other
ElisaTheDuck ELITE, Rigaud, Other
323 articles 5 photos 166 comments

Favorite Quote:

A mixed-up world
Of pain and death
Of memories and hurt
Where all that lives
Is the past.

A mixed-up world
Of blood and fights
Of sadness and depression
Where all that thrives
Is the greed.

A mixed-up world
Of money and poverty
Of hunger and distress
Where all that remains
Is the want.

A mixed-up world
Of storms and floods
Of paths and choices
Where all that wins
Is the defeat.

A mixed-up world
Of loneliness and power
Of selfishness and ignorance
Where to all this leads
Is the end.

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on Apr. 21 2013 at 7:33 pm
LiraDaeris PLATINUM, Tucson, Arizona
22 articles 0 photos 135 comments

Favorite Quote:
“You have brains in your head. You have feet in your shoes. You can steer yourself any direction you choose. You're on your own. And you know what you know. And YOU are the one who'll decide where to go...”
― Dr. Seuss, Oh, the Places You'll Go!

You certainly know how to use repetition to your advantage. In your further works, experiment some more with this literary device, like Robert Frost did, and that will be another rower on your poetry canoe (terrible metaphor but oh well lol) Also the stanzas having five lines instead of four adds to the meaning of the poem because it is an odd mix-up from the traditional quatrain. Good going with structure control! :D