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Stars Like Diamonds

April 9, 2013
By LiraDaeris PLATINUM, Tucson, Arizona
LiraDaeris PLATINUM, Tucson, Arizona
22 articles 0 photos 135 comments

Favorite Quote:
“You have brains in your head. You have feet in your shoes. You can steer yourself any direction you choose. You're on your own. And you know what you know. And YOU are the one who'll decide where to go...”
― Dr. Seuss, Oh, the Places You'll Go!


(She Told Me Once That If I Was Gonna Get On My Knee, I'd Have To Do It Good.)

My fortune cookies determine my future,
My stars align, they compromise,                                             
So I ask yet again, will they ever learn
That what they decide's a slip of paper in my favor?
So sit back and watch as I draw out the lines      
That connect lonely stars in an endless sky.

I was alone in the world, the Morning Mars of the sky,
Forever infinite halves from feet in the future, 
And yet I get there anyways- I cross where the lines 
My logical boundaries confine, so I compromise
The Answers in my mind for my sanity's favor...
Perhaps with Confucius, or a Master's, the reason I will learn. 

But tonight, my dear, you will learn
Of your star and mine 'n this uneternal, infinite sky
That God must have draped as merely a favor,
To astound, to enwonder, His reflection of our future
From my star to yours, sacred, never compromised, 
Though thousands, or millions, will intermit our lines.

So follow my finger's line,
And see what I oncehad to learn
When a half-hearted compromise
Redefines Eros' arrow through two stars in the sky,
And ignites Draco's sword and Orion's flames through their future,
But seems what you would think'd be in Acrux's favor. 

One time guilty, forever the debtor, but the heavens must me favor 
For once the star had lost its shine, the other behind, straight in line
Of the path I wandered through my future,
My Polaris found me in my journey across an endless world's sky
The reason I may never learn
The chance I'll never compromise.

But how could I compromise?
Rather, I'd pay you more than I owed God's favor. 
But just give me time, my love, for the length of the sky 
Cannot compare to the debt of my crime. You know me - I never learn;
I connect the wrong stars with less right lines
I've one right, at least, a diamond North Star for our future. 

Therefore let fate not compromise- Someday, I'll figure the rest of the lines. 
If it be only for your favor, I swear, someday I'll learn
But I've the one that matters- the furrow in the sky that connects you and I, and forever and on forward through the future



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on May. 11 2013 at 11:56 am
AliceinWonderland13 GOLD, Dallas, Texas
14 articles 3 photos 1 comment
I really loved this. This is remarkable especially for a Sestina. I have great respect for a good one, which this is. I loved the references to stars. I think scientific style terms in poetry are brilliant when used well. This is wonderful.

on May. 3 2013 at 7:03 pm
readaholic PLATINUM, Tomahawk, Wisconsin
27 articles 0 photos 426 comments

Favorite Quote:
I'd rather fail because I fell on my own face than fall because someone tripped me up
~Jhonen Vasquez

I'm not great with poetic things like this, but it was still a very enjoyable read.   Very, very well written, love the word choice and flow of the piece.  Great work!

Mckay ELITE said...
on Apr. 22 2013 at 7:00 pm
Mckay ELITE, Somewhere, Virginia
146 articles 0 photos 2260 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The people who are crazy enough to think they can change the world are the ones who do."
—Apple’s “Think Different” commercial, 1997
“Crazy people are considered mad by the rest of the society only because their intelligence isn't understood.”
― Weihui Zhou

Powerful message plus imagery equals an outstanding piece of work.

Zach_M said...
on Apr. 22 2013 at 6:54 pm
I let my eyes sink into this and well, I have to say that it was a very unique article. I love how you used stars as an comparison to relationships. and the "North Star" being a someone with a goal, or a guide of some sort. It's very interesting how you wrote this, and I have to say I like it.

on Apr. 21 2013 at 7:39 pm
ElisaTheDuck ELITE, Rigaud, Other
323 articles 5 photos 168 comments

Favorite Quote:
LOOK AT MY PROFILE. DO IT.

This poem is absoluely amazingly beautiful!! (I know that's bad grammer, but it doesn't count when I like something. =P)

on Apr. 19 2013 at 12:47 am
LiraDaeris PLATINUM, Tucson, Arizona
22 articles 0 photos 135 comments

Favorite Quote:
“You have brains in your head. You have feet in your shoes. You can steer yourself any direction you choose. You're on your own. And you know what you know. And YOU are the one who'll decide where to go...”
― Dr. Seuss, Oh, the Places You'll Go!

Yay! You got it! Great observational skills :D This poem is in the style of a sestina, which is a poem consisting of 39 lines, 7 stanzas, with the first 6 ending in 6 words in 6 different orders and the last with 3 lines with two of the words per line. That's why "Compromise" pops up a lot. The stars are paralleling relationships with people, and the north star being his guide and what he is to keep aiming for. The half-hearted compromise stanza is when he made mistakes in his relationships, and then finally gets it right in the last 6-liner. I've been hoping someone like you would come along! High fives for being awesome!

on Apr. 19 2013 at 12:32 am
flightoflife BRONZE, Lancaster, South Carolina
1 article 0 photos 4 comments

Favorite Quote:
To be or not to be that is the question

I love this poem, plain and simple as I can put it. i love it. I love stars and the story of orion. I like how you used the word compromise alot. I like how it just rolls off your tongue. I also like the rhyme you used and the (i think it's a mataphor) that you use to make the stars sound like it's a life of a person and you were connecting the dots from one to another as they brushed past each other or said a simple hi as they pass in the hallway...at least that's what I got out of it

on Apr. 19 2013 at 12:25 am
PriyaModi BRONZE, Indore, Other
1 article 7 photos 23 comments

Favorite Quote:
I like the way i am,need no transformation,,,LOVE LIFE.

Nice 1..waiting 4 more such..

on Apr. 15 2013 at 12:30 am
romanticpoet GOLD, Dhaka, Other
16 articles 2 photos 26 comments

Favorite Quote:
love is like a rose, it has many colors & sights of beauty in spite of having thorns

very good poem . . . . it must say