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I Left Myself With You

September 12, 2012
By brianatetlow GOLD, Cinnaminson, New Jersey
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I left myself with you.
You watched me from the doorway,
Fingers running along the seams of your pockets and a couple of teeth pinning lips
And I went away, hours and days,
Miles and months.
States knew my name
Streets tasted my body as I went along
Lights and rain, sun and breezes
I made eye contact and never let go.
I left myself with you.
The majority of my being, body and soul, thoughts and eye contact
Stayed tied in the seams of your pockets.

© Chuck K., Marblehead, MA

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im not sure how to end the piece, and i had a last sentence before but i took it out because it didnt fit, i just have nothing to replace it with. please leave comments if you have an idea or something to help me end this, or if you like it like that.
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JasmineRose SILVER said...
on Sep. 15 2012 at 10:57 pm
JasmineRose SILVER, Bay Port, Michigan
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Beautiful description.
Kat_Poetry BRONZE said...
on Sep. 15 2012 at 3:14 pm
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I absolutly loved this! It is such a great poem and it flows very well. Nice job!