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Eaten up

July 26, 2012
By Kiki_McGee GOLD, Woodstock, Illinois
Kiki_McGee GOLD, Woodstock, Illinois
16 articles 16 photos 72 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Hope is the thing with feathers that perches in the soul - and sings the tunes without the words - and never stops at all." - Emily Dickinson

I'll eat you up.
Ruby jewels over pearl fangs,
Ivory hide with ebony shift.
Golden locks and smokey orbs.

I prey for you.
Your grin goes first.
Then your tongue --
I bite it off.
Slender claw --
Next to go;
Licked clean down to the bone.
Nails imbedded in your pelt,
Like flay knives
Tearing at your shell.

You're dead to me.
You clawed my chest
To pull my heart.
I've got nothing from you
But few limbs.
No need to thieve,
I promise.
You'll eat me up.

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on Aug. 12 2012 at 8:44 pm
PaigeStreet PLATINUM, Juneau, Alaska
47 articles 0 photos 218 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Stay golden"
- Johnny (The Outsiders, S. E. Hinton)

What an image cluster! The hard, shiny surfaces and the contrast to flesh! So image ridden. I love that about it.   

on Aug. 12 2012 at 10:07 am
Mashley310 BRONZE, Rowlett, Texas
2 articles 1 photo 25 comments

Favorite Quote:
"They always forget the last part of that saying: curiosity killed the cat but satisfaction brought it back" its something to that effect anyway." - Tamora Pierce

I really liked it! The imagery was amazing! :-)

on Aug. 10 2012 at 2:31 pm
orangechick18 SILVER, Cincinnati, Ohio
5 articles 1 photo 3 comments

Favorite Quote:
Life is not like a box of chocolates.It's more like a jar of jalapenos, what you do today,might burn your ass tomorrow!

I really enjoyed reading this, it was very detailed. I loved it.

villain123 said...
on Aug. 7 2012 at 8:22 pm
villain123, Bridgewater, New Jersey
0 articles 0 photos 41 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I'm okay with war as long as nobody gets hurt."

The phrases "pearl fangs" and "flay knives" were my favorite. There's a lot of jewelry imagery in this. I also like the idea of eating a grin, not technically possible but it makes sense as a metaphor. The first three lines of the last verse didn't fit in with the rest of the poem.