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If I die

July 9, 2012
By nakubara PLATINUM, Belvidere, New Jersey
nakubara PLATINUM, Belvidere, New Jersey
27 articles 18 photos 84 comments

Favorite Quote:
Everything you do in life is insignificant, but its important you do it anyway ~Ghandi

If I die in my sleep I want you to take my dreams
If I die in the blink of an eye I want you to take my sight
If I die because God needs an angel I want you to take my wings
If I die because you stop loving me I want to take my heart and my memories
Hold my heart next to yours as you watch my memories, our lives flash by
If you do what I ask I will live forever

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on Aug. 3 2012 at 12:25 pm
PurpOreos SILVER, Macomb, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
Keep smiling...Because life is a beautiful thing. And there is so much to smile about!
"Either write something worth reading or do something worth writing" Benjamin Franklin

Love this.....and the picture! and u got my full attention with the title...NICE!! Keep writting!!!!!!!

on Aug. 2 2012 at 6:47 pm
TraceBatWingsAndBrokenStrings DIAMOND, Oshkosh, Wisconsin
52 articles 0 photos 72 comments

Favorite Quote:
"This gun has stopped time in its tracks, has altered the course of our fate. Destiny is shattered and timeless. Closed eyes feel the cold winds embrace."
-Avenged Sevenfold

I like the imagery in this one. The line about God was pretty original. Nice job.

on Jul. 29 2012 at 12:45 pm
caitiekate GOLD, Hopkinton, New Hampshire
16 articles 0 photos 38 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Do what you want, not what you can." --Me

beautiful poem!! it's short, but powerful enough to stay in your mind!! i like the repetition too (:

on Jul. 23 2012 at 3:36 pm
Under-the-Rain GOLD, Chicago, Illinois
18 articles 5 photos 99 comments

Favorite Quote:
Are you ready to go to battle with your mind?- Written by me :)
Lost the battle, win the war//Bringing my sinking ship back to the shore- Paramore, Now

I LOVE IT, i love the repetition, this poem is very beautiful. 5 stars for sure.

on Jul. 23 2012 at 12:32 pm
Writer_Jordan GOLD, Ellicott City, Maryland
15 articles 0 photos 182 comments

Favorite Quote:
All that is gold does not glitter,
Not all those who wander are lost;
The old that is strong does not wither,
Deep roots are not reached by the frost.
From the ashes a fire shall be woken,
A light from the shadows shall spring;
Renewed shall be blade that was broken,
The crownless again shall be king.

I love it, so powerful and beautiful. You let a lot of the emotions seep through in every word.

on Jul. 23 2012 at 10:20 am
hippiechick99 GOLD, Mesquite, Texas
11 articles 0 photos 224 comments

Favorite Quote:
"... How dreary to be somebody-- How public like a frog;
To tell one's name; the livelong June-- To an admiring bog"
-Emily Dickinson

This is really beautiful... Your poems amaze me. Every single time. I hope you keep writing, Your poems are great and inspiring, though sometimes dark. I'll be looking forward to more of your work :)

Rain. SILVER said...
on Jul. 22 2012 at 6:12 pm
Rain. SILVER, Beechhurst, New York
7 articles 0 photos 64 comments

Favorite Quote:
No matter how high you are, you always have to come back down.

Your writing is amazing, it was very short and sweet and to the point but it was beautiful. 

on Jul. 19 2012 at 5:21 pm
CelestaCuffrig GOLD, Loveland, Colorado
11 articles 1 photo 19 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Inspiration is only as enlightening as you are open to it."

This is delightful... Your simple writing style makes your short poems that much more meaningful (: I love your expressions like "Hold my heart next to yours..." and "...take my wings...". There is a thin line on what is over the top, and what will make your readers want more. You definitely have the latter in your writing! Kepp it up (: