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July 27, 2008
By Anonymous

the hands of the clock were her merry-go-round
and she rides the gray horse
around, round, round
each dizzy whirl a year
a millennium
an eternity

it spins round, round
never stopping
never seeing
the girl with the revised smile
and the scratched-out heart

in just a moment
she will return to her world
the chapter of change predestined
her novel written for her
already?

in just a moment
it will happen
a slammed door
a plane lifting in flight
a world shattered

in just a moment
she will kiss his whispered promises
i’m here
i’m always here
and brush his hand
friction
and will say those words
good-bye

in just a moment
she will read his eyes
like the pages of her books
and will write his story around hers
in just a moment

the hands of the clock move on
and she stays on her gray horse
broken smile, broken heart
the moment; lost



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on Jan. 27 2012 at 11:11 pm
BlurredReflection BRONZE, Beaverton, Oregon
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Favorite Quote:
\\\"Giving up doesn\\\'t always mean your weak, sometimes it just means your strong enough to let go.\\\"

I teared up reading this. This is phenomonaly beautiful...

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on Jul. 10 2011 at 7:35 pm
KaliM. SILVER, Willis, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
Life is about trusting our feelings and taking chances, losing and finding happiness, appreciating the memories and learning from the past. ~ unknown

beautiful...

Goodjobbob said...
on Jan. 19 2011 at 11:45 am
I can definately realte! great jobbob!

on Nov. 14 2010 at 9:06 pm
casielynnxoxo SILVER, Pasadena, Maryland
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Favorite Quote:
"You'll never fully understand someone, unless you are them."

I absolutely love the part when it refers to kisssing his whispered promises. It's amazing. And so true, it takes a real poet to take such a simple action, and bring it to life.

Amazing. :)


Baller22 GOLD said...
on Aug. 18 2010 at 7:05 pm
Baller22 GOLD, New Albany, Indiana
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Favorite Quote:
Every story has an end, but in life every end is just a new beginning!

check out my poems! please!

on Aug. 18 2010 at 4:15 pm
UrAnGelBabY BRONZE, Pawtucket, Rhode Island
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Favorite Quote:
Don't be afraid to chase what you love but be sure to loose yourself in the chase.

I feel the same. reading this made my heart pound and my mind scream. i love it so i tagged =D

on Oct. 14 2009 at 9:05 pm
romance_lover GOLD, Edmonton, Other
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I can relate to this so much it made me cry. You are amazing. Never stop writing....

on Apr. 23 2009 at 12:49 am
nxexnxaxj BRONZE, Leominster, Massachusetts
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dis is soo good! 1 of ma faves

jazzy828 said...
on Apr. 22 2009 at 1:11 am
i didnt really get the poem probably because im just a kid. cna some1 explain it to me?

Mena<3 BRONZE said...
on Apr. 3 2009 at 1:27 pm
Mena<3 BRONZE, Darlington, Wisconsin
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you put so much emotion into this;

which you cut right to the point



i hate when people rhyme because sometimes they dont have a chance to get eveerything they want to say in.

and therfore the poem turns out different then they even wanted.



which yours is amazing so i dont think you'll have to ever worry about that!



good job=]

writerreader said...
on Feb. 10 2009 at 12:20 am
this poem was amazing, if you dont read closely you miss how good it is, it gave me emotions i could relate too,thank you for writing this, and be sure ill read it again

sup 01 said...
on Jan. 3 2009 at 6:52 pm
realy well written i liked because i hate it when people feel they must rym for it to be a poem when raely it gets more emotion across if you dont

on Jan. 3 2009 at 5:21 am
ohmigosh! its so good keep on wirting!

tweedle dee said...
on Dec. 30 2008 at 2:02 am
i liked it alright, could have used a little work but worth reading!

on Dec. 26 2008 at 6:37 pm
I loved this. Very inspirational; it got me thinking, gave me a view ideas.

crich97 said...
on Dec. 19 2008 at 2:20 am
Whoa. Just like a merry-go-round, that gave me motion sickness. I feel like the speed and the rhythem of the poem were very, well, varied. It was hard to follow. I like the idea a lot... and maybe I'm just reading it wrong. I have read it several times... just can't seem to find the right spot. Hmm...

unknown said...
on Dec. 12 2008 at 8:00 pm
"the hands of the clock were her merry-go-round

and she rides the gray horse"



you wrote "were" which is past tense but then "rides" which is present tense



bugs me

sexygurl101 said...
on Dec. 12 2008 at 4:54 pm
I love this poem. It was so beautiful i bet anyone who reads this would love it, just as much as i did.

swinginme! said...
on Dec. 11 2008 at 4:59 am
this was absolutely beautiful!!!



you have talent!!! omg i love this poem so so so much! gave me chills!



i wish i knew you so we could discuss writing style. cuz you are awesome!!

sleepnix said...
on Dec. 5 2008 at 12:26 pm
Excellent! Very nice usage of repetition. Enough, but not too much.