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Thin Ice

January 14, 2012
By recurring_resilience SILVER, Ashburn, Virginia
recurring_resilience SILVER, Ashburn, Virginia
9 articles 0 photos 92 comments

Favorite Quote:
"These are the times that try men's souls." - Thomas Paine.

"You don't understand! I coulda had class. I coulda been a contender. I could've been somebody, instead of a bum, which is what I am." - On the Water Front

"This is my place of failure."

Happiness was our lake
But you fell through the ice
Got a glance of misery
He looked so nice

He puts his arms around you
As I'm slowly frowning
His lips meet yours
While you're really drowning

I run out to aid you
But the ice is so thin
And with a sudden cry
It's me who's falling in

You don't even see
How I struggle for thee
With each passing breaststroke
My life's leaving me!

*You don't even see
That he'll cause you great pain,
Tear out your beautiful heart,
Just leave you insane,

If only, if only...
You'd turn back around,
Back to the arms
That kept you sound,

If only, if only..
You'd flee from that voice*
But it's too late you see?
You've made the wrong choice.

The author's comments:
This piece is special because it's a compilation between me and "WrittenEmotions"

Everything in between the two * (astericks) Is her work which was reworded to fit the piece.

You should check out her work, it's great!

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This article has 9 comments.

.king. SILVER said...
on Feb. 4 2012 at 9:20 am
.king. SILVER, Yeux Bien Tres Bien, Other
9 articles 4 photos 569 comments

Favorite Quote:
( ͡~ ͜ʖ ͡°)

That's beautiful Recurr, I'm surprised to see that you made a rhyming poem, you said you have no interest in rhymes, This here is pretty good, Congrats to you and WrittenEmotions !

on Feb. 4 2012 at 8:55 am
HiddenAngelInTheDark PLATINUM, Brooklyn, New York
39 articles 0 photos 177 comments

Favorite Quote:
Theres so many that I can't pick sorry

Beautiful writing Recurring and you are right we don't realize the affect of our decides until something happens

raeee GOLD said...
on Jan. 25 2012 at 8:58 pm
raeee GOLD, Walla Walla, Georgia
15 articles 3 photos 62 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Would she hear me if I called her name? Would she hold me if she knew my shame? Would she even love me if I was to blame?" -Favourite poem ever♥

i love it! you're too talented!

Yaya21 GOLD said...
on Jan. 24 2012 at 6:10 pm
Yaya21 GOLD, Columbus, Ohio
15 articles 1 photo 18 comments

Favorite Quote:
love and death what it is dont stop in fear, love yall ba, leave please, danger is reality, dont controll the feelin then y keep having it. hurt and pain is all part of life. life is too short to waste. believe what u believe in. love is a passion


on Jan. 24 2012 at 6:02 pm
Tbug1997 PLATINUM, Bloomsburg, Pennsylvania
29 articles 1 photo 39 comments

Favorite Quote:
When in doubt... Blame it on your siblings
when life gives you skittles throw them at random people and yell FEEL THE RAINBOW

wonderful i loved it

Mani2x SILVER said...
on Jan. 24 2012 at 4:23 pm
Mani2x SILVER, Chicago, Illinois
8 articles 0 photos 52 comments

Favorite Quote:
I was born an original, I'm not going to die a copy.

I loved this & it reminded me of something I wen through. Your a great writer

on Jan. 24 2012 at 7:03 am
so pretty!!

TapTap SILVER said...
on Jan. 23 2012 at 9:03 pm
TapTap SILVER, New Berlin, Wisconsin
8 articles 0 photos 146 comments

Favorite Quote:
Dream as if you'll live forever, love like there is no tomorrow, dance like there is no one watching.

Woah, it's like you could read my mind, I always notice I've made the wrong choice far too late. Anyways, I love a sad way...sooo sadical. Precious, keep writing!!!

on Jan. 23 2012 at 8:56 pm
Wonderment DIAMOND, Scranton, Pennsylvania
75 articles 0 photos 141 comments
Nice. This is really good. 5 stars.