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Ode to a Lemon MAG

January 14, 2012
By laurensoccer SILVER, Palm Beach Gardens, Florida
laurensoccer SILVER, Palm Beach Gardens, Florida
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It sat there on the table,
With its yellow raincoat
Tucked around its sour, yellow vest
It's an extroverted character
Like a sailor proudly flaunting
His gold teeth and anchor tattoos,
Stiff as a statue,
Cunning as a fox,
Bitter as the Grinch,
It stood there
With a smirk plastered to its thick, fleshy skin,
It sat there, waiting for its execution,
The knife swiped at it violently,
With one solid thrash,
It was decapitated,
Its sunny, yellow interior exposed
And spilling onto the table

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This article has 16 comments.

on May. 21 2013 at 4:28 pm
laurensoccer SILVER, Palm Beach Gardens, Florida
8 articles 0 photos 67 comments
Thank you so much for commenting on my work.

on May. 17 2013 at 7:16 pm
StarlitSunrise DIAMOND, Clemmons, North Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
"Blessed are they who see beautiful things in humble places where other people see nothing." ~Camille Pissarro

  This is such a cool concept! I love how it starts off seemingly simple, but then grows to a much more complex metaphor for a person. All the different ideas it created would ordinarily seem conflicting, but somehow fit together quite naturally in this poem. Great work! :)

. said...
on Sep. 12 2012 at 8:48 pm
Great! Extremely creative! I love this! Please read, rate, and comment on my poems! Thanks!

on Aug. 26 2012 at 6:14 pm
Shahiro PLATINUM, Johnston, Iowa
20 articles 2 photos 262 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Soon we must all choose between what is right and what is easy." - Dumbledore (Goblet of Fire)

i like the creativity of this nicely done!!!! plz check out my work???????????

on Aug. 12 2012 at 3:38 pm
juicyfan6 BRONZE, Mount Laurel, New Jersey
1 article 0 photos 46 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I solemnly swear that I am up to no good." - J.K. Rowling

I love the vivid descriptions in your poem! It's really good. 

KatsK DIAMOND said...
on Jun. 18 2012 at 6:22 pm
KatsK DIAMOND, Saint Paul, Minnesota
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Favorite Quote:
Being inexhaustible, life and nature are a constant stimulus for a creative mind.
~Hans Hofmann
You must stay drunk on writing so reality cannot destroy you.
~Ray Bradbury

This is really good!

bcw095 GOLD said...
on May. 30 2012 at 10:50 pm
bcw095 GOLD, Lake Zurich, Illinois
11 articles 3 photos 7 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I know why the caged bird sings." - Maya Angelou

Great, great, great work.

bcw095 GOLD said...
on May. 30 2012 at 10:49 pm
bcw095 GOLD, Lake Zurich, Illinois
11 articles 3 photos 7 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I know why the caged bird sings." - Maya Angelou


on May. 10 2012 at 8:47 am
OrangeJuice528 BRONZE, West Palm Beach, Florida
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I love this poem it is spilling with originality!!! I hope you post more of your work. I'll continue to read your pieces.

Deliah GOLD said...
on May. 3 2012 at 10:58 pm
Deliah GOLD, Narnia, Other
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this is soo creative, it really stands out from the rest! it gets your attention from the first line.

Inferno#21 said...
on May. 1 2012 at 10:41 am
This piece was very eye catching and I loved that.  If you hadn't looked at the title you think this was of a true pirate, but when you go back and read it as a lemon it makes so much sense! Using personification gave the lemon qualities I didn't even know humans had! The similies topped it off and just made this truely amazing and unique! Amazing job!

Haim ;) said...
on May. 1 2012 at 10:31 am
This poem was very descriptive and used a good amount of figurative language. I liked how the metaphors made the reader visualize more vividly and it was very well put. It was a great poem! Keep writing!

on Feb. 11 2012 at 5:29 am
muna.najihah PLATINUM, Malacca, Other
25 articles 14 photos 26 comments

Favorite Quote:
if life was given two choices, to become a writer or a character, I will choose to become a writer.
I have the power to decide what my life should be.

I love LEMONS!:D

on Feb. 10 2012 at 8:47 am
AngelsKiss PLATINUM, Paris, Tennessee
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Favorite Quote:
You have the power to live another Childhood, so open up the door leaving back your doubts.

This poem was very clever and good, such descriptive words and I can picuture it in my mind please read and comment on some of my poems:)

Gracie said...
on Jan. 23 2012 at 7:32 pm
Love the poem! Very clever and funny. I think I will go decapitate a couple of your bitter, yellow rain coated friends and make some lemonade!

on Jan. 22 2012 at 5:37 pm
TaylorPaigeHolmes, West Palm Beach, Florida
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Very creative way of describing a lemon and a clever metaphor in comparing the sailor to the lemon. Keep up the writing :)