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Birthday Candles

December 28, 2011
By marissadele PLATINUM, Danbury, Connecticut
marissadele PLATINUM, Danbury, Connecticut
20 articles 3 photos 388 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you know how you feel, and so clearly what you need to say, you'll know it. I don't think you should wait. I think you should speak now." -Taylor Swift

The three decker cake stood before me on the table
All thirteen candles lit and waiting,

The wax melting and fading,
And the base plunged into the goodness of vanilla icing

As the spotlight birthday song continued to be sung.
Once it’s over, the candles seem to get brighter,

Smiles seem to get wider,
And the balloons seem to get lighter

As I stare at the round, sugary cake.
I can feel everybody’s eyes on me,
Beckoning my wish to come and blow out the candles,

So that the mocking cake can be devoured.
I can’t think of my wish or how to put it in words;
I feel pressured with all the family’s and camera’s eyes

Poised on me with expectance.
The icing covered cake sweats on the table,

And within seconds I make up my mind
I take a deep breath and blow 12 flaming candles out

And on the 13th I whisper softly,
'I blew out my birthday candles

And wished for you.'

The author's comments:

To Noah,
I will always be wishing for you.

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on Jan. 11 2012 at 3:23 pm
otherpoet SILVER, Wayland, Massachusetts
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"For beautiful eyes, look for the good in others; for beautiful lips, speak only words of kindness; and for poise, walk with the knowledge that you are never alone." - Audrey Hepburn

This is really sweet, you should be proud. It is intriguing, I really want to know more!

on Jan. 10 2012 at 7:35 pm
browneyez16 GOLD, Hephzibah, Georgia
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"You may fail, but fall still fighting, don't give up whatever you do. Eyes front, head high, to the finish...see it through"

~See It Through by Edgar Albert Guest~

very sweet...i really enjoyed reading it...made me smile

on Jan. 9 2012 at 2:25 pm
NightGoddess17 PLATINUM, New City, New York
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this is amazing!!! the ending is so cute! great job!!!

on Jan. 9 2012 at 2:24 pm
MercyChristine GOLD, Oak Grove, Minnesota
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oh shnykeis!

I liked your rhymes and the whole poem was really cute. Great job!

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on Jan. 8 2012 at 5:47 pm
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on Jan. 8 2012 at 1:59 pm
cassia_b, Wisconsin
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absolutely lovely writing and language, love your word choice! great job and keep writing! :D

on Jan. 8 2012 at 1:25 pm
Helena_Noel BRONZE, Burnt Hills, New York
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Favorite Quote:
“I'd rather see a sermon than hear one any day; I'd rather one should walk with me than merely tell the way: The eye's a better pupil and more willing than the ear, fine counsel is confusing, but example's always clear.” -Edgar Guest

Oh, wow this is cool! perfect timing too, since my family is celebrating three birthdays this month. I like your use of imagery, it really makes the reader feel like they are right beside the the birthday girl. Great job.

on Jan. 8 2012 at 1:02 pm
Rainbeauxs SILVER, Bridgetown, Other
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This is lovely :) I really enjoyed it!:D

on Jan. 8 2012 at 8:20 am
babyrex4 SILVER, Buffalo, New York
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Favorite Quote:
\"You may only be someone in the world, but to someone else, you may be the world.\"

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This is such a beautiful poem, sis! You really should be able get this into the Teenink magazine.