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What I Could Never Tell My Mother MAG

February 1, 2008
By Anonymous

What I could never tell my mother
Isn’t her fault; it’s mine
It’s things wrapped inside of me, coiled like wire with the filament exposed
She could accept them – those things – I’m sure
Maybe even love them the way she loves me; little puzzle pieces
That fell out of the box when we were putting it under the sofa
After we almost finished the puzzle together
But I hide them inside my deepest aorta
Keeping them safe because who wants to grab a still-beating heart?
It would kill me to take those secrets out
So my mother may know they exist
But she lets me keep them.
And maybe that’s the real secret, the one that
She doesn’t know –
It’s that I need some secrets of my own.

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on Jun. 19 2009 at 6:17 am
Nicely written, I enjoyed reading it :)

on Jun. 3 2009 at 10:02 pm
tigeress3 PLATINUM, Dayton, Ohio
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I can totally relate to this! Beautiful!

hope4you said...
on Jun. 1 2009 at 1:24 pm
hope4you, Williamston, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:

many people can relate, you give your readers what they want...nice :D

like to hear more

on May. 31 2009 at 3:51 am
musiclover71 ELITE, Hutto, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
"Normal is overrated." - Gregory House

i love it. this is.. so amazing i mean genius

on May. 21 2009 at 1:31 am
i understand u i had the same problem its hard to tell my mother things because i feel as though the things that i may do is my secrets cause i feel as though no one is living my life but me

on May. 9 2009 at 4:34 pm
GreenWriter826 PLATINUM, McAllen, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
''Their fruits like honey to the throat
But poison in the blood'' - Christina Georgina Rossetti "Goblin Market"

um...wow...im still kind of stunned...that was great...i felt the bam on the last line and on the first four...it was great...

SaraLynn GOLD said...
on May. 7 2009 at 5:39 am
SaraLynn GOLD, Peoria, Arizona
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i absolutley love the heart metaphores! i get where you are coming from, there are soo many things i could never tell my mom

Haylynn GOLD said...
on May. 6 2009 at 7:51 pm
Haylynn GOLD, Skiatook, Oklahoma
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this is really good when i read it i saw me cuz i dont tell my mom alot of secrets and its good cuz u dont always have to be open bout every thing so good job and good luck on writing u shuld check out mine.

on May. 4 2009 at 7:53 pm
EleanorRigby PLATINUM, New York City, New York
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Favorite Quote:
"The optomist proclaims we live in the best of worlds, and the pessimist fears this is true." - James Branch Cabell

my gosh i know exactly how you feel, i love the symbolism of puzzle pieces in it, i use that a lot too.

JessicaE said...
on May. 4 2009 at 5:08 pm
JessicaE, Dawsonville, Georgia
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I totally understand where you're coming from with this. Come check out my work sometime!

123 demi said...
on Apr. 30 2009 at 8:48 pm
I love this poem its kinda like me i got a lot of secrets i cant tell my mother and i need to keep to my self it goes perfect with a lot of people i love it good job on writing this

on Apr. 30 2009 at 3:29 pm
GodsWarrior24 BRONZE, Kearney, Nebraska
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yea its a pretty good poem has alot of understanding behind it nice work

joesmit said...
on Apr. 29 2009 at 5:00 pm
teen poetry is so ridiculous.

on Apr. 29 2009 at 4:45 pm
chelchelbear BRONZE, Charleston, West Virginia
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This is a really nice poem... very true...and... real, you know! i like it... do it! j/k j/k .... but seriously nice poem... lotes

on Apr. 29 2009 at 1:59 am
thedaydreamer13 BRONZE, Delta, Ohio
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it was a good poem!! i hope to read more of your work!! :)

on Apr. 28 2009 at 8:12 pm
Beautiful! :)

Catlady SILVER said...
on Apr. 28 2009 at 6:54 pm
Catlady SILVER, Tulsa, Oklahoma
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That is an excellent poem. I feel the same way about my mother.

The Punished said...
on Apr. 28 2009 at 1:24 pm
This makes me feel the pain i keep inside, and remember all of my dark secrets that hide deep in my soul.

Tinkham3 said...
on Apr. 28 2009 at 12:20 am
I love this poem...But you don't have to even think about want I say but maybe you should not go from talking about secrets than a puzzle than secrets again But I do like the way you were able to tie it all in

on Apr. 24 2009 at 12:57 am
sk8ski4life GOLD, Lincoln, Massachusetts
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Favorite Quote:
"Just because it's raining doesn't mean you can't go swimming."

this is such a great poem and it describes exactly how i feel