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Catch me if you can

November 30, 2011
By Eshshah PLATINUM, Galloway, New Jersey
Eshshah PLATINUM, Galloway, New Jersey
32 articles 31 photos 239 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The woods are lovely, dark and deep. But I have promises to keep, and miles to go before I sleep." -Robert Frost


I’m falling
From my artificial fantasy
To a cold hard reality
Into your hands

And I don’t know
Where I’ll land
So catch me if you can



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on Apr. 27 2012 at 3:30 pm
Basketball23 SILVER, Pine Grove, Pennsylvania
8 articles 13 photos 487 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I'm living in a shell with no soul" -Three Days Grace (World So Cold)
"Time still turns the pages of the book it's burned" -Avenged Sevenfold (So Far Away)

Short, but very enjoyable :) 

on Apr. 26 2012 at 7:56 am
RedFeather GOLD, Pittsburgh, Pennsylvania
12 articles 0 photos 155 comments

Favorite Quote:
Prose is like walking but poetry is like dancing.
—Paul Valery, poet (1871 - 1945)

Again, your poetry clearly shows your cold and stony perception of reality, but this one tells more that you used to live in a bueatiful world, which was abruptly shattered by some life-changing event that caused you to grow up too quickly. Am I correct, or am I just fooling myself?

on Feb. 17 2012 at 3:12 pm
readaholic PLATINUM, Tomahawk, Wisconsin
27 articles 0 photos 425 comments

Favorite Quote:
I'd rather fail because I fell on my own face than fall because someone tripped me up
~Jhonen Vasquez

OOO...had to read it twice to understand..iiiinteresting...

on Jan. 3 2012 at 5:16 am
Eshshah PLATINUM, Galloway, New Jersey
32 articles 31 photos 239 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The woods are lovely, dark and deep. But I have promises to keep, and miles to go before I sleep." -Robert Frost

hehe, that would be my proofreader at work, thank you for commenting!

leafy said...
on Jan. 2 2012 at 8:46 pm
leafy, City, Other
0 articles 0 photos 682 comments

Favorite Quote:
Gil: I would like you to read my novel and get your opinion. 
Ernest Hemingway: I hate it. 
Gil: You haven't even read it yet. 
Ernest Hemingway: If it's bad, I'll hate it. If it's good, then I'll be envious and hate it even more. You don't want the opinion of another writer. 

Ooh I really like this poem, it packs a lot of meaning into just a few words. There are just a couple nit-picky things that I'm gonna suggest. First, I would make it into one stanza, like lilmartz, I see no reason why to split it. Also, "cold hard" should be "cold, hard." And lastly, this is just a style preference, but I think that it would flow a little better (not to say that the flow is bad) if you uncapitolize (sp?) the lines in the poem that aren't the start of a sentence. Other than that, very nice job. :) 5/5

on Jan. 1 2012 at 5:16 am
Eshshah PLATINUM, Galloway, New Jersey
32 articles 31 photos 239 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The woods are lovely, dark and deep. But I have promises to keep, and miles to go before I sleep." -Robert Frost

thanks :) :)

on Dec. 31 2011 at 1:17 pm
IamtheshyStargirl PLATINUM, Lothlorien, Utah
44 articles 16 photos 2206 comments

Favorite Quote:
Boredom instigates extreme creativity.
~Amoniel

"Bowing gratefully to all of my subjects, 'thank you. Thank you. The pleasure is mine." Nah, I'm just kidding. We're all kings together.'"
~Thesilentraven

I like this, it reminds me of something a friend once said about losing herself so she could find herself.

on Dec. 31 2011 at 12:35 pm
Eshshah PLATINUM, Galloway, New Jersey
32 articles 31 photos 239 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The woods are lovely, dark and deep. But I have promises to keep, and miles to go before I sleep." -Robert Frost

thank you for commenting guys, it really means a lot.

on Dec. 31 2011 at 12:34 pm
Eshshah PLATINUM, Galloway, New Jersey
32 articles 31 photos 239 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The woods are lovely, dark and deep. But I have promises to keep, and miles to go before I sleep." -Robert Frost

Thank you!

Honour SILVER said...
on Dec. 31 2011 at 9:25 am
Honour SILVER, New London, Connecticut
9 articles 0 photos 181 comments

Favorite Quote:
Greater love has no man than this, that a man lay down his life for his friends. ~John 15:13

"Give me liberty or give me death!" ~Patrick Henry

Be brave and steadfast; have no fear or dread of them, for it is the Lord, your God, who marches with you; he will never fail you or forsake you. ~ Deuteronomy 31:6

"I prefer dangerous freedom over peaceful slavery" ~ Thomas Jefferson

Oh well i fail at poetry stuff. Oops, sorry 'bout that. :P

on Dec. 31 2011 at 9:03 am
Eshshah PLATINUM, Galloway, New Jersey
32 articles 31 photos 239 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The woods are lovely, dark and deep. But I have promises to keep, and miles to go before I sleep." -Robert Frost

no, it's not a haiku, it a free verse poem

Honour SILVER said...
on Dec. 31 2011 at 7:29 am
Honour SILVER, New London, Connecticut
9 articles 0 photos 181 comments

Favorite Quote:
Greater love has no man than this, that a man lay down his life for his friends. ~John 15:13

"Give me liberty or give me death!" ~Patrick Henry

Be brave and steadfast; have no fear or dread of them, for it is the Lord, your God, who marches with you; he will never fail you or forsake you. ~ Deuteronomy 31:6

"I prefer dangerous freedom over peaceful slavery" ~ Thomas Jefferson

Nice...it's a Haiku right?

on Dec. 30 2011 at 10:27 am
lilmartz PLATINUM, Perrysburg, Ohio
40 articles 5 photos 163 comments

Favorite Quote:
Live Life Like A Party That Never Ends

This is short and sweet and I like it! I don't see a reason for there to be two stanzas, but that's just my opinion. I also think you should use some kind of adjective describing the hands, just to contradict the "cold hard reality." I really like the part about the artificial fantasy. Nicely done :)

on Dec. 29 2011 at 1:58 pm
poetic.eyes PLATINUM, Everson, Washington
23 articles 3 photos 198 comments

Favorite Quote:
eARTh

Smoothly written. Your poetry makes me think, and wonder what will come next.

on Dec. 25 2011 at 3:16 pm
Mothra7687 BRONZE, Mattawan, Michigan
2 articles 11 photos 57 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Don't try to live your life in one day." - Howard Jones

Very well written. you paint quite a picture in my mind within the first few words.