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April 23, 2008
By Anonymous

i asked my father if i could swim,
and he said that i would drown.
The Sea would imprison me – he said
if my feet had left the ground.

So i walked out to the water,
and cried out – how ’bout now!
He said, a little bit further, Son,
and then you’ll leave the ground.

i stepped on sand then stone,
from hollow ground to sturdy.
The sky was at my level as I
gazed at the birdie.

The Sea brought me a new idea,
the urge to flee to the high.

i asked my Father if i could fly,
and he said, sure, Son – go try.

i jumped as high as i could.
Still, i landed on the ground.
i saw my Father pull on a chain,
then i knew that i was bound.

© Anonymous

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fiveinside2 BRONZE said...
on Jan. 28 2010 at 7:59 pm
fiveinside2 BRONZE, Chapel Hill, North Carolina
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This is really good! I especially like the ending :) i like how not everything is not understood at once, kind of like the way it is when you're a kid. :D
Skeezics GOLD said...
on Jan. 28 2010 at 7:39 pm
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I really liked this poem. It was well written and the emotion in it is something that is very powerful.
Prosaic-Scriptor BRONZE said...
on Jan. 28 2010 at 6:16 pm
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Only thing that turned me off was the "gazed at the birdie." The tone really threw me for a loop...
MorrighanPoe SILVER said...
on Jan. 28 2010 at 4:12 pm
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One of the reasons I like it is that the format reminds me of my own poetry. if you'd like to check my work out, it's posted on TeenInk.
MorrighanPoe SILVER said...
on Jan. 28 2010 at 4:11 pm
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To be quite honest, not sure what it's about, but sometimes it's better that way. Great work, love the rhyme and rhythm!
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Same here my friend
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on Jan. 28 2010 at 12:30 pm
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Yeah, well I'm not going to lie either, YOU are weird my friend.
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WOW!
This is perfect, it captured my heart and i sure as hell dont want it bck ths poem is soo great
i would appreciate it if you could look at some of my work expesually the latest one called minus a helping hand and give your oppinion :)
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on Jan. 27 2010 at 6:18 pm
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Wow, that's so intense, i love it for all it's darkness.
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Really? come on. keep it clean, guys.
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on Jan. 26 2010 at 4:57 pm
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this is really good
Sissybug2012 PLATINUM said...
on Jan. 25 2010 at 7:03 pm
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wuts wrong with it? its so creepy that its good.....
aquamarinalin said...
on Jan. 25 2010 at 9:16 am
I really like this poem, it reminds me of when I was a kid.
Keenan BRONZE said...
on Jan. 25 2010 at 8:26 am
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I'm not going to lie, it was a little weird. Especially the title. Wow...
alexc25 BRONZE said...
on Jan. 25 2010 at 8:26 am
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WOW! this poem is creepy
Unknown said...
on Jan. 24 2010 at 6:41 pm
Amazing! Very well done!
Sissybug2012 PLATINUM said...
on Jan. 24 2010 at 6:20 pm
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OH MY GOSH THIS IS MY FAVE OF ALL TIME!! VERY GOOD VERY GOOD!
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on Jan. 24 2010 at 2:17 pm
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good poem

i like it
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on Jan. 23 2010 at 3:44 pm
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I loved it. I think it's great to show your inner self.
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on Jan. 21 2010 at 7:50 pm
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great job. It has a lot of hidden meaning. Please check out my poems.