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Daddy's Womb MAG

April 23, 2008
By Anonymous

i asked my father if i could swim,
and he said that i would drown.
The Sea would imprison me – he said
if my feet had left the ground.

So i walked out to the water,
and cried out – how ’bout now!
He said, a little bit further, Son,
and then you’ll leave the ground.

i stepped on sand then stone,
from hollow ground to sturdy.
The sky was at my level as I
gazed at the birdie.

The Sea brought me a new idea,
the urge to flee to the high.

i asked my Father if i could fly,
and he said, sure, Son – go try.

i jumped as high as i could.
Still, i landed on the ground.
i saw my Father pull on a chain,
then i knew that i was bound.



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on Aug. 8 2010 at 2:12 am
jmccasanova88 SILVER, Cheshire, Connecticut
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Favorite Quote:
"Why do people say the sky is the limit when theres foot prints on the moon" “Our deepest fear is not that we are inadequate. Our deepest fear is that we are powerful beyond measure. It is our light, not our darkness that most frightens us. We ask ourselves, Who am I to be brilliant, gorgeous, talented, fabulous? Actually, who are you not to be? You are a child of God. Your playing small does not serve the world. There is nothing enlightened about shrinking so that other people won't feel insecure around you. We are all meant to shine, as children do. We were born to make manifest the glory of God that is within us. It's not just in some of us; it's in everyone. And as we let our own light shine, we unconsciously give other people permission to do the same. As we are liberated from our own fear, our presence automatically liberates others.”

very strong and very true...great work much repect

Lynne03 SILVER said...
on Aug. 5 2010 at 8:06 pm
Lynne03 SILVER, Greeley, Colorado
5 articles 2 photos 3 comments

Favorite Quote:
"When you feel like giving up, remember why you held on for so long in the first place." -Someone

This is one of my all time favorite poems that I've seen on this site, and all around.
Truly beautiful work.

on Aug. 2 2010 at 7:56 pm
fadingaway1324 SILVER, Latrobe, Pennsylvania
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Thats what happens when you are told one thing but kept from it by another. The little white lies that you beleive and then grow up and realize that freedom was only implied by those around you and never really put into action 

Mr.Mills said...
on Aug. 2 2010 at 8:27 am
Ok this is a great article it shows that the farther tells the boy he can do what ever he  wanted if he dreams big enough and that to me is a great dad.

on Aug. 1 2010 at 8:40 pm
CynthiaLynnILY PLATINUM, Moore, Oklahoma
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Amazing.

bloodlove said...
on Aug. 1 2010 at 4:48 pm
there are simp;y no words to describe what it means to me...

on Jul. 30 2010 at 10:57 pm
chocolatkiss1013 SILVER, New York, New York
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Favorite Quote:
But paradise is locked and bolted, we must make a journey around the world to see if a backdoor has perhaps been left open

 love this poem it describes perfectly how teens are bound and limited by their parents

Bob6969 said...
on Jul. 30 2010 at 4:53 pm
Bob6969, East Bumfuck, Other
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Jay and silent bob rock.

toni12 BRONZE said...
on Jul. 29 2010 at 11:38 am
toni12 BRONZE, Burleson, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
"Sometime's were so obvilious to the greeness of our own grass an always want what we think the greener grass is"

thats really good(:

on Jul. 29 2010 at 9:06 am
Nora.Whatever BRONZE, Brooklyn, New York
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this is great.

Daddy's womb-- is the chain kind of like an umbilical cord to which you are bound, in a figurative sense?


on Jul. 27 2010 at 9:18 pm
PoetryGoddess10 BRONZE, Lithonia, Georgia
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This was very good. Hey you guys should come read my poetry too!!!!

on Jul. 27 2010 at 11:25 am
Spazzmine BRONZE, Foley, Alabama
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Favorite Quote:
"Some of the greater things in life are unseen thats why you close your eyes when you kiss, cry, or dream... "Anonymous.

Wow,this was simply amazing.

I loved it :]]


Bbb4313 GOLD said...
on Jul. 26 2010 at 10:06 pm
Bbb4313 GOLD, Gwinn, Michigan
12 articles 1 photo 14 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Creative minds never get bored." Unknown

Oh, i love this. I love the title, too. But i swear i have read this somwhere... do you post elswhere?

on Jul. 24 2010 at 11:25 pm
beautiful_but_torn GOLD, West Jefferson, North Carolina
18 articles 2 photos 23 comments

Favorite Quote:
It&#039;s all make believe, isn&#039;t it? <br /> Marilyn Monroe

umm...

whats "a daddy's womb?"

Dont you come from a mothers womb?

Anywayss.....

 


on Jul. 23 2010 at 12:54 pm
DiamondsIntheGrass GOLD, Martinsville, New Jersey
14 articles 1 photo 278 comments

Favorite Quote:
Worry is simply a misuse of the imagination.

 how does this have anything to do with a daddys womb?

on Jul. 23 2010 at 8:42 am
deus-ex-machina14 BRONZE, Stewartsville, New Jersey
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Favorite Quote:
&quot;There are two main tragedies in life. One is not getting what one wants, and the other is getting it.&quot; -Oscar Wilde

It seems like it would be a very light and innocent story at the beginning, but then the ending just makes it pop. Great job!

on Jul. 23 2010 at 6:49 am
DifferentTeen PLATINUM, Seaford, Delaware
32 articles 2 photos 329 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;There&rsquo;s no such thing as true love, just spurts of insanity&mdash;falling over and over again, thinking that won&rsquo;t happen to me&quot;

I meant to say "I wasn't really sure about the theme..."

Sorry about the grammatical errors I'm kinda in a hurry.


on Jul. 23 2010 at 6:43 am
DifferentTeen PLATINUM, Seaford, Delaware
32 articles 2 photos 329 comments

Favorite Quote:
&quot;There&rsquo;s no such thing as true love, just spurts of insanity&mdash;falling over and over again, thinking that won&rsquo;t happen to me&quot;

I really agree with Eilatan's post. It wasn't as great as I thought it would be. I was really sure about the whole theme, or even about what was going on but I thought the rhymes were cute. A decent poem, just in my opinion not as good as everyone is making it out t be.

on Jul. 22 2010 at 8:36 am
BlackXxXKisses SILVER, Niles, Ohio
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Favorite Quote:
You don&#039;t know what you&#039;ve got til its gone.

I read this and feel trapped. I want to fly away and be free.

Danielle123 said...
on Jul. 21 2010 at 4:44 pm
The ending leaves such a lasting impact!