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Daddy's Womb MAG

April 23, 2008
By Anonymous

i asked my father if i could swim,
and he said that i would drown.
The Sea would imprison me – he said
if my feet had left the ground.

So i walked out to the water,
and cried out – how ’bout now!
He said, a little bit further, Son,
and then you’ll leave the ground.

i stepped on sand then stone,
from hollow ground to sturdy.
The sky was at my level as I
gazed at the birdie.

The Sea brought me a new idea,
the urge to flee to the high.

i asked my Father if i could fly,
and he said, sure, Son – go try.

i jumped as high as i could.
Still, i landed on the ground.
i saw my Father pull on a chain,
then i knew that i was bound.



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limelove said...
on Jan. 24 2011 at 9:37 pm
limelove, Gresham, Oregon
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Favorite Quote:
Memories last forever.

I love this poem what you said still goes throgh my head.

on Jan. 24 2011 at 7:25 pm
TheBeautifuUglyStupidJerk SILVER, Blue River, Oregon
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i should show my teacher to

Deadflower said...
on Jan. 24 2011 at 7:02 pm
I love this poem it is really good I showed it to my teacher and he loved it!

on Jan. 24 2011 at 6:47 pm
Nicely done. Please check out some of my poems, I'm new on the site and I'd like some feedback (:

on Jan. 22 2011 at 12:56 pm
Painelovely BRONZE, Cleveland, Ohio
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Favorite Quote:
I am not going to limit myself just because other people cannot accept the fact that i can do something else. Dolly Parton

this is not bad, not bad at all

on Jan. 22 2011 at 11:41 am
just-another-url GOLD, Cannes, Other
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Favorite Quote:
"It's a good thing to be strange. Normalness leads to sadness." -Philip Lester

really really good, i loved it !! keep it up :) 

gleek1234 GOLD said...
on Jan. 20 2011 at 7:53 pm
gleek1234 GOLD, Burlington, Vermont
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Favorite Quote:
You did let me go you left me broken and heartless, crying out for help, with no one to answer my calls-Shilpa Pierpont-Hale ( poem) Love hurts

This is really really god 

on Jan. 20 2011 at 2:07 pm
SaraBear5 BRONZE, South Wales, New York
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Favorite Quote:
Dont tell me the skies the limit, when there are foorprints in the moon..<3

Wowww..thats amzing. you have some talent:)

SB248 SILVER said...
on Jan. 20 2011 at 1:42 pm
SB248 SILVER, Dexter, Michigan
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Wow this is so meaningful, you must have worked forever. Really really beautiful :)

 


on Jan. 19 2011 at 1:15 pm
This was really good and I really liked it. Great Job!

on Jan. 19 2011 at 11:49 am
I loved the poem although you did not have very good grammar. I understood everything! You did an amazing job with the poem!

6aaronl said...
on Jan. 19 2011 at 11:37 am
I think this poem is a little weird to me even though i understand it. I wonder where the poem takes place.

Annab said...
on Jan. 19 2011 at 11:28 am
Wow! Amazing job! I understand everything that your saying!

miniminim123 said...
on Jan. 19 2011 at 11:27 am

the poem is really good, just a sad story...wait idk the story...but i think its sad???

 


on Jan. 19 2011 at 11:27 am
I loved your poem. it was very meaningful 

soccerchik8 said...
on Jan. 19 2011 at 11:26 am
This is a very strong poem i love it!!! well done young grasshopper :P

on Jan. 19 2011 at 9:07 am
accdodson BRONZE, Sarasota, Florida
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Really good work, but try not to rhyme. You end up forcing words.

joshbd7 said...
on Jan. 19 2011 at 8:02 am
really good poem... looks like you put good thought you put good thought into this. ; keep it up  !

on Jan. 18 2011 at 9:39 pm
AlexisBieber13, Los Angeles, California
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Thats really Sad Im sorry if this id true

on Jan. 16 2011 at 1:48 am
LoveAndWar GOLD, Encinitas, California
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Favorite Quote:
"Better to be the witty fool than the foolish wit" -Feste, Shakespeare

I love the last line. It's beautiful in it's entirety, too, because it works so well together, soft and yet such a wonderful, thoughtful air... thick too...