November 11, 2011
you're so beautiful
I can't take my eyes off of you
your light green eyes
your crooked smile
rosy cheeks
the way your brown hair flows down over your eyes
the way your name sounds whenever I say it
you're so beautiful
yet you choose her
even though she could never love you as much as I do

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Blaque said...
Oct. 19, 2012 at 11:36 am
I love it.. Describe it more to your best of outcome or do you want to wait until it really matters?.. Tell them how beautiful she is compare her to the good things make her know that she is more special than anything ... I think that's what should show.. But i don't know ... I still love it  
AmieLeeHope replied...
Oct. 23, 2012 at 9:38 am
Thanks for the advice. I'm a girl but that's ok. :P
Ruby-Paige-Rose said...
Oct. 19, 2012 at 11:33 am
It feels so real. And I can totaly relate.
IamtheshyStargirl said...
Mar. 30, 2012 at 2:16 pm
Beautiful, I love your description!
KWeiberg321 said...
Dec. 11, 2011 at 2:35 pm
Good job (: I love descriptions like you used, it makes me feel more in depth with the story behind the poem.
KShep12 said...
Dec. 2, 2011 at 3:45 pm
This is good.
iamonecoolradiator said...
Nov. 29, 2011 at 2:06 pm
the poem is just completely true and right and accurate..
JamieNicole replied...
Nov. 29, 2011 at 3:49 pm
thanks I wrote this when I was getting to know the person I am talking about he's amazing.
Falling.Up. said...
Nov. 29, 2011 at 12:30 pm

it was so emotional! great job!


BrokenAngel121 said...
Nov. 29, 2011 at 7:58 am
This iz a really lovely poem.....very sweet and heartbreaking.....well the same ting happeed to me sum years ago....
JamieNicole replied...
Nov. 29, 2011 at 11:58 am
thanks so much I'm still not over it. Sadly does it ever stop hurting?
BrokenAngel121 replied...
Nov. 30, 2011 at 9:15 am
Well it took me 3 years....i reallly truely was in luv.....well if it gets too hard then try listening to sum taylor swift songs when u r sad.....and some avril lavigne song when u r angry.......
CarrieAnn13 said...
Nov. 27, 2011 at 4:47 pm
I love the meaning behind this poem.  The rhythm is excellent this time and my only criticism is the punctuation and capitalization.  Keep writing! :)
LivingMYLife said...
Nov. 25, 2011 at 4:39 pm
i love when girls refer to guys as beautiful (im assuming its about a guy. i could be wrong. sry if i am) it adds to the intensness (lol new word)
JamieNicole replied...
Nov. 25, 2011 at 4:43 pm
It is about a guy. lol
thefamoustapper said...
Nov. 25, 2011 at 4:31 pm
I feel the exact same way! as the title says, this is beautiful great work!
JamieNicole replied...
Nov. 25, 2011 at 4:33 pm
thank you so much
pinkowl said...
Nov. 25, 2011 at 3:39 pm
THIS IS ADORABLE, and honestly, so many people can relate to this! great work!
zombiescream.98 said...
Nov. 25, 2011 at 3:27 pm

Wow! I love your descriptions and your poem is very relatable.


anna_banana said...
Nov. 25, 2011 at 3:11 pm
Omg. This is my life.
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