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Sweet Scrub MAG

April 19, 2008
By Anonymous

Her smooth fingers
Coat a car windshield
With sun-kissed cream.
Dipped in butter soap,
Sponges soak up dirt,
Reveal the lost glimmer.
She sprays hose-water
Like an April shower,
Onto the glossy hood.
Her shiny reflection
Meanders in droplets
Down metallic doors.
Froth tickles her toes
As a bubble of delight
Escapes from pink lips;
It frolics with soapsuds,
Dancing to the melody
Of her sweet laughter.



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on Oct. 24 2016 at 10:19 am
jamiraaa BRONZE, Burlington , New Jersey
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this poem to me is so funny to be because is so descriptive about a girl washing a car

on Feb. 19 2015 at 10:35 am
nelehjr DIAMOND, Lingle, Wyoming
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Favorite Quote:
Life isn't about waiting for the storm to pass, it's about learning to dance in the rain.

That's awesome! A whole new spin on watching girls wash the car! Haha! Great imagery!

on Nov. 5 2014 at 10:52 am
Sollucks BRONZE, Brooklyn, New York
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Like everyone else said, great imagery it's truly amazing

on Sep. 30 2014 at 5:58 pm
beAWESOMEstayAWESOME BRONZE, New York City, New York
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Favorite Quote:
"Work hard in silence and let your accomplishments make the noise."

Very good visual imagery. I love it!!!!!!!!!!!

Bella13 SILVER said...
on Sep. 13 2014 at 1:25 pm
Bella13 SILVER, Los Angeles, California
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Favorite Quote:
"Wit is educated insolence"

Its so adorable!

Bella13 SILVER said...
on Jun. 26 2014 at 9:01 pm
Bella13 SILVER, Los Angeles, California
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Favorite Quote:
"Wit is educated insolence"

This poem is amazing. It completely transported me to a new place!

on Jun. 14 2014 at 6:44 pm
Theexplicableordinary GOLD, Omaha, Nebraska
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Favorite Quote:
Men of few words are the best kind of men. - William Shakespeare
The problem with the world is that intelligent people are full of doubt and stupid ones are full of confidence- Charles bukowski

I love this...your so talented in describing and visualizing

spiria BRONZE said...
on Jan. 29 2014 at 1:05 am
spiria BRONZE, Fullerton, California
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Very sweet. :)  

Ghoshy said...
on Dec. 25 2012 at 4:47 pm
Ghoshy, Allentown, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
Success is no accident. It is hard work, perseverance, learning, studying, sacrifice, and most of all, love of what you are doing or learning to do.
-Pele

I love that you can picture this poem perfectly in your head. It has great descriptions... Good job!

Elli Alm said...
on Nov. 8 2012 at 3:25 pm
Elli Alm, Ellisville, Missouri
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I really enjoyed reading this poem! I love happy, joyful tone.  I also like how this flows; it's not too choppy.  Great job!

on Sep. 20 2012 at 2:36 pm
ChrisJ PLATINUM, Rochester, New York
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Favorite Quote:
"Man must evolve for all human conflict a method which rejects revenge, aggression and retaliation. The foundation of such a method is love.”
- Martin Luther King Jr.

This was just great! It is very creative, kept me intriqued, nd really does deserve to be in the magazine for all to see!

on Jun. 5 2012 at 9:18 pm
Kenziemcm13 PLATINUM, Rutherfordton, North Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
A simple story can tell an entire story!~~ ME
Pictures tell a 1000 words~IDK :P

I liked it! Can you go check out some of my work I would be ever s grateful to hear what your opinions on them are! I would be honored for someone of your skill to read/rate comment on some of mine! :)

on Apr. 19 2012 at 10:30 pm
spirtualpersonification BRONZE, Glenview, Illinois
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Favorite Quote:
"Nothing is impossible, the word impossible says i am possible" - Audrey hepburn <3

I liked the use of imagery and word choice... not very deep but it was short, sweet and a light read. Good job!

on Apr. 19 2012 at 1:46 pm
grace sewright, Carefree, Arizona
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Your writing is beautiful, yet it lacks a creative plot. Next time, try to write about something with more meaning! Great structure though!

on Apr. 19 2012 at 10:51 am
EliteCobra9000 BRONZE, Scottsdale, Arizona
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Favorite Quote:
Get After It

"as a bubble of delight escapes from pink lips"....what is this?? are you joking? i mean i get where you are coming from on the whole imagery thing with the girl washing the car, but seriously? what did she do, stick her head in the bubble water and blow some bubbles with her mouth? i just dont understand why this was put in the poem because it couldnt make any less sense in the context of the poem. Great job!

hunniebunnie said...
on Apr. 2 2012 at 11:47 am
this is amazing gr8 job

on Jan. 3 2012 at 10:59 am
Blueeyedgirl18 GOLD, Kulpmont, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
Life happens while you're busy making plans.

Very descriptive:) great job:)

Big k said...
on Nov. 29 2011 at 10:06 am
this was a wierd poem buthas its good too

on Nov. 28 2011 at 11:02 am
dakotawright SILVER, Oshkosh, Wisconsin
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Favorite Quote:
"Knowledge speaks but wisdom listens." - Jimi Hendrix

Good Imagery. I really liked this short and sweet poem.

 


on Nov. 19 2011 at 5:31 pm
artmantist BRONZE, Willemstad, Other
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hello, nice poem. Would u guys wanna check out my work. its called the cottage 

thank u