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Under The Rocks MAG

January 3, 2008
By Liz Nasca PLATINUM, Edinburg, Virginia
Liz Nasca PLATINUM, Edinburg, Virginia
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I was
Hiding in the thicket
Of tangled thorny lies
And fears hidden by nervous reactions
The leaves have all dropped out now
My armor
No longer impenetrable steel
A sharp remark
Beats at my last fragile shield
Pale old deceptions
Flinch at a sudden glare
Truth has a way
Of eating you apart
I’m almost gone
My remains are scarce but pure
Yesterday, I was
A stranger to myself
Fighting a reluctant battle
My anger erupting
One wrong word spit out

Yesterday, I was
Sold out
By an enemy
Burrowed deep
Inside myself
The unforgiving war we fought
Ended briskly
Many lives were
I don’t recognize
The face I’ve so
Delicately molded
Hard, bittersweet anger
Ate away
What was left
Of my shielded soul

I am a lost dreamer
A bitter sailor
No thrill for unknown lands
A silent screamer
Finding no peace in the
Soundproof walls
of selfish minds

I am scratching away
At a pad of
White-hot paper
My hostile mind
Is exhausting
I’m trying for
Something more
But it’s all in vain

I am
Something I
Hope to never
I am thirsty for
The sweet simplicity
Of a blank slate
But I must live with what I’ve done
As I will have to live
With what


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on Aug. 8 2012 at 9:10 am
DemonAngel GOLD, Maricopa, Arizona
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You are either dead or alive.Your heart either pumps blood or life.Our hearts pump words love life and understanding.Into our sub-conscience body for we use the hands of that body to write. -Best friend :'( RIP

I love the message of this poem its sort of  like one i wrote called the masks come off with you around i wont submit it though:/ im not that good

on Mar. 26 2012 at 2:27 pm
Moonlight1234, Bellvue, Ohio
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the most beautiful things cannot be seen with the eyes but seen with the heart

this is awsome it has so much emotion 2 it.!:)

on Feb. 11 2012 at 10:38 am
mammothfrk PLATINUM, Mammoth Lakes, California
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Favorite Quote:
This is your life, are you who you want to be?

This is amazing.

on Jan. 30 2012 at 7:20 am
IDontHaveAnID, Somewhere In, Other
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Shnarf Shnarf?!


on Jan. 30 2012 at 7:09 am
I agree Shnarf!

on Jan. 26 2012 at 1:19 pm

on Jan. 23 2012 at 7:11 pm
Kelsey Fenimore BRONZE, Downingtown, Pennsylvania
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Nice vocabulary, but a bit confusing....i don't really understand what your trying to express......a bit too metaphoric....keep writing....i'd like to read more

on Jan. 23 2012 at 1:45 pm
ElmoIsMyHero BRONZE, Moscow, Other
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Favorite Quote:
"Get out of my trash can you bum!"

Hey Guys!!!!!

on Jan. 23 2012 at 1:29 pm
ElmoIsMyHero BRONZE, Moscow, Other
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Favorite Quote:
"Get out of my trash can you bum!"

Don't listen to this person!

on Jan. 23 2012 at 1:27 pm
ElmoIsMyHero BRONZE, Moscow, Other
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Favorite Quote:
"Get out of my trash can you bum!"

B-A-D Times 100

ARandomKid said...
on Jan. 23 2012 at 7:30 am
What kind of poem is this stuff??:(

ARandomKid said...
on Jan. 23 2012 at 7:20 am
Horrible Poem

on Dec. 19 2011 at 12:31 pm
mfischer SILVER, Northfield, Minnesota
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This says alot!!! Keep it up! :)

Emerson BRONZE said...
on Dec. 7 2011 at 6:27 am
Emerson BRONZE, Fort Mill, South Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
"If you wanna live big, Do it"

really good! keep on writing please!


on Nov. 10 2011 at 1:21 pm
Natasha1994 SILVER, Arizona City, Arizona
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i would say this is one of the best i have seen on this website i can feel when i read the words i love it and i think you need to write more

on Oct. 27 2011 at 8:17 am
RedFeather GOLD, Pittsburgh, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
Prose is like walking but poetry is like dancing.
—Paul Valery, poet (1871 - 1945)

To be honest, I prefer poems with rhyme in them, but there's something about your poem that makes it stand out, even though there's only a couple words per line. Everyone has something in life that they regret, and for some people that situation comes sooner than to others. I've never been able to say a lot in a few words, but you've apparently mastered that skill. This a beautiful poem (and I like what you did at the very end with done and become. They almost rhyme, but not quite-it gives the poem's structure an interesting twist.) Keep writing! :)

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on Oct. 25 2011 at 8:02 am
fdbfdsf, Bangalore, Other
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I've read this poem three times now, and i still don't think it's enough to understand and appreciate the true beauty of it. Each line has moolded itself to a deeper meaning, and it just speaks right to my soul. Well done. This is a brilliant piece of writing. Kudos.

on Oct. 24 2011 at 4:31 pm
SomwhereOnlyWeKnow, LaCrosse, Wisconsin
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“Change is the essence of life. Be willing to surrender what you are for what you could become.”

This is so good!  The free-verse is amazing :)

on Oct. 5 2011 at 1:55 am
The.King SILVER, Golden, Colorado
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Favorite Quote:
"A story's beginning is a sudden event. The start, a happy accident; the end, the fate for which it's meant. A story that never ends is a sad fate."-Miss Edel

It is extremely rare that I come accross a poem I understand, let alone one that speaks to me. For once, I have read a poem that has a true, powerful meaning that I can apply to my own life and experiences. This made me think back to a time in my life i'm not proud of, and may have even helped me reconcile with it, and I thank you for that. Well done.

on Sep. 23 2011 at 7:57 pm
Smiley1068 SILVER, Capitola, California
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Favorite Quote:
Don't let anyone control you

Wish I read this sooner...it so great