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Revolving MAG

September 28, 2011
By ItsAshMal SILVER, Guilford, Connecticut
ItsAshMal SILVER, Guilford, Connecticut
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I can't drink my tea until it has cooled down,
so I sit. And I wait. And I watch.

The man with the chaotic hair tries to wrangle his children.
(I wonder how he could possibly tame them
if he can't even manage his hair.)

In the corner a woman enveloped by her coat
is wrapped up in some novel that is probably
too long for her too.

Simple issues, simply irresolvable
since society shuns the thought of change
fearing it, they reel and buck.

Because if your hair is too much for you,
how can you be expected to deal with the world,
in its state of continual confusion?

If your jacket drags like some tattered robe,
It is unfair to insist that you lug around everyone
and their problems in their narcissistic scribblings.

Yet even though my tea is too hot to touch
my parched lips, I am worried about everyone else.

After all, while you're waiting, stagnant,
the earth around you spins on. You are not
alone, you are not still, but revolving

The author's comments:
Just thoughts of mine. What are yours?

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This article has 3 comments.

on Dec. 12 2011 at 6:37 am
CaptainFabulous GOLD, Gray Summit, Missouri
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Favorite Quote:
"Sometimes I believe in as many as six impossible things before breakfast" - Lewis Carroll

Ooooh I love this poem. Great job, I like the whimsicle, not a lot of emotion, feel it has. Makes it fun to read.

on Oct. 15 2011 at 2:09 pm
BrightBurningCampeador PLATINUM, Portland, Oregon
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This poems sounds very nice. I like your rhythm a lot. But I don't get some of the concepts. Why should people be defined by their hair and clothes? The will (or lack of) to have a wonderful, snappy, fashionable appearance is only one aspect of a personality, and a small one at that. In my opinion.

on Oct. 8 2011 at 1:44 pm
TheWordSmith SILVER, Placerville, California
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I absolutely loved this!! I have read many poems on TeenInk, but this is one of the few that is memorable and really stands out as a well-written piece. 5/5 stars :)