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Wrecked

August 6, 2011
By JerseyGirl716 BRONZE, Central, New Jersey
JerseyGirl716 BRONZE, Central, New Jersey
2 articles 0 photos 92 comments

Favorite Quote:
"We gain strength, and courage, and confidence by each experience in which we really stop to look fear in the face... we must do that which we think we cannot." -Eleanor Roosevelt


Isn't it funny
that what I do,
(making paper pretty)
infuriates you?
You look at me
call me ugly--
cut right to the chase:
that's my jugular's misplaced
location.

Isn't it enough
for you to know,
my own self-worth
will never grow?
Because of words--
ingrained in my head
that others have said
(and you've hammered home)
with that horrible tone!
Through your constant “improve this”,
I'm still a near miss.

When will it end?
Once I'm finally dead?
Or will Heaven not play
music loud enough
TO
DROWN
YOU
OUT?

When will you leave?
When you “know”
that I am perfect
(or when I'm wrecked)?
Tell me now,
I need to know:
should I run...
or simply go?


The author's comments:
I ran before I was wrecked.

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on Jan. 16 2012 at 6:25 pm
WrittenEmotions PLATINUM, Fairhope, Alabama
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Favorite Quote:
The only people who don't get anywhere are the people who don't dream of a better place for themselves...

This is really nice, great job!(: 4/5

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on Oct. 24 2011 at 6:46 am
Lexie96 GOLD, Havana, Illinois
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Favorite Quote:
Now Cinderella don't you go to sleep, it's such a bitter form of refuge, oh don't you know the kingdom's under siege, and everbody needs you. - The Killers

Really good and I'm glad you got out of this. This is a great piece, think you could spare some time and leave me some feedback on mine?

on Aug. 24 2011 at 12:41 am
Avenging_Angel PLATINUM, Cleburne, Texas
33 articles 0 photos 19 comments

Favorite Quote:
"You never really know your friends from your enemies until the ice breaks. "- Eskimo

Its simply good..no not the word I'm looking for how about GREAT.it shows your creativity and what happens in most relationships.oh I loved how you put. TO DROWN YOU OUT.because to me it shows good emotions.

on Aug. 21 2011 at 9:48 pm
PhoenixCrossing GOLD, Tinley Park, Illinois
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I really liked this! I loved the format and how the questions already had answers. It was creative!

on Aug. 19 2011 at 8:35 pm
Hazel-daisy GOLD, --, Other
19 articles 0 photos 324 comments

Favorite Quote:
It takes a lot of courage to show your dreams to someone else - Erna Bombeck

In three words i can sum up everything I've learned in life: it goes on -Robert Frost

Live, Love, Laugh - ______

Hope, Love, breathe <3 - Me

i actually loved this! the last verse was my favoruite, it was really emotional, really well written aswel! :)

on Aug. 18 2011 at 5:11 pm
BetweenWorks SILVER, Charlotte, North Carolina
5 articles 0 photos 60 comments

Favorite Quote:
The meaning of life is a question that you have already answered.

Wow this is great ive felt like that befor. beutiful work, good job!

 


on Aug. 17 2011 at 5:23 pm
WishfulDoer GOLD, Portland, Oregon
14 articles 0 photos 69 comments

Favorite Quote:
If ignorance is bliss, why is our country so complicated?

This poem seriously hits home for me, and I love it. I think using caps for "To drown you out" was really awesome. I like it a lot. c:

on Aug. 17 2011 at 5:08 pm
hworld123 SILVER, Boston, Massachusetts
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I partially agree with you here... I think that the use of parentheses is a cool touch; however the second use of a dash does seem a bit random and disrupts the flow of the piece. Author, your use of capitals at the end was effective.

on Aug. 16 2011 at 3:38 pm
Kev-Girl SILVER, Plymouth, Indiana
5 articles 0 photos 86 comments

Favorite Quote:
Life is a maybe. Death is for sure. Sin is the cause. Christ is the cure. :)

Love is the breath of God, and prayer is the melody that makes it sing.

If you cant annoy someone, there's no point in writing.

Love is overrated, marry for money.

good job! i realy liked this!        

on Aug. 16 2011 at 1:28 pm
megsloveslions GOLD, Thomasville, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
Live like there's no tommorow

I really liked it, the message, and how it rhymed in certain places

msn9896 GOLD said...
on Aug. 16 2011 at 12:47 pm
msn9896 GOLD, Billings, Montana
11 articles 0 photos 31 comments

Favorite Quote:
I have my own particular sorrows, loves, delights; and you have yours. But sorrow, gladness, yearning, hope, love, belong to all of us, in all times and in all places. Music is the only means whereby we feel these emotions in their universality. ~H.A. Overstreet

I really liked it, the meaning was something I could relate to :)

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on Aug. 15 2011 at 6:02 am
cheryl0424, West Covina, California
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Favorite Quote:
"We don’t read and write poetry because it’s cute. We read and write poetry because we are members of the human race. And the human race is filled with passion. And medicine, law, business, engineering, these are noble pursuits and necessary to sustain life. But poetry, beauty, romance, love, these are what we stay alive for. To quote from Whitman, “O me! O life!… of the questions of these recurring; of the endless trains of the faithless… of cities filled with the foolish; what good amid these, O me, O life?” Answer. That you are here - that life exists, and identity; that the powerful play goes on and you may contribute a verse. That the powerful play *goes on* and you may contribute a verse. What will your verse be?"— John Keating

I like the message and the movement of this piece. Well done.

on Aug. 14 2011 at 10:48 pm
merelyacitizen DIAMOND, Waynesville, North Carolina
64 articles 2 photos 10 comments

Favorite Quote:
I reject your reality and substitute my own.

I enjoyed this one! I was able to relate to it very well. Also, nice rhyme scheme in certain places.

on Aug. 14 2011 at 9:56 pm
WithPenAndScript DIAMOND, Venetia, Pennsylvania
72 articles 232 photos 252 comments

Favorite Quote:
I believe that no matter who you are we all leave footprints on this Earth

Very, VERY nice. I enjoyed this

on Aug. 14 2011 at 7:36 pm
Regs_the_Shorty GOLD, Frankfort, Illinois
13 articles 0 photos 129 comments

Favorite Quote:
There are people who finish what they start and.....

EXTREMELY GOOD!!!!!

on Aug. 14 2011 at 3:28 pm
JoPepper PLATINUM, Annandale, Virginia
35 articles 0 photos 782 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Freedom is the ability to not care what the other person thinks."

"Not all those who wander are lost" --JRR Tolkien

"When you are listening to music it is better to cover your eyes than your ears." --Jose' Bergamin

This is very good ,good job keep writing!!!!! :D

on Aug. 14 2011 at 12:09 am
IAmWhoIWantToBe PLATINUM, Manila, Other
41 articles 0 photos 650 comments

Favorite Quote:
‎"I’m learning how to drown out the constant noise that is such an inseparable part of my life. I don’t have to prove anything to anyone. I only have to follow my heart and concentrate on what I want to say to the world: I run my world." - Beyoncé

I'm not quite sure about your use of dash and parenthesis. I think they're a little off. Other than that, this poem is good. :">

on Aug. 13 2011 at 1:39 pm
JerseyGirl716 BRONZE, Central, New Jersey
2 articles 0 photos 92 comments

Favorite Quote:
"We gain strength, and courage, and confidence by each experience in which we really stop to look fear in the face... we must do that which we think we cannot." -Eleanor Roosevelt

Thank you SO much! That just made my day :)

on Aug. 12 2011 at 8:04 pm
PaigeStreet PLATINUM, Juneau, Alaska
47 articles 0 photos 218 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Stay golden"
- Johnny (The Outsiders, S. E. Hinton)

holy cow this is great.