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Unwanted Rain MAG

June 18, 2008
By Katie Barasch, South Salem, NY

Rain struck the glass
smearing my face
smearing hers;
distorted mouth
twisted nose
smoky eyes
drops on the windowpane
the car pulls away
taking me with it
and leaving her
behind.

© Garrett M., Port Angeles, WA

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Zelda2h2 said...
on Jun. 7 2011 at 11:15 am
Beautiful. Even though it's short, it's too the point and you can feel the emotion behind it.
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on Feb. 19 2010 at 9:45 pm
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Even thou its short but its worth reading! luv it!

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on Dec. 4 2009 at 3:00 pm
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Wonderful. Great work. There is almost like a whole story in those few lines. Keep up the good work!
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Beautiful.
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on May. 21 2009 at 10:57 pm
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I got the entire story in those few lines. I really liked everything about it; short and sweet.
Jayna Ji SILVER said...
on Feb. 20 2009 at 7:11 am
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I like how you put together the imagery of staring out a car window on a rainy day... Absolutely gorgeous.
Stormy15 said...
on Dec. 26 2008 at 8:07 pm
This is really short, to me it's to short not anoff time to really tell your story but still it was cute not great but cute ;)
conkiemonstar said...
on Dec. 18 2008 at 4:23 pm
Very nice